Writing Group: You Are Cordially Invited (PRIVATE)

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This week’s writing group prompt is:

 

You Are Cordially Invited

 

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An invitation is a doorway. Instead of opening from one space into another, it opens into a social sphere.

When you are invited, you are welcome.

The trouble with this is that social spheres are very complex, and the act of welcoming one does not instantaneously guarantee that they’re also wanted. Even when they are, there’s no guarantee it’s for a noble reason. You might be invited into a circle just to be swarmed and eaten alive. You might be invited in for a demonstration of kindness, and then forgotten.

There are countless stories about this corridor between spheres. Imagine, some strange creature in the forest has extended an invitation for you to see their secret glade, and there you are, caught between doors, wondering at the intent. Or imagine you’re a ghost, beckoned back toward life by a ring of held hands. Or, more simply, imagine you’re invited someplace you’ve always wanted to go, but where your life partner can’t. You know it will harm them to be deserted, but do you seize the opportunity?

It’s an incredibly dynamic space to explore.

Just one thing to remember: whatever invitation you extend, make it clear. This is a cordial offer. There can be no question about the offer on the table.

What it will be like to accept? To decline? To be caught, indecisive?

That is your story for the week.

 

 

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90 responses to “Writing Group: You Are Cordially Invited (PRIVATE)”

  1. Blood Suckers
    by Brickosaur

    “Poor sap didn’t know what they were agreeing to when they bought this,” said Sebastian, grinning at the giant, brightly-colored mat on the single-story porch. ALL ARE WELCOME! it hollered in all caps. “But hey, free meal. Gullible people make for easy gain.”

    He prepped his lockpick, but there was no need. The door was unlocked. The trio crossed the threshold easily and stepped inside. Sebastian echolocated to get a feel for the place. No breathers around. But there was a basement, and he thought he detected life there. There was definitely movement. “They’re downstairs,” he whispered.

    Valkyrie nodded and headed for the stairs, the others on her heels. Sebastian was already dizzy with the thought of getting his fill. The friendly ones always seemed to have the sweetest blood.

    On the bottom landing, the trio pinpointed the target and made a game plan in practiced sign language. Fan out and surround the victim, then pounce. On Valkyrie’s signal . . .

    NOW!
    Sebastian threw open the basement door and beelined for the mortal. But before he reached his target, searing pain seized him. A second too late, he felt all the holy items spaced around the room. It was instant, head-splitting agony.

    From the surprised screams beside Sebastian, the others must’ve felt it too. They collapsed, just as something came down on them. A cage, stinking of iron and silver. It rendered Sebastian utterly helpless.

    A figure stepped up and crouched before them. The breather had bright eyes and a wide, friendly smile. “So glad you could make it!” she sang. “Welcome to our little party.”

    She made a showy gesture behind her, and the basement lit up purple. Black light illuminated many writhing, hissing shapes on the far walls. With horror, Sebastian realized what he was looking at:

    Dozens of chained-up vampires. And he was about to join them.

    “Don’t worry, I’ll let you out to eat,” the mortal continued cheerily. “As long as you cooperate. I have big plans for you–assassinations, espionage. Enforcement. Such powerful toys you are. After all, gullible people make for easy gain!”

    1. revisis Avatar
      revisis

      *claps hands audibly* HA! I love me some plot-twisty Urban fantasy! This smells like a fantasy version of the Suicide Squad!

      I love the idea of Vampires having been able to use “loopholes” to enter houses even without a spoken invitation.
      Welcome mat? walk right in!
      Sign saying “Welcome all into my home?” Free entrace!
      And heck maybe some politician on TV saying “Everyone is welcome in my house to discuss issues”

      I love the twist and hope we see more from this Urban Fantasy world!

  2. minergirl778 (aka frogfireFantasy) Avatar
    minergirl778 (aka frogfireFantasy)

    “Call to Adventure”
    By minergirl778 (aka frogfireFantasy)

    “Hey Marshal, what would you think about joining me for a mission?”

    Marshal stopped mid pour. “A…what?”

    Daisy was barely phased as she sipped her hot cocoa “I know I’m always talking about my missions with you… Maybe you’d want to come on one with me sometime?”

    Well, that certainly was a wild idea. He thought for a moment and set down the biscuits, “Like… an Angel mission?”

    “Yeah!” She munched on a cookie. “It’sh fow Alishia-,” she finished her cookie, “-but I can bring help!”

    “She…er…won’t get mad?” He stirred his tea tentatively.

    “Not at all!” She beamed. “I… think she won’t at least. She’s never gotten mad at me for bringing someone before!”

    “Right. And uh…” He brushed a bit of scraggly hair back from his face. “What would this… mission entail?”

    “That’s the fun part!” She beamed. “It could be anything!”

    “Anything?”

    “Anything!”

    He gulped. “Any… death defying… sharp toothed… face melting… thing?”

    She saw where this was going, “Oh, No! Not like that! I would never take you on something too dangerous! You’re too…uh…” she searched her brain for a word to describe her companion, “…brittle!”

    He didn’t know whether to be relieved or upset. “Well, from what you’ve told me, your missions seem awfully dangerous. What could I possibly do to help?”

    “Not all my missions are super dangerous, y’know!” She retorted. “I just have fun with the dangerous ones! The ones that ain’t are tough… But that’s where you come in!” She flopped down on the couch beside him.

    “When I need a set of smart eyes for a no-punch mission, I can call you! You’re good with biology, right? Maybe you could help me sort out plant stuff!”

    “Plant AND animal!” He interjected, but the proposal left him in thought.

    As he thought, Daisy leaned over with a cheeky smile, “Inter-Dimensional discoverieeeeeees!! Magical new woooooooooorlds!!!!!! Hanging out with meeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!!!!! Soooooooooooo?”

    Gah, this girl was going to get him killed one day….

    …But how could he resist science?

    “…Ok, what should I do first?”

    1. Twangyflame0 Avatar
      Twangyflame0

      This is very adorable. I love the dynamic of Marshal and Daisy and I can see them working very well together. I can see the embarrassment all over Marshal’s as Daisy might doing something cute. Very well done.

    2. Adorable interaction here! I really enjoy the characterization of the two people here. They really seem to have a fun dynamic. It’s always interesting to see how things play out between people of vastly different power levels or abilities, which seems to be what’s going on here. Yet they’re so comfortable with each other I could totally believe they’re longtime friends or family.
      Great job, Froggy! I hope I get to read more of these guys.

    3. Gregory Hess Avatar
      Gregory Hess

      I love this so much. “How could he resist science” is a mood. Yes, this gal is probably going to get him killed some day. Or not, he might be able to dodge that fate. But I still love how he seems to have this love hate relationship with daisy, but the final push is all the science he will get to do. They are both so cute, I love it. Good stuff.

  3. “A Devious Invitation”
    By Derek McEldowney (Deviacon)

    The aged parchment envelope was sealed with emerald green wax, stamped in the image of a crow. It rested plainly on the Writers desk. He didn’t know how it had gotten there. He kept the doors to his office locked when he wasn’t there, and he would have remembered receiving such a unique looking letter in the mail.

    Truth be told, it wasn’t much of an office, a closet with a desk and a window more like. He had stuffed it with all of the literary and academic novelties he had both personally enjoyed, and always admired the aesthetics of. Fountain pens and candlesticks and ink wells and dozens of other curios. He tried his hardest to make it look and feel like a study out of one of his favorite novels.

    He picked up the envelope and flipped it over, there was no address or name; it was completely blank. He pulled a letter opener from his desk drawer, secretly relishing the opportunity to use it for once. He happily slashed open the sealed wax emblem and pulled the folded parchment letter from its matching envelope.

    He carefully unfolded the letter and began reading aloud to himself.

    “To whom it may concern,

    You have been cordially invited to participate in the Devious Tales Twisted Reviews. While you may have many questions such as what that is, what it means, and who I am, rest assured: only the important ones will be answered.”

    He felt his blood rush with excitement, his mind riddled with intrigue. The letter was just like the beginning of some dark and dreary story fallen right into his hands.
    The letter asked that he submit his best piece of writing for… dissection? That of all the stories submitted, various pieces would be saved, many more would be killed, and only those with the most promising potential would be properly corrupted into something truly deserving of the title “Devious.”

    He fell into his chair and with a nervous hand picked up a pen. It would just be stories… right?

    1. PixieWings Avatar
      PixieWings

      This is such a fun set up. I love the word choice in the second half of the letter. Stories being killed or corrupted and what that might mean is such an interesting question to leave the reader with. I also really like the character building in the beginning paragraphs. He’s clearly not a terribly successful writer yet if his office is in a closet, and he has all this writer paraphernalia that it’s implied he never actually uses. It makes perfect sense why he’d be excited to be invited to write for them.

      I also think I maybe found a typo? In the second paragraph, should “in wells” be “ink wells?”

      Really excellent work!

      1. Arghhh typos. Thank you, will fix!

    2. minergirl778 (aka frogfireFantasy) Avatar
      minergirl778 (aka frogfireFantasy)

      Oooooh! I love this! The descriptions are really good. It really paints a picture of this character! And makes it all the more compelling when you see that trace of mystery at the end. What’s going to happen to our hero? Nobody knows! Overall, this is super good! Good job, and can’t wait to see more!

    3. Gregory Hess Avatar
      Gregory Hess

      Nitpick
      “dozens more”. Dozens more what? Trinkets?

      It’s a trap! The red flags are everywhere dude. Any thing that describes a story being killed seems suspect to me, and the others aspects seem so weird. I love how he is so tempted to respond and how the prompt plays in too. The office is a nice touch and really shows how this character lives and how they want to be a writer but really haven’t gotten anything published yet. I also appreciate how the character gets that this situation may not be the best of news.

      1. Hmm I hadn’t thought about how vague that came across, I should edit to clarify. Thanks for the input!

  4. DesOttsel Avatar
    DesOttsel

    Adrenaline Addict
    by Gage Jarman

    She smiled back at the passengers as she jumped out the plane screaming. Her heart rocketed. Excitement pumped through her veins. Goosebumps were plucked up by the rushing wind. She grinned; instantly, her cheeks puffed out like a chipmunk. She checked the altimeter and pulled the cord. The parachute released tangled, rapidly twisting in the wall of air. She grabbed her knife, hacking at the cords overhead. She fumbled the knife. The wind ripped it out of her grasp. The earth rapidly approached. Her heart thumped in her ears.

    *****

    “Hello there. It’s wonderful to meet you. I’m sure you have lots of questions, but first, know that you are safe. Nothing bad can happen to you here. That stays in life. Serenity is all encompassing. It’ll take some getting used to, but you’ll learn, you’ll find peace, and you’ll bask in the pure energy of Nirvana. Welcome. We look forward to spending eternity with you.”

    She looked at her hands which pulsed with energy. They looked like lightning given form or molten metal. Her stomach dropped, only it didn’t. She thought it would. She knew it should, but now, she felt… She didn’t know what she was.

    She sprinted away. The realm was beautiful, too beautiful. Everything was overly saturated with vivid colors. A path continually formed in front of her through the lush landscape. She reached a crest, overlooking a valley. She wished it was a cliff. She wished she had a wingsuit. The earth shifted and so did her form. She stood a second before leaping off the new cliff. Her descent was far too slow. She practically floated through the air, and any hazards gave a wide berth.

    She landed and fell to her knees. This wasn’t right. There was no risk. She didn’t feel alive. She wasn’t alive. A knife apparated into her hand. She stabbed down at her arm, but the blade bent away. She tried to cry. She tried to cry. She punched the ground, and she tried to cry.

    “Is something wrong? You do not have to worry. You are safe here.”

    1. minergirl778 (aka frogfireFantasy) Avatar
      minergirl778 (aka frogfireFantasy)

      Ooooh, man! Very interesting! Someone who’s been wanting danger their whole life being put into a place where all you can be is safe! It’s one of the big things people have about heaven as a weird concept, since yknow, eternal paradise. You do really well exploring it! Being safe is the LAST thing she wants to be, and yet… here she is! Can’t wait to see where this goes, good job!

  5. PixieWings Avatar
    PixieWings

    Sunshower (Aden and the Fae)
    By PixieWings

    It had been raining, Aden remembered.

    The downpour had slapped him in the face, shocking him with cold and soaking him through. He’d been trying to shoulder his car out of the mud and the treeline of the woods did little to protect him. He’d been leaving his parents house. Or maybe it was his sister that lived in the forest?

    He couldn’t remember.

    He’d been unsticking his car. And he’d been upset about something.

    “Just…do this one thing for me!”

    “Just the one?” She had asked.

    It wasn’t so much the rain had stopped. More it hung suspended in the air, unable to touch the trail of sunlight paving a path from his car into the trees.

    “Hello?” Aden had called, immediately feeling like a jackass.

    “Hello! Are you going to come dry off, little one?”

    So he had.

    He had followed the light, and there was a woman. At the time her beauty had struck any questions from his tongue, but when he tried to recall her face, the features blotted together like an overexposed photo.

    “Such tears on so pretty a face! What could be ailing one so fair?”

    Her hands were warm against his cheeks and it had seeped down into his limbs, pooling pleasantly beneath his ribs.

    “Tell me.”

    The knot in his throat had come loose.

    “Everything’s so much…I don’t know…Maybe something’s wrong with me.”

    “So overwhelmed. You want a break from it all.”

    “But I was…”

    Doing something? He couldn’t remember. His head had felt fuzzy, too warm, like he’d fallen asleep in a sunbeam.

    “You’re welcome to rest as long as you like. The word of Queen Titania is law.” She’d pressed a kiss to his neck, sending an enjoyable tingle down his spine. “But you’ve yet to give me your name.”

    “My name’s Aden.”

    A snap of pain, like a noose of fire cracking taught against his throat.

    After that, it was all a dream.

    Until-

    “Ow!”

    A sting of thorns at his wrist.

    And the patter of rabbit paws.

    “Run! This way!”

    There was something behind him.

    He’d run.

    1. Gregory Hess Avatar
      Gregory Hess

      Oh no. A fairy tricked him into giving his name. I like how you portray the fair folk as beautiful, but hard to understand. I also love how you play with the idea of someone helping him out. Who knows if they are truly helpful or have their own goals and motives.

    2. I really like the descriptive language you use in this story. The contrast from the rain to the warm light that seems to obstruct Aden’s thoughts is well played. I love the way you describe the fae being so beautiful and yet Aden’s unable to picture her in his mind. To me that comes across as a wonderful description of literal incomprehensible beauty. I’m left with so many questions and want to know more about what’s going on!

  6. Gregory Hess Avatar
    Gregory Hess

    “Questline” [Aleph null sci fi]
    By gregovin

    Now that I know this world isn’t real, it’s kind of obvious in hindsight. For example, the Queen of Zareel put a request out to find and bring her daughter back to the castle, the princess Molosophe. Why someone more qualified or associated with the queen was not sent should have been a relevant question, but it seemed so … normal.

    After the mountain ceased to be and returned, I’ve been thinking and there are so many incidents like this, and so have my friends.

    Now, after returning the princess, we received a letter inviting us to a ball for our actions, and telling us our reward awaits. Or, at least that’s what we think it is trying to tell us, for half way through the letter becomes garbled and messy. Weird things like this seem to be becoming more common. The world is breaking. But what do we do about it? We can’t hit the bad guy with spells or punch the problem in the face. We’ve tried sending messages to the outside world, but no response. I fear the worst. Our rotating hab may have been breached.

    And so I ask the question: “should we tell them?”

    “Who? Tell who what?” a friend responds.

    “Everyone. Should we tell everyone that this world is not what it seems”

    “How would we show that? Will it drive them mad?”

    “We seem to be fine with the knowledge. And with all the glitches, proving it should be trivial. There’s a good chance this world doesn’t have long anyways. We should give people a chance to remember.”

    1. Neat premise, and execution of it, Greg. I’m not sure I interpreted this right, but it looks like your answer to the prompt is the idea of people getting invited into a virtual or otherwise simulated world. There are, of course, the literal ball invitation and request to save the princess, so it’s fun to see it on multiple levels.

      You also touch on an interesting ethical question here. When do you go Adam Ruins Everything on someone? Are there times when they’re better off not knowing?

      In any case, there’s a really cool, somber feeling at the end of this. I like it a lot 🙂

  7. WolfsbaneX Avatar
    WolfsbaneX

    “The Plot”
    By Hemming Sebastian Bane

    Hjortur Vargsen straightened his cravat with his clockwork hand. This was the address on the invitation; surely this must be the place. The Fae took a deep breath and steeled himself before knocking on the door. The apartment door opened to reveal a three-foot tall Fae.

    “Ambassador Vargsen?” he asked, inspecting the fylgia.

    “Ja,” Vargsen replied, taking off his top hat. “This is the right place?”

    The butler nodded. “May I take your hat and coat?”

    The ambassador offered them to the small Fae, who took them without remark.

    “You are the last to arrive,” the butler informed him. “Everyone is waiting on you.”

    The smaller Fae gestured to a hallway. Vargsen thanked him, walking down the hallway into a dining room. There four Fae sat at the table talking amongst themselves. The elf sitting at the head of the table looked over and smiled.

    “By the Heptadeka, Hjortur Vargsen has joined us at last!” he exclaimed.

    “Dakio Sainport, you scoundrel!” the fylgia roared with a laugh.

    “You’re more a scoundrel than I, old friend,” Sainport retorted, his smile not waning. “Ambassador! Who would have thought?”

    “Well, you know life has its twists and turns,” Vargsen replied, his laughing dwindling to a chuckle.

    “Indeed. Come sit! We must catch up,” the elf said, gesturing to an empty chair to his right.

    Vargsen smiled, gave his friend a hug and took his place at the table. The evening went on as the diners conversed and ate. It wasn’t long after the meal was done that Sainport stood and tapped his wine glass with a knife.

    “Ladies and gentlemen, may I have your attention?” he announced, his face more stern.

    The room fell quiet.

    “You are likely wondering why we are having this dinner in an apartment and not my estate.”

    Vargsen nodded, meeting his friend’s gaze.

    Sainport sighed heavily. “I must speak of an important and private matter. You see, my financiers wish to push me out of Woven Armor Industries. They intend to dock worker pay and increase prices to line their own pockets. In short, I need your help.”

    1. WolfsbaneX Avatar
      WolfsbaneX

      Pronunciation Guide:

      Hjortur: “hee-or-ter”
      Ja: “ya”

    2. Twangyflame0 Avatar
      Twangyflame0

      I find this really interesting. From the way everyone’s talking and speaking, I want to imagine a big gigantic mansion that is worth a ludicrous amount. But then I remind myself that these are fae. What if the mansion isn’t made of brick and motor but one giant tree that stretches high up into the sky, maybe even past a couple of clouds. I’m also interested in what fae have to do with an arms manufacturing company. Very well done, Wolf.

  8. Rest for the Weary
    By NocteVesania

    “Take the civilians to the dining hall! Check the basement, there might be more there!” Belle barks orders across the ballroom.

    Taking over the Moon Feast Ball was much easier than they thought. Just a few threats and they have the place to themselves.

    “Keep loading the loot,” Belle orders, her stance tense as ever. “Take what ammunition you can carry, burn the rest!”

    Belle rubs her eyelids, trying to keep herself awake. She has overworked herself these past few days and the fatigue is finally getting to her.

    From across the ballroom, Zeke watches Belle wearily take a seat. He whispers something to a crewman’s ear before sneaking into the dining hall.

    After a moment, that same crewman walks over to Belle, glass of wine in hand. He offers it to Belle, who is staring blankly out the window. Without thinking, Belle grabs the glass and gulps it down. After a second, she shifts her gaze towards him.

    “Wait, what is the meaning of this? Who told you to stop working?” Belle stares daggers at him.

    The crewman steps aside, revealing what’s behind him. Standing in the middle of the ballroom floor is Zeke. In his breast pocket is a single flower, suspiciously identical to that of the decorations. Music slowly fills the room, the band playing once again. Zeke walks towards Belle, then offers his hand.

    “A dance, Miss Yorke?”

    “It would be my honor, Sir Sterling,” Belle remarks as she takes his hand with a smile.

    They walk to the center of the ballroom and, hand in hand, they waltz around, letting their worries go for a while. As the music fades, so do they slow to a halt. Everything seems to fade away as they stand there, staring at each other’s eyes.

    BOOM

    “An attack?! Look alive!” Belle shouted, grasping her firearm.

    A crewman rushed in. “No, ma’am! It’s just the ammunition burning!”

    Zeke puts his hand over Belle’s. She eases up.

    She chuckles, wrapping her arms around Zeke, “it’s just you and me tonight.”

    The gunpowder blast with glee like fireworks under the full moon.

    1. WolfsbaneX Avatar
      WolfsbaneX

      This was so sweet. This was almost a subversion of storytelling; usually we have establishment of the situation, then the situation intensifies before settling down again. Here, tension is high to begin with, then the situation calms down before a brief moment of stress and a return to rest. Nice job, Nocte. This was wonderful piece.

  9. Tale Foundry Avatar
    Tale Foundry

    Incredible Patience
    ~by DukkiFluff~

    I sigh, glancing at my phone screen again. He still hadn’t seen any of my messages, and he certainly hadn’t texted me back.

    I watched people come and go. Every time that door opened, I’d look up, hopeful, only to be let down again.

    Biting my lip, I unlock my phone for the… however many-eth time, and send him another text.

    “Where are you?”

    I wait. And wait. And wait.

    Still no answer.

    I groan. I’d already been waiting in this coffee shop for more than an hour. He invited me out, and now he was nowhere to be seen. I tried to keep a rein on my thoughts so they wouldn’t spiral out of control, but… one had to wonder…

    Had I been stood up? Would he really do that to me? No, of course not. He’s a sweetheart. He’s way too nice for that… right?

    I check my messages again. Still nothing.

    “Oh, come on…” I mutter to myself.

    Maybe I should just go home. I’ve already been here long past the allowed time, and I hadn’t even ordered anything. I’m loitering at this point. I’m surprised they haven’t asked me to leave…

    I shift in my seat, stuck between getting comfortable and getting up to leave. I settle back in the chair. I know exactly what’ll happen if I go; I’ll leave, he’ll show up, and we’ll just miss each other. Murphy’s Law.

    What if he did stand me up? What if he just thought this was some big joke?

    No.

    He wouldn’t… would he?

    More people bustle about. More chiming of the door alarm. More looking up in hope, then back down in disappointment.

    Another chime. I look up, and there he is. Two hours late.

    I stand up, and can’t stop the smile from blooming across my face at his embarrassed and apologetic expression.

    “I’m so, so sorry.” He huffs, walking with me outside.

    I giggle, “You’re just lucky I’m patient. But, now you owe me frozen yogurt.”

    He smiled, “Absolutely.”

    “Alright,” I giggle, taking his arm, “Start explaining.”

    He laughed, exasperated. “Helluva story…”

    1. MasaCur Avatar
      MasaCur

      Oooh, I know where you got this!
      This was cute. I really enjoyed it. It was very wholesome.
      One small nitpick, however. This sentence here: ” I tried to keep a reign on my thoughts…” should be “keep a rein on…” as in reining in, like a horse.
      Otherwise, I really enjoyed it.

    2. Twangyflame0 Avatar
      Twangyflame0

      This is a very cute story. My only question is the origin of the story. I really like the anxiety you set in this story for the POV character. Part of me is kind of suspicious of why it took a person two whole hours to get to a pre-arranged date, but part of me wants to keep it a cute moment. Very well done, Dukki.

    3. WolfsbaneX Avatar
      WolfsbaneX

      I have experienced this before and I have to say, you have evoked those emotions perfectly. Everything the narrator does before their date arrives is very socially awkward, which is endearing. I especially enjoyed the “should I stay or should I go” aspect just before he shows up. Nice job, Dukki.

    4. Gregory Hess Avatar
      Gregory Hess

      Oh, I remember this story. This really happened to you, didn’t it. I love how you tell your story here. You do a great job placing us in your shoes. I also love your depiction of Gatte. This whole story gets like 10 times more wholesome with this context in mind and it’s glorious. Good job dukki

    5. revisis Avatar
      revisis

      Oh dear, that person has a far bigger patience and understanding than I ever could have xD

      Also nice twist on the prompt, a delayed arrival to an inviation. 200 IQ twist xD

      I really like your depiction of her mental back and forth, the justifications she uses to try and quell doubt, but also the rising resignation.

      1A story! Now id like to hear his :p

  10. Laribhaven Avatar
    Laribhaven

    A Wedding invitation
    By: Larissa (Lari B. Haven)

    “Alex dear, please keep up!” Santine shouted, diving from the puffy clouds to a nearby roof.

    “I would keep up if you stopped changing air currents all the time!” Alex shouted back.

    Santine sorted through the batch of letters and memorized the route she would take next. As she let the wings release steam waiting for her apprentice, she smiled, her eyes still on the letters.

    “As I always say: Work smarter, not har…”

    Santine stared blankly at the single white envelope, the cursive golden letters taunted her.

    “That disgusting man! He really did it this time!” She angrily shouted.

    Alex took the paper out of her hands and analyzed it. A wedding invitation. It was unusual for her coworker to lose her calm and finesse in front of others. The name of the woman was of the wealthy widow of the region displayed right below the name of a man Santine used to speak about.

    So she quickly realized why she was so upset. For Santine, that forsaken invitation was the greatest offense life could ever have given her.

    The woman meddled with the envelope in her fingers, caught the pouch from Santine’s hips, and took the rest of the invitations.

    “It’s doable, maybe in twenty minutes at max…”

    “What’re you going to do?”

    “Deliver it!” Alex answered nonchalantly, shaking the little envelope in her hands. “You stay here and recompose yourself. When I came back we can do something fun!”

    From afar, the broken-hearted woman saw her apprentice down, flying all over the neighborhood like she was on a demented chase. When she came back in the promised time, she held with a bag of rotten eggs and handed it to her.

    “Now tell me… How about we play a prank on that wicked man?”

    “We’re going to get caught Alex, dear…” She laughed.

    “That’s the plan!” Alex let out a mischievous smile.

    It was petty revenge, but Santine was already with eggs in hand.

    “Well, I think I know where he might be…”

    1. DukkiFluff Avatar
      DukkiFluff

      Aww this is so cute!
      The dynamic between them is so sweet and wholesome. And the fact that Alex took over for Santine so quickly and nonchalantly really speaks to how well they get along.

      This guy sounds like a sleazeball, and given the hint that he and Santine have history… and obviously not the good kind… I’m really hoping one of those eggs goes through an open window and hits him.

      *Throw one for me too, ladies~*

      Well done, Lari ^^ I always love reading your stuff.

    2. I love this! The smug nature of Santine in the first part is expressed well, which makes it that much more interesting when that characterization comes crumbling down upon seeing the letter. Her dynamic with Alex is also quite interesting. Santine being down for Alex’s antics just seems like a fun way to break character for a bit. Great job!

  11. The Assassin Avatar
    The Assassin

    Invitation
    By TheAssassin

    Hello You! Yes, YOU!

    You have been cordially invited to The Event.

    Peculiar, I know. Invited to a mysterious event by a stranger you don’t even know.

    But you are not alone. There are others, many others, who will join you. Perhaps they will rise far above you, reaching for the stars, or you may the one above. It does not matter. All are welcome, all are equal. Veteran or newcomer, erratic or consistent, none shall be counted above another in quality. We are all seeking to find the same thing after all.

    But who am I?

    Well, nobody. In fact, I am, myself, new. However, this is of no consequence.

    I see your eyes. I see the way they waver at my words. Who am I in relation to You?

    Well, it’s quite simple really.

    We are all connected. The same purpose sets our minds alight and the same desires rest upon our shoulders. You are, after all, Here, with Me. If what I say is not true, then, well, you would be far away…

    Many are lost. They wander still the grey lands, searching for Us. I wish they could see… I wish the world would know…

    And soon they shall.

    With You, Me, and the Others

    We will find them. We will save them
    .
    But you are not lost. You have found the way. You are Here, with Me, with the Others. So then, why have We waited so long? What has held us back? Is it perhaps that we didn’t know? Or because we did not want to know.

    Fear can do that. Poison our minds against triumph. But we are strong, and we can push back the fear of discovery. Let us not wait any longer, some are still in need.

    I know what must be done. I know what WE are capable of. Let the world be a sprawling canvas for our minds, let us join together and rise!

    The Day of The Event will come.

    The only question that remains is on that day…

    Will you answer the call?

    1. jesse fisher Avatar
      jesse fisher

      Well that is awesome, I love how you took the prompt and ran with the idea of meta narrative. Also you made this very inviting while having a creepy undertone through out the whole piece.

    2. After reading this, I almost feel as if I’ve been invited to join a cult. Great job! I enjoyed the direction you took for the prompt: writing the invitation itself rather than a character’s reaction to an invitation. Altogether it was a very interesting read.

    3. Gregory Hess Avatar
      Gregory Hess

      I love how the sender speaks without actually telling us anything about what we are invited too and why we should go. It’s got it’s fair share of red flags and that’s cool. I also like how direct they are too. This feels like inter dimensional spam mail, and that’s glorious. Good job!

  12. jesse fisher Avatar
    jesse fisher

    A Summons of Death

    By Jesse Fisher

    Both Korun and Oleander were shocked when the letter appeared at the bar. More so they even got one, as unless you know the access point in a world it is just a void outside and the bar is not known outside of the patrons so that did not narrow the list down.

    It looked like a preindustrial world from the wax seal, and how it was pressed with a griffon symbol on it. The metallic yellow sand dragoness looked to the heterochromic eyed man as he opened the letter.

    “It saids we are invited to watch a corrupter that attempted to sway the holy one Gangrel.” Korun read out looking to the goddess.

    Oleander thought back to the other night before enjoying some time with the handsome man next to her.

    “I know that name, but can’t place it mostly because of how many came that night.” The dragoness set her claw under her chin as her robe rode up on her shoulder. “I know she was single that night, but several others were similar.”

    A look of concern came over Korun’s face, almost causing his mustache to go straight.

    “Hey Ol, where is Demon? He was not grumbling when I came down to get ready after last night.”

    “I did notice the lack of the grumpy dog but I just thought he was sleeping in or he…” The dragoness noticed the look of man that made her heart flutter. Putting two and two together Oleander’s mood shifted. “Wait, he had a one night stand and is now going to be sent to die?”

    “It seems so.” Korun replied as he pulled out a tented closed sign.

    “What are we going to do?” The dragoness then noticed Korun had instantly changed from a formal attire to a gladiator outfit, if not for the cause of this she would so jump his bones.

    “I aint letting anyone die under my watch if I can help it.”

    Using his powers over the bar he had the letter summon a door to the world.

    “Come my love we have work to do.”

    1. Interesting take on the prompt! I love that you’ve really sold how Oleander feels about Korun, the little details just seem adorable to me. I did find the first part a bit confusing, especially the contents of the invitation. My initial impression was that the corruptor was getting married to this Gangrel, I didn’t get that the corruptor was getting executed until later on. Though, I think this was just an oversight and is easily fixable with a few read-throughs. Still, I believe this is a novel idea and the actions and intentions are pretty well written. Great job!

      1. jesse fisher Avatar
        jesse fisher

        Thank you, also it was my second plan. I would have done a fight scene but the invite prompt won so time to get more people involved. and ya this is very much a direct follow up to the last one.

  13. Samantha DeShong Avatar
    Samantha DeShong

    “Dinner with a Devil”
    by Samantha Realynn

    The invitation sat on the table, ink shining in the light of the lamp. Maybe it was a trick, but I swore I could smell dried blood on the parchment. It wouldn’t surprise me if that was the ink. That fiend’s depravity knew no bounds.

    I could feel my stomach lurch as I read the words inviting me to dinner at its home. Safe passage to and back was promised, as was polite conversation. Just simple, civil, conversation. A suit had even been provided. It lay beside the invitation. Fine silk and shades of red that would compliment me well. I didn’t put it on, but I knew it would fit me. It always knew.

    I didn’t want to go. That devil had been tormenting me for years now. I was afraid to leave my house even in the day. After sunset was impossible now. It had already taken me twice. Each time I woke up in my bedroom with no memory of the night before, save a vicious bite mark on my neck. I would scour my entire body after, feeling unclean despite no other signs anywhere else. The thing that had a taste for me at least had some decency.

    I didn’t understand its obsession with me and I didn’t want to feed it. I could burn the suit and the letter. I could continue to hideaway in my home. It couldn’t enter, or so the legends said. Not without my permission and that it didn’t have.

    And yet, the suit and letter had been waiting for me when I came home from my scavenging for food.

    I would have nightmares of it, standing above my bed, watching me. Sometimes, I could just make out a face. It was handsome enough, but the eyes were so dark and vicious. Lord of this land and our eternal tormentor. And for whatever reason, I had attracted its interest.

    I picked up the suit with a shaking hand. I didn’t want to go. But what would it do if I refused? Gods help me, I was too afraid to find out.

    1. jesse fisher Avatar
      jesse fisher

      Oh man this was very tense and how it ends works for me. The relationship is very strong in the best worst way. I would like to see the ending of this story.

      1. Samantha R DeShong Avatar
        Samantha R DeShong

        Thank you so very much! 😊 Precisely what I was going for.

    2. Clanso Avatar
      Clanso

      Oooh I like this! You left some questions open but in a way that makes me want to read more ! Is this connected to any other work of yours ? It somehow feels like it’s a part of some larger story. A very creepy story set in a world full of monsters. Well done!

    3. GJFuller Avatar
      GJFuller

      This is a great inner monologue as the speaker tries to decide how to respond to the situation they are presented with. I could really feel their fear as I read this. What will be the result of going to this dinner, but what will be the consequences of not showing up???
      Good work!

  14. King_Nix Avatar
    King_Nix

    “Dealing With Devils”
    By King_Nix

    Henry sat at a long stone table. He hadn’t touched the food and drink laid before him. It had been two months since he was ordered to take the Bahamas for his own by that boy – no, his ‘father,’ Arthur. Arthur was young enough to be his own son. For the boy to approach him one day and adopt him was hard to wrap his head around, even with the golden ring on the chain about his neck to prove it.

    Thus, Captain – no, ‘Lord Admiral’ Henry Smith sat, having been ‘cordially invited’ to this seedy little island for a ‘business offer.’ There had been several ships operating in these waters. Ships that held strange cargo. Most claimed to be pirates, just earning a handsome fee. Some offered to give him a cut if he let them go, but he wouldn’t hear their excuses once they were being dragged under the hull of his ship.

    “Well, captain? Do we have a deal, you and I?” a weasley man across from him asked. The man, Benjamin, had an ill-favored look, like a sickly, balding rodent. Beady eyes studied Henry behind a crooked, twitching snout of a nose.

    “Your daughter looked rather ill, I must say.” Henry said, swirling the wine in his glass; it looked just a tad too red. The young, too young, girl who had poured it had been small and frail.

    “Daughter?” replied Benjamin. “Oh, her. Yes, yes, my…daughter. She is fine, fine. Work with me, and I’m sure I can have you well-acquainted with my…daughters.” The smile he wore made Henry’s stomach turn.

    Abruptly, the entryway burst open, and John, a bull of a man, brought his four-guage to bear and reduced the rat-man’s head to a fine mist. Henry rose from his chair.

    Already ignoring the gurgling stump that once was a head, Henry gestured to his men. “Come on, let’s get these children out of here.” he said. “No plunder this time. Round them up, get them out, and once we’re clear I want this entire damnable place blasted to Hell!”

    1. Glaceon373 Avatar
      Glaceon373

      Ooooh, this is very interesting. I really like your descriptions here, especially for Benjamin. In only a few words, you easily enforce just how gross he is. Your dialogue gives each character a unique voice, too. Characters aside, the story you’ve told here is great, too. Overall, this is very solid, King Nix. Nice job!

  15. MasaCur Avatar
    MasaCur

    The Holiday Party
    By MasaCur

    Kagami slumped down in the car seat, arms crossed over her chest, a frown on her lips.

    “Now, Kagami, dear, we won’t have another incident like we did last year,” her mother said, turning back to address Kagami.

    “No,” Kagami muttered. “This is dumb. Why couldn’t you let me wear heels?”

    “You’ll do less damage that way,” he father replied. “Last year, you punctured that poor Uzunari boy’s abdomen by kicking him.”

    “I’m not going to get into a fight this time, Dad!” Kagami snapped.

    “You better not, Kagami,” her mother warned. “We might not get invited back next year if you do. Now, promise you’ll behave.”

    Kagami sighed out of frustration. Things had changed. She had made friends since last year, and she knew they’d be there. “Yes, I’ll behave.”

    Her parents exited the car, and Kagami followed. “Okay, let’s get going,” Kagami’s father said. “I wonder if your sister is already here.”

    “Don’t care,” Kagami replied, smoothing her dress out with her hands. She stomped up to the door, and pulled it open. Across the lobby, she saw her friend Mayu leaning against the wall. She wore a shapeless gown with a high neck and a hem that went nearly to her ankles.

    “Hey Kagami!” Mayu yelled out, waving her over.

    Feeling a little better, Kagami skipped up to her friend. “Wow, that dress seems to look worse every year.”

    “Don’t remind me. If you see my mother, you have no idea where I am. Not that I expect her to care,” Mayu grumbled. “You look better this year. Less like the love child of a cupcake and a christmas present, more like something I wish I was wearing.”

    Kagami shrugged. “I guess.”

    “Oooh, the Uzunaris are already here!” Mayu announced. “Ari is getting me a drink so I can avoid my mom. And Aru is…”

    “Hi, Kagami,” said Aru’s deep voice from behind her. “You definitely look better this year.”

    Kagami whirled around, facing the tall boy.

    “Hey,” she mumbled, staring nervously down at the floor.

    “Did you want to dance?” he asked, giving her a wink.

    1. Twangyflame0 Avatar
      Twangyflame0

      Awwwww, this is a cute story. I’m not one for parties or dances, but I can understand the appeal of them. I’m Kagami has a group of people around her this year, though I’m curious as to what happened last year. In any case, this story was nice and uplifting for me. Very well done, Masa

    2. DukkiFluff Avatar
      DukkiFluff

      Yes, Kagami, on Aru’s behalf, please don’t injure him again XD

      It’s so nice to see how different Kagami can be. She seems sweeter, although there’s still some tsundere there.

      The pacing is great, although I probably would have broken up or rearranged the piece where her father says [“Ikay, let’s get going.”] but that could even just be personal preference.

      Overall, well done.

  16. Clanso Avatar
    Clanso

    Happy Birthday Claire
    by Claire (Clanso)

    Claire had been looking forward to her birthday. It was supposed to be a quiet evening with whatever movie she felt like and maybe a hot cup of cocoa just to treat herself. Just her, spending some time alone.

    But since things never seemed to go according to plan around Claire Fisher, she wasn’t really surprised when she heard a knock at the front door.

    When she reluctantly went to open, she almost slammed the door shut again before her visitors had the chance to come in.

    Standing in front of the door was a towering figure, staring at her with unnatural intensity. A scarf was wrapped around the lower half of its face, but Claire knew there was no mouth to cover. It was avoiding her gaze and awkwardly clutching a present.

    Next to it was another figure, about half a meter tall. It had roughly humanoid shape, was entirely black and seemed to melt into the bigger person’s shadow. It had no facial features except huge eyes that took up almost all of its head. With it’s tentacles it offered her a patch of flowers.

    Behind them Claire could see many more figures, silently waiting. People and creatures Claire knew and loved.

    And so she beckoned them inside. While they walked past her,she accepted presents, shook claws and tentacles, and anxiously waited for the face in the crowd that counted. And there she was. She looked just like Claire. “Hello” Claire managed to say, before she slipped past her and into the apartment.

    It turned out to be the quiet birthday Claire had wanted after all. None of her silent guests said a word. They a just sat on the living room floor and watched with interest as Claire selected a movie and made cocoa for everyone.

    Once everyone had a mug Claire settled down on the couch, next to her writer. When she fell asleep, Anna tucked her counterpart in before drifting of to sleep herself.

    “Happy Birthday Claire”

    1. This is adorable and I love it. I’m a little curious about all the other creatures, but you wrote the story in such a way that I don’t NEED to know more about them to enjoy this piece on its own. Once again, super adorable. I really enjoyed it.

    2. Gregory Hess Avatar
      Gregory Hess

      I love the metanarative. One question: are the creatures ones you have made up. Because, if so, that is litterally the coolest thing. Keep making stuff up, claire!

  17. GJFuller Avatar
    GJFuller

    The Changeling’s Call
    By Giovanna J. Fuller

    My grandfather was always odd.

    I’d gone to live with him after my parents died when I was very young. His wife had died before I was born and he had lived alone for years. Since I was his only grandchild, he may have spoiled me a bit.

    His house was the furthest from town, bordering the great forest in which no man wandered. The townsfolk said that it was infested, but with what no one told me. When I asked, they would give me a grave look and become silent. It was due to their cryptic warnings that I never ventured into the dense woods. However, every morning, I would watch my grandfather walk to the line of trees and stand there for hours. He didn’t do anything, but looked into the green darkness.

    My grandfather’s strangeness didn’t end there. He had a beard that fell to the end of his stomach. He was always pale and sickly looking, no matter how much he ate. However, the doctor insisted that he was as healthy as a man half his age.

    “I’ve been like this since infancy, my child,” he’d say to me with a long pipe at his lips, “I reckon I’ll be this way till I go.”

    He could sit for hours on the porch of that old house, watching the smoke clouds float up into the sky. For the longest time, I wondered about my grandfather and his mysterious nature.

    On the night before I was about to go off to college, I woke up a strange call from outside the house. Someone was calling my name, telling me to join them. Thinking it might have been my friends from town come to sneak me out of the house for one last party, I slipped out of bed and tiptoed out of the house. I didn’t see my group of friends, only my grandfather. He was walking, lantern in hand, to the line of trees.

    He took one step into the trees and his silhouette changed. The lantern fell. And he was gone.

    1. Twangyflame0 Avatar
      Twangyflame0

      OOoooooo, a very folktale-ish story I see. I really like the mysteriousness of the grandfather. I wonder if he was some sort of fae or was in a relationship of some kind with a fae creature. I’m sort of imagining the grandfather with a Gandalf-esque beard, but a little more sicklier looking. I have no idea how to figure out what grandfather is, only wisps of thoughts and conjectures. Very well done, GJ.

    2. Matthew (Handsome Johanson) Avatar
      Matthew (Handsome Johanson)

      WHAT!? How strange indeed! I don’t know how to feel about what happened. is grandpa a shapeshifter! Is a shapeshifter impersonating Grandpa to get Main character into the woods? and Why? What’s in the woods that grandpa and this being seem so interested in. and why is it so dangerous? I’m really engaged and I can’t wait to see waht happens next GJ!

      MINOR POINTS: Paragraph 5: “I reckon I’ll be this WAY ’till I go.” you misspelled “way” here. and Paragraph 3: “With what? No one told me.” I think this sentence needs a question-mark after “what.”

      Anyway, great job as always GJ 😀

    3. Excellent country style folklore. It reminds me of the stories my family told about the hills of West Virginia with more than a hint of Stephen King. On the second read, I wondered if the grandfather had made a bargain to be able to live long enough to be there for the author going to the woods each night as a part of the bargain until it was his time. Excellent Story.

    4. Samantha DeShong Avatar
      Samantha DeShong

      I love the vibe of this story. I adore just about anything that has elements of changelings and fae and people mysteriously walking off into haunted woods. It leaves me asking so many questions in all of the good ways. What was the grandfather? Was he a changeling lucky enough to survive well into adulthood? Was he something else? He had family, that blood must have passed to them. How will it affect them? This reads like folklore and it’s great.

  18. The Veriticus Meeting
    By Astrid Jones

    The invitation was still on my kitchen table when I returned from work. I’d hoped it would disappear and I could claim I never received it. Stuff got lost courtesy of the postal service every day. Unless the Wulver sent someone to ask me about it, no one would smell my lie if I said it never arrived. I scowled at the embossed card and picked it up. I couldn’t lie to the Wulver, even with an ocean between us.

    I hated planes. Stuffed into a metal tube with cranky or terrified humans was not enjoyable. The last trip I’d made for a Vertiticus Meeting, my seat had been too close to the bathrooms. Even though it was seven years ago, I wasn’t eager to re-live the experience of knowing which stewardess had admitted a passenger to the Mile-High Club. Though, I would have known no matter where I was seated.

    I threw the card down. The timing couldn’t have been worse. There were still bodies to find, no thanks to Garret Cain. On top of that, a rogue werewolf had made his presence known in my pack’s territory. There was too much to do. Dropping everything for the better part of a month didn’t appeal to me or my wolf.

    Perhaps I should pay Garret Cain a visit. The detective in charge of the case wasn’t making any headway getting the locations of the remaining bodies from him. The jail had a reputation for being haunted. If the demon dog of St. Joe County showed up in his cell, it might speed things up.

    I rummaged in my fridge for leftovers. There hadn’t been time to eat at work between sniffing for bodies and worrying about the Veriticus Meeting. My pack mates could manage one trespassing werewolf for a few weeks. At least, I hoped they could. So, the only real issue was cracking Garret Cain.

    My inner wolf settled as it accepted the plan I made while the microwave heated up my food. It looked like I would be attending the Veriticus Meeting after all.

    1. Twangyflame0 Avatar
      Twangyflame0

      First of all, I want to know anything and everything about this secret werewolf society. They sound almost mafia-like from what I’m seeing. Second of all, I love how seemingly slice-of-life this feels for this person. They just sound like a normal person trying to manage their part of a larger corporation. This was really interesting to read! Very well done.

    2. This was a very interesting read! This could be a great introduction to a larger plot, teasing readers about the world and the narrator’s nature just enough to get them hooked! The first half feels so natural and human, which makes the casual mention of wolves and werewolves at the midpoint that much more appealing. Overall, the intrigue your piece presents is top notch, leaving readers wanting more. Great job!

    3. Clanso Avatar
      Clanso

      Oh! I have so many questions! Who’s the narrator? Who’s Garret Cain? What’s a Veriticus? Who’s the Wulver? Who’s the demon dog? (Is it the narrator? Or are they pretending to be a demon to get information out of Garret Cain?) XD. This is amazing and I hope you will continue it. Well done!

  19. revisis Avatar
    revisis

    The old Guard
    by Exce

    The empty hallways of the once bustling fortress echoed with the tapping of wood on stone as a hunched figure moved from one sunlit window spot to the next.

    From behind a curtain of stark white hair, steely blue eyes scanned the dusty reddish landscape which lay below. In the distance bloomed a cloud of dust with a rider at its head.

    The face around the eyes was furrowed with wrinkles, but even so, it was clear the woman had once possessed a sharp face.
    A smile crept on her face, turning the wrinkles into dark canyons.
    She slowly made her way down to the front gate, reminiscing on days past.

    Her comrades and allies were long gone…either thanks to battle or age, and for the outside world she was little more than a name associated with wild tales to tell over a drink or two.

    Deep in memories of past battles, victories and companions, she made her way down, but the closer she got to the massive front door, the more nagging another thought got from a part of her mind that had grown paranoid.

    What if the rider wasn’t for her? What if the outside world had forgotten her, and this rider merely sought shelter for the night in the fortress. Or, had gotten turned around on the road and never intended to come here.

    Paralyzed with thought, she stood in front of the door until heavy knocks rang out from it.

    The old woman stepped forward, hooking her stave into a metal ring to pull it open after nudging open the latch.

    A man coated in road dust bowed deeply upon seeing her, extending a hand containing a scroll forward.

    Only after breaking the seal and unrolling the parchment did the old woman feel the clouds of doubt lift.

    “Dear Viscela Cerell,

    You have been cordially invited to celebrate the birth of our firstborn son, your great-grandson, Excelsius.
    We hope to welcome you soon in our house for his official naming ceremony, in the City of Ceryn.

    With greetings,

    Excelsion and Zarela Cerell”

    1. Glaceon373 Avatar
      Glaceon373

      Oh, this is very interesting! Viscela is a very interesting character, and you wrote your descriptions of her and her thoughts very well. The rest of the story also has amazing descriptions that help keep the piece moving forward. Also, your names are great. Overall, this is a very solid story, Revisis. Nice job!

    2. Twangyflame0 Avatar
      Twangyflame0

      You should always treat an old dog with respect for their knowledge is invaluable sometimes. Viscela seems like a decent person. I wonder what adventurers she has faced in her long, battle-weary life. I am happy that she isn’t completely forgotten for that is a fate worse than death. Also, is this world where one of your names come from, Exce? Very well done.

    3. The hardest thing about outliving your friends is the living part. You sit there day after day with the memories of a life that now seems more like a dream wondering when the dream will be over. Very reflective piece.

      This is in no way a criticism “She slowly made her way down to the front gate she found herself reminiscing on days past.”
      It is most likely just me, but I think
      “She slowly made her way down to the front gate reminiscing on days past.”
      Taking “she found herself” as it is self-evident

      1. revisis Avatar
        revisis

        Dang it! xD Thanks for pointing out.

    4. Clanso Avatar
      Clanso

      Excelsius? Oh I see! That’s why you shared that family tree!

  20. Family Reunion

    By Mike Collins

    A young couple drives on a road deep in Oregon. “You are cordially invited…So, what should we expect from them? This invitation seems so cold, or I don’t know, indifferent.”

    Diana looked at her husband. “It’s been more than fifteen years since I spoke to anyone in my family. I was a different person back then. I don’t know what to expect. I do know they will be just as cordial as that invitation.”

    Dale lightly touched her cheek. “Say the word, and we can go anywhere else. We don’t need shit from these people.”

    A tear ran down Diana’s cheek. “I want… no, I need closure.”

    Alongside the road was a massive rot iron gate. At the center of the gate was a family crest.

    Diana said, “Home again for just one last time.”

    “How will your privileged one-percenter family take to your black husband?” Dale looked to the gate. “I’m not even on their grounds yet, and I already feel like I don’t fit in.”

    The car door opened and Diana stepped out. “My uncle Dave’s wife Candice is black, and if the family had a problem with her, they never said anything… Not that they would. Also, they own this road, so we’ve been on their property for about three miles. No, if they have a problem, it won’t be with you.”

    Dale looked back at their four-year-old daughter. “Maybe we should have left Jordan back with my mother.”

    “Don’t be silly. They will love her… Also, don’t tell them we named her after Michael Jordan.”

    Using the code given in the invitation, Diana was able to open the gate. After getting back into the car, they drove the two miles to the main house. As the car pulled up to the mansion, Diana saw her father waiting.

    Her father smiled, “It’s nice that you could come… David. You brought your partner and little adoption… how nice.”

    Diana found her inner steel for what would be a long day. “Father, I haven’t been David for a long time now. I think it’s time you accepted my truth.”

    1. Twangyflame0 Avatar
      Twangyflame0

      Damn, this is a really good story. Halfway through the first few paragraphs I was thinking, “This story would be more interesting if Dale was a minority group or–” and then you went ahead and did it. I love how you seamlessly put in the fact that Diana is trans and Dale is black into the story. You did amazing with this story. Very well done, Mike Collins. Bravo.

    2. Wow, this is pretty charged with emotion. The anxiety and later the frustration or anger your characters are feeling translated to me as a reader quite well.
      I am going to give you a quick nit-pick, though. Your first sentence is in present tense while the rest of your piece is in past tense.
      Overall, wonderful piece. I really enjoyed it.

  21. Dinner Party
    By PitL

    Moulin drew back the hammer on the flintlock. He leveled it at the man sitting at the far end of the room, hands shaking wildly.

    “Come now, Mr. Moulin,” the man said. His face was gaunt, garishly adorned by a shock of white hair. “We’re all here to have one last meal together. It’s somewhat difficult for me to play the amiable host with a pistol pointed towards me, no?”

    Moulin froze, eyes locked. He stood silently for a moment, eyes vacant, before collapsing into a chair.

    “Ah. Good man, good man – Kowalcyzk, could you fetch some wine while I entertain our guests? Thank you.” The man stood, looking over the assembled party. “It has been too long, my friends. You all remember one another, I assume? Except for the dear Reverend Father, of course.”

    Scattered laughter echoed, before quickly dying off. A monotone voice rung out from the far corner of the parlour, carrying through the silence. “My memory has not yet slipped quite so badly, Margrave,” he said. “Though I had hoped that most of us would be dead by now. How long has it been?”

    “Three hundred and fifty years, Michael.” Moulin stood. “Give or take. I still recall you easily, Margrave Leichenberg.”

    The Margrave chuckled. “If introductions are unnecessary, shall we move to the dining hall? I understand you may be… uncomfortable… moving further, but – ”

    “Hard to go much deeper when you’ve already been invited into hell, my friend,” Moulin interjected. “Do we not have business to attend to first, however?”

    Leichenberg sighed. “I had really hoped to enjoy a good meal tonight before any arguments, hunter,” he said. “We were all true friends once.” The Margrave glanced to the others. “You all stand with him?”

    Father Michael stepped out of the corner. “We won’t stand in his way, at least.”

    Silence settled back over the room. After several moments, a hoarse laugh broke from the Margrave’s throat. “Friendship sacrificed to faith, then. Very well.” He cracked a smile. A pair of long, pointed canines glinted in the light. “Have at you.”

    1. Twangyflame0 Avatar
      Twangyflame0

      I like the intrigue here. I suspect they all participated in some event that made them immortal and gave them powers in some way. Moulin seems to think they have some sort of curse or that they really hate whatever power they were given. Part of me thinks it is lychanthrope or vampirism, because of the mention of sharp teeth, or it could something else entirely. In the end, you executed this very well and I’m happy to have read this story. Very well done.

    2. … I was going to list off things that were Castlevania references in this piece, but I forgot what was and wasn’t lol. Whoops.

  22. Twangyflame0 Avatar
    Twangyflame0

    Letters in the Dark
    By Twangyflame0

    Percival opened up the door to Andromea’s bedroom, his only source of light being the moon outside and the candle in his hand. The room had everything you expect from someone of her power. Though taking up the majority of the already large space, was a large, four-post bed with a canopy that could fit at least four people.

    The bed’s frame was made out of expertly carved wood. Dark, see-through sheets hung from the canopy. The bedsheets had a variety of patterns in black, red, and white.

    Percival couldn’t help but smile to himself as he saw his Lady’s head barely poke out from the covers. Her black hair was sprawled out all over the pillows in one big mess.

    Percival walked closer, putting the candle on a nightstand nearby, while holding a letter in his other hand. She needed to read it, though he also wasn’t sure how many letters she received via giant, fluffy bat creatures.

    It was past the time she needed to wake up anyways. Percival took off his shoes and, with the utmost care, began crawling over the bed to his Lady. The entire bed felt like one big fluffy sheep. He was fighting the urge to yawn. It was late for his human body. His eyes felt heavy. He could just leave the letter next to her and then…go to…bed…

    Andromeda stretched her arms as she got up. She looked out the window at the beautiful night and then–

    “Ah!” She froze as she saw Percival sleeping beside her, on top of her bedsheets. She was about to flip when she saw a note in his hands. She read it. It was an invitation from a business partner to a party.

    She pursed her lips in thought. She had a lot to do today and she would need to prepare for the party tomorrow and–

    The sound of Percival’s soft breath brought her back to the present. She looked down as his chest raised and fell, a smile on his face.

    “Well, maybe I don’t have to wake up just yet.”

    1. You painted a very vivid picture of what seems like a forbidden relationship. It could easily be said that to Percival, that bed the invitation. If I remember right (and that would be a first) see-through sheets hung from the canopy would be called curtains. The whole canopy idea came from people trying to keep warm by trapping their own body heat or the heat from an iron (thingy) heated on the hearth. Excellent Story.

    2. minergirl778 (aka frogfireFantasy) Avatar
      minergirl778 (aka frogfireFantasy)

      Cuuuuuuuuuuute!!!! I love these two characters, man. Royal and commoner romances are so great. I wish I had someone fluffy I could cuddle up with… anyway, I really liked this one! I can really feel the fondness between these two characters. The mention of giant bats delivering mail also intrigued me! I don’t really know how to end this review, so I’m just gonna say it good, and you did good! 😀

  23. Glaceon373 Avatar
    Glaceon373

    “The Invitation”
    by Carrie (Glaceon373)

    “It’s obviously a trap.”

    “I KNOW, Glenn!” Charlotte jumped up and started pacing. “Why else would the Master of the Citrine Guild invite US to a banquet?”

    “Indeed,” Kai set the letter down. “Not to mention…”

    They glanced at the fourth chair. Darian’s absence had made that wall of the apartment almost taboo to look at.

    “Kai—”

    “Charlotte, luring in enemies with a hostage is a classic evil plot. That’s exactly what this is. We either go, and risk ending up like Darian, or we ignore it and probably get captured.” She adjusted her hood. “There, I said it.”

    “That was direct,” Charlotte sat down and pushed aside her red hair.

    The table went quiet. Then Glenn snapped his fingers. “This is our chance to save him.”

    “What? Are you stupid?” Kai looked at him in disgust. “Well, more than usual?”

    “Gee, thanks,” Glenn picked up the letter. “They want us to meet an escort near the airship docks, right? What if only two of us actually attend, and the third follows, looking for a window to get to Darian? They’ll blend right in. The Citrine Guild has no reason to kill us—”

    Kai scoffed.

    “No more than usual,” he continued, “and besides, this invitation makes it sound like a large event. Maybe they’ve invited more non-Guild members, and Darian… isn’t alone in his cell.”

    “Having him here would make this discussion easier.” Kai murmured.

    The table got quiet again.

    Charlotte sighed. “It’s a dumb idea, but it could work. We’ve got two days to plan, so I’ll find the tailor—”

    “A fancy outfit is only necessary for those actually attending,” Glenn put his hand up.

    “Yeah, you and Kai,” Charlotte stood up. “I’ll be the one breaking Darian out.”

    “You? Stealthy?” Kai raised an eyebrow. “Just go with Glenn. Bring your lute, make it a party.”

    “Eh, it was worth a shot. And the music would make things easier for your sneaking, anyway.”

    Kai smirked. “Thanks.”

    “So, it’s settled, then?” Glenn set the letter down.

    “I’m on board.” Kai yawned. “Charlotte?”

    “Yeah,” she nodded. “Let’s do this.”

    1. Matthew (Handsome Johanson) Avatar
      Matthew (Handsome Johanson)

      It’s a heist! well… not a heist. more like a JAIL BREAK 😀 This was pretty cool! I really like the characters here. I think they interact together well. The dialogue was also really easy to follow and made me want to listen on. OK Some things I noticed. It’s kinda unclear who is talking in the 6th paragraph. I think it’s Kai, so it’s not too difficult to figure out. just something to note. next. Charlotte says “that was direct. to Kai’s statement. what Kai said just seemed like a statement of fact. with the beginning argument, it felt to me that they had already been discussing the issue. So, I was unsure why, when kai pointed out the reality of the situation, Charlotte felt it came off harshly. it felt like they were already feeling the harshness of the situation prior. This could also just be a lack of context thing on my part. I don’t really know how they’ve dealt with the loss of their friend, so these reactions could also be entirely appropriate. Again, not really anything wrong here. just something to be aware of. ALL IN ALL great work! 😀

    2. Twangyflame0 Avatar
      Twangyflame0

      Hmmmm, interesting story. I like how you play with the group dynamic. The lost of a teammate will always throw things out of wack and make everyone act a little different. The only thing that troubled me here were the pieces of dialogue without narration, because I couldn’t tell who was speaking. This might just be me, but, despite each character having their own speaking patterns, they all sound hurt and passive aggressive to each other in varying degrees. That’s my only gripe though, I really enjoyed the story. Very well done.

    3. I really liked that you called out the “classic evil plot” in your narrative. We see it all the time as readers and it’s fun when the characters recognize a trope as well. I also enjoyed the humor you integrated into the story even though the moment is kind of serious. Their friend has been captured, after all. Overall, great piece!

    4. MasaCur Avatar
      MasaCur

      Kinda want to know how Darian got captured. I’m sure it’s in a previous story.
      The group dynamic here is awesome, with everyone knowing and commenting on the flaws of the others (Glenn has been known to come up with stupid ideas, Charlotte has no ranks of stealth at all). Seems like these people have been working together for a while. I like the way the dialogue comes together on this. Nicely done.

  24. Matthew (Handsome Johanson) Avatar
    Matthew (Handsome Johanson)

    Dinner Date?
    by Matthew (Handsome Johanson)

    Knock knock!

    Rebecca tumbles out of bed and onto the floor. She didn’t really get enough sleep last night thanks to… a bad dream? She couldn’t really have been abducted by some cultists by mistake last night, right?

    She fixes her hair a bit to at least make it somewhat presentable and rushes to the door.

    Knock knock knock!

    Rebecca opens the door. “Yes. Yes. I’m sorry. I had a bad night. What i-” She looks up to see the cultist from her dream last night. He’s carrying some flowers?

    “AAAAH!” she stumbles back and closes the door.

    “Look. I’m sorry for last night.” He says through the door. “I’m here for your promised dinner?”

    “Uhh. Give me a second to get dressed.” She calls out. “ I’ll be right out!” She hurries to her closet and barricades herself inside.

    ‘Why? Why? Why did I have to ask him for dinner?’ she thinks back to that night and the warm smile he gave her while guiding her through their hideout. ‘Oh. That’s right. He’s hot.’ Rebecca gives herself a few slaps to the face and curses her lonely self.

    Knock knock knock.

    She sighs. ‘Eh, A free meal is a free meal.’ She gets dressed and heads back to the door. She opens it to see Ollie’s worried face.

    “I’m sorry. Do I need to come at another time, or?”

    “No. no. It’s fine.” Rebecca interrupts him. “It’s just that… I’m still a bit shocked from last night.”

    “We don’t have to do this if you don’t want to.” Ollie says with a reassuring smile. “I just wanted to make up for last night. Again, I’m sorry.”

    “Well then, shouldn’t we be off?” Rebecca holds out her hand and Ollie takes it.

    “Of course!” He smiles. “I have the perfect meal planned! I hope you haven’t eaten today.” Rebecca feels her tummy rumble as he mentions food.

    Ollie continues. “Because we’ll be dining on a meal prepared by Grutheo, the daemon of indulgence and gluttony.”

    “Is that safe?” Rebecca asks.

    Ollie shrugs. “Probably.” He winks. “I’ll keep us safe.”

    1. Glaceon373 Avatar
      Glaceon373

      Wow, this was great! I know this is a sequel from you last cultist story, but it holds up on its own very well. The whole premise is a little silly, but that doesn’t hold the story back at all. If anything, it makes it much better. Your dialogue really reinforces everything, and it also keeps the story moving. Overall, this is fantastic. Great job!

    2. Twangyflame0 Avatar
      Twangyflame0

      This is so sweet and adorable. Man I hope their date goes well. I love the sheer honesty in “‘Oh right, he’s hot.’” line. That got a good chuckle out of me. Ollie seems to be a really nice person, for cultist. Reading about these two also makes me very curious about this world you are building on the spot, Johanson. I like it a lot. Very well done.

    3. A free meal is a free meal until you wake up in a bathtub full of ice missing a kidney or two. This prompt was tailor-made for the continuation of your story. Ollie reminds me of Ted Bundy and how he used his charm to seduce his victims into places where he could kill them. Maybe I’m just questioning why he or she would go on that date. Maybe he went because they still don’t trust her? Excellent story

    4. Samantha DeShong Avatar
      Samantha DeShong

      A free meal is a free meal. This is a rather sweet story, admittedly one I was not expecting involving a cultist. But hey, cultists get nervous when going on dates too, right? And hey, if he’s good looking then why not? This was silly and great! The dialogue was smooth and funnily enough reminded me of an actual encounter I was witnessed, minus the cult. Great job!

    5. MasaCur Avatar
      MasaCur

      I’m amused we get to see what happened to Rebecca and Ollie after the attempted abduction. This was funny. I like Rebecca’s justification for going through with this, despite her reservations. And, for a cultist, Ollie seems like such a genuinely nice guy. Well done, Matt.

    6. PixieWings Avatar
      PixieWings

      This is a great continuation of the last story. I love how sheepish and apologetic Ollie is for most of this. It makes their back and forth really cute and playful. Also, what their date actually is is amazing. The twelve year old in me is banging their fists on the table, chanting “Dates in hell! Dates in hell!” Nicely done!

    7. GJFuller Avatar
      GJFuller

      This was such a cute follow up to your previous pieces. I must admit that this “world” seems to lend itself well to comedy. What is usually seen as dark and evil is given a more common feel as the characters just roll with the “weirdness”.
      Great work!

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