Writing Group: Here be Dragons (PRIVATE)

Careful now. This is no place for your kind.

I know, I’ve heard the whispers as well. Untold wealth, vistas never before spied. Who knows how much of it is true, but I can tell you this: go any further, and you may never return. This is your one chance to turn back, because…

This week’s writing group prompt is:

Here be Dragons

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Almost synonymous with “here be monsters”, the whole thing is an assumption. A blank space on an old map. An attractive rumor.

Attractive indeed.

There’s something about the promise of danger that provokes a human need to probe. If there’s danger, it’s to be bested. If there’s a place we cannot go, surely there’s some reward in finding a way to do it anyway.

We’re like this. It’s amazing, it’s terrible.

Mostly, it’s fraught with good story ideas.

So this week, instead of just writing a story with a dragon in it (although we do want that as well), I want to challenge you to feel out the spirit of the prompt. What is a dragon in this context? Something large, fierce, indomitable. What is it doing? Preventing.

Here be dragons. We don’t go here, because dragons.

This could be your alcoholic father’s bedroom; he could be your dragon. This could be an emotional space you’ve never toed in a relationship before; they might become your dragon. This could be a cave with a big, scaly, fire-breathing monster in it.

Just know, the important part isn’t the dragon. That’s the fun part.

The important part is where the dragon lives, and what that means to us.

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172 responses to “Writing Group: Here be Dragons (PRIVATE)”

  1. You ARE a Dragon
    by Brickosaur

    The professor walked in wearing the tailcoat of a stage musician. He tipped his top hat and addressed the lecture hall: “By the end of this, you will all become dragons,” said the professor. He grinned. “I know — ‘But this isn’t a transformation class!’ No matter. To turn you, I need no magic. Only your attention.”

    “What even is a dragon? It isn’t its physical form — no one can agree on how they look, or what they’re made of. We must plunge deeper, to the meaning of a dragon. So we must strip that down.” As the professor spoke, he took off his watch and glasses.

    “Such a creature solidifies our deepest thoughts and drives. A dragon is defined by want, by power, by fear, and something more.” Off came his hat.

    “Want! Greed — everlasting need, to grow and collect; to leave something of the self in the world, perhaps.” He stepped out of his shoes.

    “Power. You cannot deny the power a dragon holds — mastery over the sky and everything below, the capacity to destroy and render rubble at will.

    “And equal ability to build up, and create the world around it. The dragon can impose itself on its environment, on cultures, and so many of our stories.

    “With power like that, the dragon cannot help but inspire fear! Its forms combine the predators and sneaking things that endanger us, and its essence reminds us of our own inner weaknesses, our holes. The dragon comes in to nest in those gaps. You feel it now.

    “It has always been there. Those defining aspects of the dragon resonate deeply in all of us, because they are our own powers. The dragon is a perfect inner mirror, and so… I AM a dragon!”

    With a flourish, the professor spun in a circle. His coat disappeared; in its place was was a long, green dress shimmering with scales. His appearance hadn’t changed, yet the man felt undeniably Draconic.

    “All this is in you, dear audience. The last thing you needed was this awareness. You ARE a dragon. Welcome!”

    He grinned.

    “Class dismissed.”

    1. Lunabear Avatar
      Lunabear

      A rather informative approach to the prompt, Brick. I love that this gives the reader and the class confidence. It also shows how attainable being a dragon truly is if one has thought process and determination.

      My only critique:

      His coat disappeared; in its place was was (simply delete one ‘was’)

      The wonderful, charming lecture. Great job, Bricko!

    2. Interesting story! I love how you’ve framed an analysis of what a dragon is as an inspiring lecture from a super cool professor. The speech was very fascinating, going in-depth into how we perceive dragons in our culture while keeping the fantasy setting of the plot. Honestly, I’d attend classes from a prof like this (or at least try to, I was the kind of student that would rarely show up in classes). Great job!

  2. TheAssassin Avatar
    TheAssassin

    The Singing Dead
    By TheAssassin

    “Draw not their ire, speak not their names, seek not their nest, lest you wish to burn in scorching fire. Lest you wish death come to us all.” Words of wisdom spoken then, ignored as mere legends now. Men grew complacent, withdrew from old covenants and broke ancient oaths, and now their elder foes haunt them again. They fell not into their doom, but fostered it. Such is man’s way, for left alone he follows not goodness, but embraces darkness.

    Here, upon mountain’s cliff does the final alliance wait. Warring kings together now for the final fight of men. Their knights armored in gleaming silver, their spears raised with faces proud, and in their mouths are spoken prayers of hope avowed. The sun in distant horizon sinks, the clouds growing dark with dread. Light at last them left, plunging man into his final night.

    And in that somber darkness, the armies did not waver. Victory would not to them come, yet they smiled all the same. For here on the mountain, awaiting their foes of yore, they won the greatest battle, conquered the mightiest foe. They rose above their fears, set aside their senseless squabbles and united together against the edge of immolation.

    Unity at last. Such was victory enough.

    Their tears would not fall on forgotten winds, for no tears to them came. Instead these winds would carry songs and cheer. All men die, but in this death there would be peace. Peace of unity and fellowship. Brothers united to the end.

    And so they sang as the sky cracked, they sang as majestic winged beasts rose above the horizon. Dragons. Their plate shone of crimson and their eyes fumed with rage. Streams of fire scorched the skies.

    Cinder cometh.

    Though an ashen end it may be, these men sang and cheered. Their smiles glowed as they found eternal rest. Not one of torment, but of peace. Even as they burned their smiles remained strong.

    Death finds us all, but happiness finds few. Unite together, rejoice together, for such a death is worth a thousand lives lived in sorrow.

    1. First of all, I really like the phrase “Cinder cometh.” Secondly, I enjoyed the way you chose to relate this story to your readers. Your phrasing, especially in the beginning, feels very poetic. There were, however, a few places where I stumbled over the words because of the way a sentence was phrased. But that could just be me squinting at my screen like an old lady. Overall, I truly enjoyed your piece. Great job!

    2. This is gorgeous. Man, I want to hear it as a song. Your old-timey language conventions are perfect and beautiful, and it flows incredibly well.

      The story mentions literal dragons, of course, but I can’t help but think of the united and dying people as a kind of dragon themselves. I don’t really have a pinpointable reason, but it feels that way.

      The last paragraph is intriguing. “Such a death is worth a thousand lives lived in sorrow.” It’s a strong theme, one that people could hard agree or disagree with. Love that.

  3. jesse fisher Avatar
    jesse fisher

    A Dragon’s Sleep

    By Jesse Fisher

    The metallic sand yellow dragoness peered from behind one of the gates to the bottomless arena. The armored humanoid with mismatched eyes looked behind them at the many sleeping griffins, feather serpientes, and other draconic relations.

    “If it wasn’t for the fact I can tell these beings are of the same lineage and this world lacks tech to do genetic experiments, I would do asking what madness would have brought some of them to life.” The armored being committed as the jeers of the crowd drew their eyes to the…was fighting the right word here.

    The scene in front of them of Demon jumping from the wall to land on the griffon with wyvern wing before catching on the wall again.

    “Is he just playing leap lizard?” Orlander asked, somewhat confused.

    “No he seems to be kicking him in the head.” Korun replied as the near naked wolf kept hopping around.

    Korun then looked around and had a thought.

    “Sweetie?” He asked with a cheshire grin. “How many people can you put to sleep before you get too exhausted?”

    “My love,” Orlander said, creasing his chin under the helmet. “I would knock out a whole world just to be alone with you.”

    “You know you’ve been very forward ever since we got that letter.” Korun commented leaning into the crease.

    “What can I say the armor brings out the dragon trope in me.”

    “Making a note for the next time we are alone.” The grin turned to a smirk as the dragoness began to let her toga flap by a wind that was not there and the sounds of the crowd died down while the fight was still going on.

    With the roar of the crowd silenced other voices could be heard.

    “Foul thing what new form of spell have you cast!?!”

    “I’m not a spell caster, transfiguration maybe, but I’m more a rogue or a barbarian.” A familiar voice responded.

    “I say Bard could also work.” A third, female voice chuckled before a growl ended that.

    “Would augur that but given this, damn tropes.” The familiar voice responded.

    1. Calliope Rannis Avatar
      Calliope Rannis

      The setting here is really neat – a giant arena with various draconic crossbreeds as the inhabitants along with other mythical creatures. That said, I found this story pretty hard to follow. For a start, Orlander and Korun’s names get brought up without making sure which name is tied to which being – when Orlander spoke, I had no idea if it was meant to be the dragon or the armoured being.
      This extends to a lot of the rest of the story too – it felt disjointed, where I couldn’t quite understand what in the previous sentence had caused the events in the next one, especially in the second half of the story, to the point where I don’t really know what to think of it by the ending.
      That said, the dialogue between the two is rather sweet and nice to see. Deffo potential for something cute between the two! 🙂

      1. jesse fisher Avatar
        jesse fisher

        Fair really I set up our two POV characters at the start so when I switch to names you can put together who is who but I see your point if I chose to have a descriptor before Orlander it might been better.

        As for the order of thing, I set up the sleep thing after the first dialog. But I can see what you mean, did not have room but the third voices area was unaffected by the sleep that Orlander cast with the other two in the pit itself.

        As for the dialog, the familiar voice was doing a meta response to the one he is fighting while the third is calling back to how this whole thing started.

  4. Calliope Rannis Avatar
    Calliope Rannis

    A Very Special Date (Corespace Universe)
    By Calliope Rannis

    “Nearly there!” the golden-haired woman trilled, leading Clay by the hand to a clearing in the simulated wilderness.

    “Freya, you know I’m ah, not a massive fan of long walks in the wild areas right?” Clay’s digital feet stumbled on the digital ground. “I was hoping we could stay home and watch a movie…”

    “Nope!” Freya said cheerily. “This is our 1000th date together Clay. I want to make it a special one!”

    “You- you kept count??”

    She turned and gave him a sunny smile. “Of course I did! It’s not like it’s hard for me, really. And it matters!” She continued, as they walked towards a large stone outcrop at the centre of the clearing. “You’re only the 32nd of my human relationships to last this long. That’s really something special. YOU are special, Clay.” Her cheeks went a little pink. “So I wanted this date to match.”

    “Aww, Freya…” he blushed too, though much less subtly. He looked at the stone, marked only with a strange abstract drawing of a tree. “Why here, though?”

    Freya smiled again. “Because here’s the gateway to a special place. Humans can’t come in, normally. Honestly, they can’t really DO anything much there anyway.” She looked deeply into his eyes. “But I want you to see it. You ready?”

    Clay looked at the stone before him, and back to her shining face. He nodded, uncertain but trusting. Freya’s hand tightened on his, and she stepped into the stone, pulling him in with her.

    Clay awoke under a sapphire sky, standing in an endless field of emerald grass almost as tall as him. “….Freya? Freya!? Where are-”

    A great gust of wind from behind almost blew the grass flat, as something huge beyond belief flew directly over him. A creature larger than any megatower Clay had ever seen, with shining silver scales, wings the size of capital starships, and what looked like miles upon miles of beautiful golden hair flowing from their spine. As they landed, he stared into brilliant blue eyes the size of lakes, and realized that Freya hadn’t left at all.

    1. Gregory Hess Avatar
      Gregory Hess

      So, Freya’s a dragon? I also like how Freya’s like “you’re only the 32nd one to get this far. You’re special” and yet how they both really seem to feel that special-ness. Freya revealing her true form is really cool, and it’s also cool how you imply that the whole thing is a simulation, meaning Freya is likely not “really” a dragon, or may not even exist. Really interesting stuff!

      1. Calliope Rannis Avatar
        Calliope Rannis

        She’s actually a Planet-Class AI, installed at the heart of the planet they both live on! So she’s basically a gigantic machine IRL, but she has a human form for holograms and virtual spaces such as here to actually communicate with people and stuff.
        But the place she took Clay to is actually the network/virtual space *between* planets – aka how Planet Class AI can talk and interact with *each other*. And Freya’s form among the other AI is quite different from the one she has among humans, as you can see. 😉

    2. jesse fisher Avatar
      jesse fisher

      Well that is cute, I love how they set up their relationship before some guess could be given. I also like how you did give up some idea that we are in a digital world and clay is human. Also that Freya was more then human so the dragon reveal was telegraphed well.

      1. Calliope Rannis Avatar
        Calliope Rannis

        Thank you very much! I’m rather proud of this one, it came out almost exactly as I had in my head! :3

    3. revisis Avatar
      revisis

      Oohhh! A cut from what sounds like hard scific to high Fantasy!

      This is an very heartwarming story! With the envoirement being called “simulated” i wonder what that place was Freya led clay to? A super encripted lobby? A hack between servers?

      (I feel like lack of world knowledge is biting me in the ass here xD).

      At first I thought Freyas comment regarding human relations was odd, but if she is immortal-ish then it does carry alot of wholesomeness.

      Good Job!

      1. Calliope Rannis Avatar
        Calliope Rannis

        Science Fantasy is very much my preferred style, and this is perhaps the most obvious exhibition of that yet!
        The place Freya led Clay to was basically switching from an Internet-based virtual space – the global network of their own planet, designed for humans to interact with – to an Outernet, designed to connect between planets, and for Planet-Class AI like Freya to interact with each other. And since this space isn’t designed for human use or even on a human *scale*, the forms of those great AI can take on much grander and more varied forms. It just so happens that Freya’s form for herself is that of a dragon. <3

        Technically lack of world knowledge is a factor, but since this is only the second story on the subject of Planet-Class AI's, you had no real way of knowing how it works for this story anyway so you didn't miss out on anything.

        And yes, Freya is, if not immortal, capable of existing for many thousands of years. Furthermore, her processing capacity during off-peak periods is more than enough to maintain a great many simultainous relationships within the populace at once, so with those two facts in mind, being in a list with only 31 other people is goshdarn special indeed. 😉

  5. Dragon-Hunting
    By NocteVesania

    “We’re here.” A crewman, peering through a crack, motions to Belle. “I count six deckhands.”

    Upon hearing this, another crewman looks up, his eyes sparkling with relief and a grin on his face. “FINA-”

    Belle instantly smacks him on the back of his head. He looks at her with sad puppy eyes, only to be met with her piercing glare. She then looks to the other two, hunched over in the cramped space of the wooden box.

    “Remember,” Belle whispers, her usual stern tone still apparent, “no one moves a muscle until I say so.”

    The men look at each other and collectively sigh. They lie on their sides, arms wrapped around each other. During the briefing, Zeke told them this was the best way to keep the crew from moving during transport. He insisted that this was purely utilitarian, but Belle’s snicker says otherwise.

    “A biggun’, eh,” a gruff voice from outside remarks, “c’mere and help me, ya’ gits.”

    With grunts and heaves, the box is carried away. After a while, the box is lowered again. Belle watches the men as they walk away, tired from their ordeal. Once the coast is clear, she slowly lifts the lid and steps out of that prison. The rest of the group tries to follow suit, but end up struggling. Belle sighs and kicks the box over, tipping it to its side. Its occupants unceremoniously fall out with a thud.

    Belle turns to find her prize. Before her, the massive hulk of wood, brass, and steel rests on scaffolding like a dragon deep in slumber. Colossal engines sitting at the deck’s tail end and cannons peeking through gun ports, Belle can only stare in awe at the monstrosity. A wooden frame encases the balloon, steel-tipped to a point at its front end. On its hull, painted in scarlet, is the word “TIAMAT”. Belle approaches the behemoth and caresses its hull, the smooth finish unlike any she had seen before. She turns to her crew, a smirk on her face.

    “Men, we’re taking her home.”

    1. Lunabear Avatar
      Lunabear

      Always love seeing Belle, Nocte. She’s becoming a regular privateer/pirate. This one is exceptionally funny and so very fun. I laughed out loud at least twice. Them finding the beautiful ship is brilliant and given such reverence and detail. A beautiful behemoth. Great job.

    2. WolfsbaneX Avatar
      WolfsbaneX

      I’m confused as to what Tiamat is here. Is she a cannon? Other than that, I really enjoyed this story. The characters are distinct and the prompt isn’t as obvious.The only major I have is that the conflict here is a little murky. Were they captured? Did they sneak on board? Other than that, good job.

      1. I wanted to show that Belle and her crew were sneaking into a warehouse by hiding in a big wooden box. Tiamat was the name of the airship they found, which I wanted to allude to for prompt. I might need to make that a bit clearer in future revisions.

  6. Shaviathan Avatar
    Shaviathan

    The God Below
    By Shaviathan

    The emperor descended the steps into the cavernous abyss, each step feeling heavier than the last. The darkness of the cave stairwell only allowed him to see the next three steps before the path returned to a hungering void.

    Everyone in the imperial palace knew about the system of caves beneath, a natural labyrinth of tunnels and passageways that the builders thought would make for good escape routes or further expansions to the palace. Tremors shake the foundations and pillars of the palace from these caves and a low constant rumble echoes endlessly through them as if the tunnels were the gullet of some enormous beast. None dared venture into these rocky veins, none except the emperor.

    As he continued to descend the flame began to flicker. A warm and humid gale began to sweep through the tunnel, drenching him in sweat. He reached the last two steps of the staircase and entered the decaying hallway of some ancient ruin. The low rumble grew louder and began to resemble a sort of breathing sound. The vibrations alone caused the emperor’s whole body to tremble.

    Willing his quivering legs forward he pressed on down the crumbling hallway. He went further and further into the void, unable to see the stairs behind him or the horrors that might be lying ahead, waiting for him to stumble into their clutches. Finally, he reached an opening. He was standing in an open chamber so tall that the void consumed the ceiling itself. The wall above the door was covered in tapestry carvings of a war lost to the ages.

    “Well,” A voice boomed behind him. “A visitor. This is quite the surprise.”

    The emperor froze upon seeing the source of the voice, stricken with fear. A gargantuan creature with scales and wings loomed over him. It was a Nihdroghaal, one of the ancient gods.

    “One of my brothers’ experiments as well! Most intriguing indeed.” The serpent continued, his voice reverberating and shaking the enormous chamber. “Perhaps it’s time I performed my own experiment. Let’s start with who you might be, little guinea pig.”

    1. Lunabear Avatar
      Lunabear

      Shaviathan, this is an amazing first entry. The buildup to the reveal is apprehensive and intense. I was on the edge of my seat in anticipation of what was in the abyss. The payoff is wonderful! There’s such mystique and regality surrounding the dragon. I do have a question involving two things, however: was it the dragon’s brother or the emperor’s brother who did the experiments? Also, was it a single brother or two or more? Awesome story, all the same!

    2. Gregory Hess Avatar
      Gregory Hess

      Oh, the brother of the creator god noticed a person and now wants to know more. I wonder why anyone let the Emperor come down alone if they thought it so dangerous? Whatever, I’m sure the Emperor will be fine. Just hope he doesn’t end up trapped down there for years. It also makes me wonder about the original purpose of the tunnels and, of course, about your creation myth. Good stuff!

    3. jesse fisher Avatar
      jesse fisher

      Wow, that is a good twist. How you build it up, this is the most important person in the world going down to a set of ruins. The story telling of this world as we delve deeper until the ‘dragon’ was so good. It also leads to a possible sequel very well.

  7. The Dragon Flies
    By Derek McEldowney (Deviacon)

    “Where we going, Papa?”

    “Someplace special, squirt.”

    “Is it someplace magic?”

    “Heh, you’ll see when we get there.”

    “Is there gonna be treasure? Like one of your stories?!”

    “Just wait and you’ll see.”

    His adventuring days were long behind him now. Ever since meeting that sweet girl, the thought of not seeing her again finally made him fear for his own life. There were still a few places he liked to visit, to bask in the scenery and memories they carried with them. This place was his favorite, it’s why he insisted they make their home at the base of the old Drake Mountains.

    The hike used to be easy for him, and he knew it was more than just the weight of his tired kiddo slowing him down now. But still nothing would stop him from making that trek and sharing that place with those close to his heart.

    As the sun had reached its apex in the sky, the adventurous pair cut through a deep thicket into a small clearing. A gentle stream trickled down the mountainside, pooled around a mound of mossy earth where a single tree grew, and then cascaded down the nearby cliff.

    It would have been beautiful at sunset, cast in a myriad of colors, but that could be seen any day and would be a few dozen less colors. There was only a few weeks every few years they could catch the sight they could today.

    It was warm and sunny and damp. The air of the clearing was filled with dozens—hundreds—of humming, darting dragonflies of different colors. They’d dart and glide and zip with such smooth grace, snapping up any mosquitoes they found along the way. Their iridescent colors glinted like jewels in the sunbeams as they passed. Sunset could wait, they’d still be here.

    “Wow! Is this the treasure Papa?!” A familiar look of awe and amazement graced his daughter’s face.

    “It sure is, kiddo,” he smiled. Her eyes were the brightest gems of all. “It sure is.”

    1. Lunabear Avatar
      Lunabear

      Deviacon, You’ve captured senses of wonder, innocence, and magnificence with the story. I love how the father can pass on a place that he loves to his daughter. It’s so beautiful. The awe in the story is riveting. There’s some strong imagery, and I could see everything so vividly in my mind’s eye.

      Critiques:

      “Where we going(,) (P)apa?”

      “Someplace special(,) squirt.”

      days where (were) long behind him now.

      This place was his favorite(;) it’s why he insisted

      There was (were) only a few weeks every few years they could catch the sight they could today.

      Their iridescent colors glinted light (like) jewels in the sunbeams as they passed. Sunset could wait(;) they’d still be here.

      “Wow! Is this the treasure(,) (P)apa?!”

      graced his daughter(‘)s face.

      “It sure is(,) kiddo,” he smiled. Her eyes were the brightest gems of all(.) “It sure is.”

      Please take these critiques with a grain of salt, and understand that they do absolutely nothing to deter from the overall beauty of your story. I honestly hope to share many moments like this with my own child one day. I also really love the direction you took the prompt in for this week. Stunning and amazing!

      1. Thanks Luna! Yes a sweet break my usual horror. Ugh so many grammar and spelling mistakes. I’ve just been feeling so out of it lately. I’ll fix them eventually.

        1. Lunabear Avatar
          Lunabear

          You’re absolutely welcome. I hope the critiques aren’t hurtful. If you need or want to talk, DMs are open. 💗💗. Your story really is awesome, too.

          1. Oh not at all, they’re legitimate mistakes I made. They just kinda make me shake my head and go “can’t believe I didn’t see that.”

    2. Gregory Hess Avatar
      Gregory Hess

      Lovely story! I like the idea of an adventurer showing off their discoveries to their relatives. The sense of wonder with the child also really helps sell the connection to the prompt. The question of what the hero does after the story is one that is almost never really explored, and you really saw it as an opportunity to present us with a sweet story!

      1. Thank you! I’m so glad you liked my take on this prompt.

    3. PixieWings Avatar
      PixieWings

      Wonderful story! Lovely, light buildup to a very soft sweet moment. The imagery has a lot of fantasy packed into it that does a lot of world building in a really short time. I would like to know a little bit more about the two’s relationship? She’s his daughter, but the first prose paragraph seems to imply he found and adopted her. Or I might be reading too much into the line “Ever since meeting that sweet girl…” Fantastic work!

      1. Thank you so much! That line was originally meant to allude to the adventurers wife, but as I got to the end I liked the ambiguity that it could mean his wife or his daughter, adopted or otherwise.

  8. PixieWings Avatar
    PixieWings

    Dragons Breath Diner
    By PixieWings

    “Dragons Breath Diner” flashed the neon tubes of the restaurant’s sign, and underneath it spelled out in individual plaque letters, “Here Be Dragons.”

    Efa didn’t have the luxury of being annoyed. Her air conditioner had started belching hot air at the last truck stop and the sun setting did surprisingly little to help. She had to get out of the heat, before her human form popped under the oppressive weight of the humidity.

    She missed the days of mist and cool rain, when the unknown was home and her wings could take her anywhere.

    The tingle of bells and a puff of blessedly cool air greeted Efa at the door. She shut her eyes, drinking in the relief. She opened them to find herself being stared at.

    The elderly woman in the corner made no secret of watching her over the rim of her coffee cup. The waitress waved a greeting.

    Efa scurried across the linoleum to the bar.

    What a strange place the world had become, where human scrutiny made her nervous.

    “Cheers! Don’t get too many visitors out here this late.” The waitress chirped, surprising Efa with her English accent. “What can I get you?”

    “Water, please.” The smell of fried potatoes and sausage. “Maybe a menu?”

    The glass appeared first. Efa drank half of it in one gulp. It helped.

    Somewhere in the distance, there was a warning rumble. Thunder? She groaned. Hot rain. Awful.

    A metallic crash shook the windows. Efa startled and for an instant, her magic fell. Her claws scraped the counter.

    This was the end, she was sure.

    “Christ sakes girl, you scared us half to death!” The old woman barked, lighting a cigarette off the shower of sparks it caused. “Making us think you were human!”

    “No ashes on my clean floor please, Julianne.” The waitress plopped the menu down, hovering off the floor with the delicate membrane wings at her shoulders. “That’d be Jake scaring the foxes away from his chickens. His roar sounds dead like a car crash.”

    Efa stared at her dumbly.

    “Didn’t you see the sign, love?”

    1. DizzyBackspin Avatar
      DizzyBackspin

      The lonely traveler finds a rest stop! Very nice take on this prompt. You do a great job of taking this inhuman creature and making us empathize with her in a very human way. I could almost feel that diner’s air conditioning myself! I love how the relief in temperature was mirrored by the relief in having revealed her true form. This truly was a respite for her!

      1. PixieWings Avatar
        PixieWings

        Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it. I definitely wanted to toe the line of making Efa toe the line of being very human and being this ageless magical creature.

    2. Gregory Hess Avatar
      Gregory Hess

      Oh no they know and … wait they are supportive. I love this story. It really shows the full nature of the prompt. Every bar and social space is dangerous to the mc, so much so that it may as well be that unknown part of the map marked with dragons. And the best part is that she is a dragon, but the world around her is the real threat. And the end, showing the love and support of the fellow dragons is really fun. I do wonder if the dragons are intended to represent a marginalized group. However, that question does not in any way reduce the quality of this amazing story!

      1. PixieWings Avatar
        PixieWings

        Thanks for the kind words! The dragons being stand-ins for marginalized groups wasn’t intended subtext for this specific piece, but that is a trope I’ve played with in the past, and if that’s the way you read it, then that’s amazing. ^^ Glad you enjoyed.

    3. I love all the little details in this story that just add to things. The English accent of the waitress makes me think she may have at one point been one of the older dragons around in medieval times, adapted over the ages to where she is now. I really like the implications of the rural setting and how these dragons live. You’ve really made these humanoid dragons feel so elegant and varied.

      1. PixieWings Avatar
        PixieWings

        Thank you! That was definitely what I was going for with the waitress. Glad you enjoyed!

  9. Aaron Fleming Avatar
    Aaron Fleming

    “The Dragon’s Hunt”

    By Aaron Fleming

    “I’ve come seeking you to resurrect someone,” said the young woman with a flintlock rifle strapped to her back. She unceremoniously tossed the bag of coins at the wizard’s feet.

    “I should warn you, returning someone like this often means they are never quite the same as before,” the wizard responded. “Many things happen to spirits in the spirit realm and the return is not always clean.”

    “That doesn’t matter,” she said. “I’ve killed him once already. I just want to kill him again. I want to squeeze the life from him.”

    The wizard raised his eyebrows. “Do you now? Interesting. What would you gain from killing a man twice?”

    “The man murdered my father. He deserves a thousand deaths. I would give him this many at least.”

    “And you think that doing so will quench the fires of that vengeful beast inside you. Like the dragon who pursues the thief who stole the single golden cup from its horde? In the story the dragon leaves all the rest of its wealth behind, holding so dear the thing that was lost. Do you really wish to hunt forever for the one golden chalice leaving behind all other treasures?”

    “My father’s murder –”

    “Has already been avenged,” the wizard finished quietly for her. “Do you think more murder will truly give you peace? Did the first murder give you peace?”

    She paused in thought. Finally, she responded, “You’re not what I expected from a wizard.”

    The man laughed. “Nor am I what I expected of one.”

    “My name is Adara of Marwether,” she said finally.

    The older man nodded. “I am Arith, son of Jyohan.”

    1. Amy Trow Avatar
      Amy Trow

      I really like this story. Vengence and giving comuppance is such a commonly wanted thing in our society, but so many times it’s not healthy for us. Sometimes you just need to do it once and let it be done. That wizard stopped her from falling down a dark path. What a wise guy. I’d love to see more of these two doing stuff. Great job!

    2. DizzyBackspin Avatar
      DizzyBackspin

      Very nice first meeting. This sets up quite a lot of future possibilities. It very subtly plays on the surface of what could turn out to be deep and rich backstories. These characters have just met, but they clearly have chemistry with each other. I like how you achieved that in such a short format. I like your use of dialogue without reliance on descriptive imagery. You let the characters do the heavy lifting here. Great job!

    3. TheAssassin Avatar
      TheAssassin

      I love the dialogue here most of all. It flows well and even though it is on the nose for a normal story, here it works wonderfully. The kindly old wizard explaining why her vengeance is not well founded and the woman seemingly beating her dragon and refusing to resurrect the man. Lovely story. I just think the ending is not so great. They just say their names. Maybe I’m missing something, but as it stands I just don’t feel especially excited by that exchange. Everything else was spot on though

    4. Shaviathan Avatar
      Shaviathan

      The dialogue on this was done really well. Revenge stories can seem simple due to being a commonly used trope but they work when handled well. I’m also wondering if the murderer, when brought back to life, would have lost the side of him that pushed him to kill in the first place. If Adara still tried to kill him it could be twisted into a more tragic tale.

  10. Tale Foundry Avatar
    Tale Foundry

    What Was the Point?
    By. T.S.G. Sager

    The four brave heroes trekked up the mountain to the dwelling of the dragon, hardened by their trials of Thesran, the mysterious land which they had been teleported to many months ago.

    “This is it. Are we ready?” Jacob bolstered, standing proudly in front.

    “Ready to get out of here and back home? Fuck yes.” Myoni spat, winded from the treacherous climb.

    “Can it, Myoni! You think you’re the only one tired of this place?” Nabiki snapped. “I’m sick of tavern food. I’m sick of not being able to properly bathe daily. And I am sick and tired of dressing skimpy because my ‘bard class’ demands it.”

    “Guys! Enough!” Ayase interrupted, the voice of reason. “We’re here to kill the dragon, not each other. Let’s stay focused on that. We finish this ‘stupid genre break’ and we go home!”

    Myoni and Nabiki fell silent, and the four pressed on into the mouth of the cavern. The cave was littered with the remains left by the foolhardy who attempted this before them. After what felt like eternity, the four heroes finally reached the cave’s chamber, and in the centre was a black, blood eyed dragon.

    “Who. GOES. There?!” The wicked beast bellowed.

    “It is I! Jacob Zander, Hero of Amberwell, and my fellow companions. And we have come-”

    “No, I’m not talking about you, you dimwit. I smell that of another dragon.” The dragon sniffed the air once more, then stared directly at Ayase. “You there. What is your name, young one?”

    “A-A-Ayase Mikage…?”

    “Ahhh, Mikage. That explains it.” The dragon snorted. “What do I owe the pleasure to Ayase, descendant of Leviathan?”

    All eyes were on Ayase as she stepped forward, “We would like to return home, so could you please stop terrorizing Amberwell?”

    “Hmm? The town at the bottom of my mountain? I suppose, if Leviathan’s descendant wishes, I shall grant it.”

    “Wait… No…” Myoni grunted.

    “Thank you, dragon-sama.” Ayase beamed.

    “What? You’re kidding me…”

    “No worries, Mikage-sama. Please have safe travels.” The dragon bellowed, as a glistening portal opened up.

    “WHAT WAS THE POINT? FIVE MONTHS FOR NOTHING!”

    1. Lunabear Avatar
      Lunabear

      GB’s are always fun, especially when Myoni gets comeuppance. This one is great, Trevor! Super funny!

      Critiques:

      to, Ayase, (delete 1st comma)

      Thank you, dragon-sama(.)

      I love how simple the solution here is. Always wonderful to see your stories! Stellar job!

    2. Matthew Avatar
      Matthew

      SHUT UP AND TAKE THE EASY VICTORY xD hahaha that was an amazing ending lol. I have a few comments. It might’ve just been the way I read this, but several of the prepositional phrases seemed a bit jagged to me. they interrupted the flow of words unnecessarily imo. let me find the example.

      “The four brave heroes trekked up the mountain to the dwelling of the dragon, hardened by their trials of Thesran, the mysterious land which they had been teleported to many months ago.” This would be much better as 2 sentences, either combining the first and second clauses or the second and third clauses. Either works well.

      I can’t find any other examples so other than that, the story read really well and flowed smoothly! Great job!

    3. Oh my goodness, this is absolute gold! I dunno how much of this was hinted at or outright said before, but there’s so much information that is new and cool to me! Now I’ve gotta go find what causes or drives a genre break, since apparently these characters are aware of it on quite the meta level.

      Also, this is probably totally unrelated to what these characters do, but I really want to know how dragon society functions. Seems like there’s an implied hierarchy here based on blood, and that is fascinating C:

  11. Tale Foundry Avatar
    Tale Foundry

    Dragon Problems
    by DukkiFluff (gift this spot to Frogfire if I’m chosen)

    Jarl Hindrik paced back and forth, chewing on his thumb.

    The door to the Hall opened, catching his attention and stopping him in his tracks.

    Gjohl approached, followed closely by a tall, stocky warrior with several scars over his face.

    “I… I finally found him, my Jarl.” Gjohl huffed, standing to the side to let Hindrik meet the warrior.

    Hindrik stepped forward, “Thank you for coming! I’ve a desperate need of your aid, Beast-Slayer. I—”

    “It’s Arendt.” The warrior corrected, his deep voice reverberating through the hall.

    “A-Arendt. Right. Listen, I—”

    Arendt crossed his arms. “I hear you have a dragon problem?”

    Hindrik nodded, wringing his hands frantically, “Please! You must slay it! It’s taken refuge atop the monastery out of town and everyone else I’ve sent has perished! I will pay you handsomely!”

    Arendt sighed, and held out his hand.

    Hindrik looked confused. “U-upfront?”

    “Tis a dragon. I want to be sure it’s worth my time.”

    Hindrik glared. “Worth your time?! You’d dare?! In my own Hall?!”

    Arendt shrugged, turning and starting back towards the door as he spoke, “Then good luck with your dragon.”

    “Wait!!” Hindrik exclaimed, quickly sending Gjohl off for the money, “Upfront it is! Just please don’t leave!! You’re all we have!!”

    Gjohl returned just as fast as he’d left, dropping a heavy pouch into Arendt’s hand.

    After some careful consideration, Arendt nodded.

    – – –

    Arendt sliced away at the hanging vines covering the path. He paused, studying the path itself, and giving an irritated scoff. “They’ve perished, have they? You have to send them first, little man…”

    He approached the monastery. Sure enough, a gargantuan, pure white dragon sat atop it, its massive claws digging into the roof like it was holding on for dear life. A few shingles fell as the beast trembled.

    Arendt stored his blade, placing his hands on his hips as he beheld the dragon, “I’ve had complaints about you.”

    The dragon whimpered in response.

    “You’re stuck, aren’t you.” Arendt laughed, shaking his head. “Would you like help down?”

    The dragon lowered its head, “Y-yes, please…”

    1. Lunabear Avatar
      Lunabear

      I love the fanfare surrounding the dragon, only for the poor baby to be stuck. So cute, Dukks!

      Critiques:

      it’s (its) massive claws digging into the roof

      “You’re stuck, aren’t you(?)”

      Everything considered, Arendt’s sweet and observant. I hope he and the dragon become friends. Lovely, wholesome story!

    2. Matthew Avatar
      Matthew

      BABY. All I see is bb who needs help :3 this was very cute. I really like these names you chose. they have suitably faux-norse aesthetic (if not actual norse i’m rusty with their naming conventions) This was really well done 🙂 I feel like the cutthroat seriousness of the beast-slayer in the beginning really helps to establish the twist later in the story. i really helped it hit harder than if he just took the mission and left! I also love how both you and gatte had similar twists in that you both had dragons that were actually secretly nice kinda x) Very good as always <3

    3. Gosh, this was hecking adorable. I love that the big, no nonsense beast-slayer doesn’t see a beast that needs to be slayed. I also really love the very innocent reason for the dragon to be where it it. I wonder how the dragon got up there and if the poor thing is afraid of heights.
      Wonderful story, Dukki! I absolutely loved it.

    4. revisis Avatar
      revisis

      Ahaha Amazing! I can see Arendt meet a dragon when he was way younger and finding out they get scared when sitting ontop of old, high, buildings xD

      Him finessing a upfront payment makes alot of sense given the dragon wont be dead….tho I wonder where he got his reputation from. Maybe not all dragons are this civil?

      In any case, a very nice refreshing story!!

    5. Tale Foundry Avatar
      Tale Foundry

      Very clever story, boo.
      I love how the scumbag Jarl has to pay upfront because the warrior is smarter than he is. I also love how when the warrior comes to the dragon, he feels a sense of comradery. I honestly have no complaints about this one, Dukki. The conflict is brilliant, and is handled even more brilliantly, and the conclusion is wholesome and sweet. I love the names you chose for this, I am kinda curious how you managed to come up with them.

      Fantastic Story!

    6. Shaviathan Avatar
      Shaviathan

      I laughed so hard at the end of this. Who would think of writing a dragon as if it’s a cat stuck in a tree? Nice twist on the usual take of dragons. Arendt seems like he’s dealt with rulers like Hindrik before, though I feel like he would ask for more after being told he’s their only option.

  12. MasaCur Avatar
    MasaCur

    Retrieving a Soul
    By MasaCur

    A gunshot rang out, and Cristian’s head snapped back. Time seemed to stand still as everyone stared in shock.

    “You bastards!” Erykah scooped Cristian’s body up and retreated with it around the corner. “Everyone, we need to withdraw!”

    The team raced for cover and carefully retreated from combat. Everyone piled into the back of the van again, and it drove off as fast as it could.

    “Melissa!” Erykah called out.

    Melissa crawled over and looked at Cristian’s face. Part of his skull was gone.

    “Melissa, we need you to do your thing now,” Erykah said.

    Melissa stared down at Cristian, her hands shaking. “I…I haven’t done a resurrection in a long time. And never with this much damage.”

    Erykah grabbed Melissa by the shoulders and shook her. “Melissa, you’re Cris’s only hope right now! Now get it together, and do what you need to do!”

    Melissa dropped to her knees and placed her hands on Cristian’s chest. The trembling lessened, but it hadn’t completely faded. She closed her eyes and fought to get her breathing under control. After a few seconds, her eyes snapped open. “Francis!”

    The former priest climbed from the front seat, and knelt down in front of her, Cristian’s body between them. “What do you need from me, Mel?”

    “Put your hands on Cristian. You’re going to help me with the resurrection.”

    Francis stared at her in awe. “I’m…what?”

    “You’re the only one that can do so,” Melissa explained. “Now put your hands on his chest, and concentrate on healing his body. It’s going to be hard, his soul has left.”

    Francis gingerly placed his hands on Cristian’s chest and closed his eyes. “So, what’s going to happen?”

    “Well, we’re going to go get Cristian’s soul back. I haven’t done this very often, so it won’t be easy.” Melissa’s smile tightened grimly. “But if you thought raiding Rikke Farlund’s base was scary, crossing the River Styx to retrieve a soul is going to stay with you for the rest of your life.”

    1. Lunabear Avatar
      Lunabear

      Oh, Mas. You’ve got me on pins and needles. I sincerely hope Cristian will be returned. I’m assuming that the prompt comes in where Melissa is concerned? Because she’s a dragon and a healer? You can also interpret Erykah’s mood as being dragon-like. Stellar job, as always.

      1. MasaCur Avatar
        MasaCur

        Actually, no, Melissa’s an elf (and healer). Sonja (not in the story) is a dragon.
        The “Here be Dragons” danger is actually the resurrection. Melissa hasn’t had a ton of experience doing this sort of thing, so she and Francis are in for an ordeal getting Cristian’s soul back, risking both of theirs to do so.

        (Spoiler alert: They manage, and Cristian returns).

        1. Lunabear Avatar
          Lunabear

          Oooooohhhh!!! That sounds amazing!! And yay! Cris will live!! Thank you for the explanation!

    2. TheAssassin Avatar
      TheAssassin

      I loved this little story. It seems at once to be very personal and small scale as well as very large in terms of its world. A very good balance. I think the ending works great as well teasing an adventure through the river Styx . That reference works so well because most people know of it while the other world building is foreign to us. Its a great blend between the known and unknown. I dont have anything negative to say, I really liked this one. 🙂

  13. Lunabear Avatar
    Lunabear

    Restoration
    by Lunabear (If I’m chosen, I give my spot up to T.S.G. Sager)

    Stephanie had never once thought her training would be used for THIS. His huge arm hung limply across her shoulders, and the walk to the lava pit was too slow for her liking. She couldn’t bear to look at his injuries again; her strength would fail if she did.

    This war with her kin had only escalated, and she shouldn’t have expected him to sit by while his clan had charged into battle.

    Sweat droplets glistened on her skin, and her tired eyes danced when they took in the glorious colors. She kneeled and relieved herself of his weight.

    “We’re here, my love.”

    He rested on all fours. A gurgling groan was his answer.

    “Blithe, please. You must go.” She removed an arrow from his side and tossed it away. A rumbling growl filled her head.

    “You can be angry with me AFTER.”

    “Grateful.”

    She nodded, and a surge of pride flowed through her as he stood on damaged legs.

    She stroked the blue dragon eye amulet around her neck. Before he got too far, she caught up with him.

    “Wait.” She placed her hands on his chest. His heart pounded, and hers sped to match it. She moved the heirloom from her neck to his.

    “Stephanie–”

    “I won’t hear it. I can at least give this to you.” She stroked her barren stomach. “But you and it have to return to me. Otherwise, I’ll come in after you.”

    He shakily chuckled, but his wince advertised what that action had cost him.

    Stephanie stood on tiptoe and kissed his lips. Her tears left heated tracks down his face. He hated that he lacked the strength to erase her sadness.

    “Go.” She stood aside. The more she cleared her face, the more she cried.

    Blithe dragged himself forward and fell ungracefully into the scorching, bubbling lava. Stephanie retreated to a safer distance.

    She held her breath. It felt like ages passed.

    Blithe finally burst upward, his golden scales and smoky grey wings shimmering.

    He circled overhead and mightily roared. He swooped into a landing, transforming back.

    They met halfway and embraced.

    1. WolfsbaneX Avatar
      WolfsbaneX

      I love this. It’s so wholesome. There are a lot of unanswered questions I have about the piece, but I also know that we have a limited amount of words. Plus we don’t need that information to understand that Stephanie is restoring Blithe’s dragon form. From what I gather, this is a Romeo and Juliet-type story. I hope we get more stories from this. Good job!

      1. Lunabear Avatar
        Lunabear

        Thank you, Wolf. It’s not so much Romeo and Juliet because Blithe’s clan actually loves Stephanie, and her family is really enamored by him. Both sides approve of their love. It’s mostly humans with over-inflated egos and those with deep hatred towards dragons. The dragons are defending themselves oh, for the most part. Although, there are some exceptions. I want to explore this universe a bit more; I’m simply trying to find the right angle to continue it from. I’m really glad you liked it. Your review is incredibly appreciated.

      2. Lunabear Avatar
        Lunabear

        Also, are there any specific questions you would like answers to? That way, I know what to work on.

        1. WolfsbaneX Avatar
          WolfsbaneX

          I initially thought only Blithe was a dragon. Other than that, it’s me being more curious about the larger story.

    2. Tale Foundry Avatar
      Tale Foundry

      OMG OMG OMG OMG LUNA THIS IS AMAZING!!!

      You paced it so well! The urgency she feels clashing with the slowness of movement is so fantastically done! The emotions really pour from this piece. I was a bit lost with the lave pool, thinking maybe the dragon in this was the weight of tradition or something, but then he’s ACTUALLY A DRAGON AND IT ALL MADE SENSE!! It’s so sweet and wonderful and great and AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!

      1. Lunabear Avatar
        Lunabear

        Thank you so much for your review, Dukks. Believe it or not, I struggled a lot with this one. I guess because I haven’t written this kind of thing in a while. I’m so glad you enjoyed it. ☺️💜

    3. Aaron Fleming Avatar
      Aaron Fleming

      This is a good piece Lunabear. I really felt you managed to leave it unclear Blithe was a dragon so that the part where he falls into the lava and is restored is something of a surprise. It is also heartwarming the relationship between Blithe and Stephanie. The descriptive facets of the story worked well such as the “surge of pride” that flowed through Stephanie. Likewise, the descriptive details of the sweat and pain also played a strong role in bringing the story to life.

      1. Lunabear Avatar
        Lunabear

        Thank you so much for your review, Aaron. It’s much appreciated. I wasn’t sure if the romantic elements of this would come out strong enough, but I’m thankful that they did. I’m so glad you enjoyed it. Thank you again!

    4. PixieWings Avatar
      PixieWings

      Ahhh, the fantasy! The dialogue and imagery! You really knocked this one out of the park, Luna. It feels like it could be a scene from a high fantasy book. I love the characters names and how they contrast with each other. I will say, I did have the same impression as Wolfsbane about Blithe being the dragon of the two of them. Was it intended for both of them to be dragons? Other than that, this is wonderful. Fantastic work!

      1. Lunabear Avatar
        Lunabear

        Thank you so very much, Pixie! I’m really glad you enjoyed this. They are not both dragons; only Blithe is. I tried to give little hints throughout the story that Stephanie is a human (i.e. her sweating, her use of kin when speaking of her family versus clan when speaking of his, and her not being able to go as close to the lava pit as Blithe is.) I also tried to sprinkle little nuances about the characters throughout the story. I’m really very thankful for you review!

    5. This is such a sweet story! There’s so much going on mentioned offhand that does a wonderful job of world building while focusing plainly on the characters and their interactions. I really like the line “Her tears left heated tracks down his face.” It’s such a unique way to convey shared sadness for one another in this situation.

      1. Lunabear Avatar
        Lunabear

        Thank you so much for your feedback, Deviacon. I’m very glad you enjoyed the story. This story is quite interesting because it forced me to think in different ways. I might expand on this, if I can figure out the angle. Thank you again!

    6. Tale Foundry Avatar
      Tale Foundry

      This piece is absolutely beautiful. I don’t think there is much that I can say that hasn’t already been said, but I’ll give it a shot. I honestly love everything about this piece. The characters, the urgency, the romance, the fantasy. The list could go on, so I shall. I love the conflict, the ending, the descriptions, the wonderfully delicious dialogue. Mmmm. I really hope you continue working on this world, it is so beautiful, and coming from someone who is hit or miss in regards to fantasy, this really kept my attention. Brilliant work, Luna!

      1. Lunabear Avatar
        Lunabear

        Thank you, Trevor. Had to hit this one differently than I usually would. So very glad that it came out as well as it did and that you enjoyed it. If I can hit it from the proper angle, I might be able to continue it. Thank you again!

    7. Calliope Rannis Avatar
      Calliope Rannis

      You already have a tonne of comments like you deserve cos this story is excellent, but aaah what a lovely scene! You mentioned in another comment about using Stephanie sweating and keeping away from the lava to indicate her humanity, and that deffo was good signposting for me when I was reading it!
      One thing I never learnt was – what exactly is the significance of the dragon eye amulet? Does it have a special power, or is it merely a precious heirloom for her family?
      This story was rather sad but very wholesome too – the character’s actions conveyed their emotions very strongly and effectively, and even though I don’t think I have seen either of them before now, I already care about both of them quite a bit! Very well done. <3

      1. Lunabear Avatar
        Lunabear

        Thank you so very much, Calliope! I always love your feedback and questions! The amulet is actually a bit of both. It has certain healing properties. This works because Stephanie is a healer as well as having been trained in a little bit of battle. Also, the amulet is an heirloom from Blithe’s family. It was a welcome gift. And yes, Blithe and Stephanie are completely new characters made specifically for this prompt. Thank you again so very much! I’m so very glad you enjoyed it!

  14. DizzyBackspin Avatar
    DizzyBackspin

    The Magic Stone
    By DizzyBackspin

    It was a warm and sunny morning in Dragon Springs. The sleepy dragonflies were resting on top of the saw grass to warm their wings in the sunshine. All the little dragonlings came out of their caves to play. Their favorite sunny day game was called “Wake up, Dragonfly!” The dragonlings would lay on their dragon bellies. They would slither into the tall saw grass. You had to be sneaky, and you had to quiet. You had to wait until the time was just right. Then… “Wake, up Dragonfly!” the dragonlings all shouted together. All the silly dragonlings laughed except one. Where was Daphne Dragon?

    Daphne Dragon was laying on the floor of her cave. She did not want to go out to play in the warm and sunny morning. She was too busy holding her treasure. It was not gold. It was not diamonds. Her treasure was a stone. If she stayed in her dark cave, the stone would glow. It would show her anything she wanted to see. She was afraid to miss anything the stone showed. While the other dragonlings grew, she did not leave her cave.

    Daphne stared into her stone for a very long time. Her wings were stiff. Her tail was sore. Her tummy rumbled. She dropped the stone. It stopped glowing. Her cave was cold and dark. The door was covered in moss. She pushed it open and went outside.

    The sun was bright and hurt her eyes. She looked for her dragonling friends but did not see them. She only saw older dragons flying in the sky. She spread her wings and tried to fly but she did not know how. She called out to the dragons flying high above. They all soared down and shouted, “Daphne, where have you been?!” Daphne was embarrassed and shy. All her dragonling friends had grown into strong dragons. They helped her exercise and she learned how to fly. Soon they all flew together, and Daphne forgot about the stone in her cave.

    1. Lunabear Avatar
      Lunabear

      This is a very cute, straightforward story, Dizzy. This also feels like a cautionary tale because of Daphne and her stone. It’s sweet Daphne shakes her obssession and how her friends help her to fly in the end. Darling entry.

    2. I love the child-like innocence of the story. The descriptions are cute and simple, easy to understand, fitting for a children’s book. I legitimately got sad when Daphne got left behind. In the end, I was wondering what the magic stone really was, though I can’t help but feel this is an allusion to watching too much TV with a good moral to take-away. Overall, great job!

  15. Gregory Hess Avatar
    Gregory Hess

    A dragon for you[Aleph null]
    By gregovin

    We exit the spaceport.

    The city is an onslaught of the unfamiliar. Strangely shaped vibrantly colored houses and stalls populate my vision. The sounds of life echo through the city. The smell of fresh spiced foods of varying types is almost overpowering. It’s so much.

    The children’s eyes have gone wide. They seem to be looking over every stall.

    One notices a small ramshackle stall, with a simple sign on it. Here be dragons.

    Soon, all three of them surround me, echoing the same demand. “can we get a dragon? Please!”

    “Maybe just one. You’ll have to share.”

    Each of the kids glaces around, evaluating the others, trying to determine if they can share something so precious with the others.

    “Ok. We promise” they say.

    I walk over to the stand, pulled by the kids.

    The stand is selling custom holoprojectors. I pick one at random and ask the vendor “how much for that one”.

    “27,000 heat credits”

    I begrudgingly pay the inflated price.

    Before I go, I try to activate the device. It flickers, but fails to turn on.

    The vendor sees this and says “oh, probably a wiring issue, pass it to me for one moment.”

    The vendor inspects the device briefly, before aggressively shaking it. A rattling noise is heard.

    The vendor continues “god dammit. Would you like to take this one?” They turn it on, and I swear a small dragon appears before me.

    “Yes please, thank you very much”

    The kids clamor to see it before the vendor turns it off.
    I hold onto it until we get to the hotel, and then let the kids play.

    1. DizzyBackspin Avatar
      DizzyBackspin

      This is a great little story. I love snapshots into other people’s lives like this. It is perfectly relatable, but enticingly exotic. You do an excellent job describing the unfamiliar city from the character’s eyes. The smells and sights, etc. There is that hint of mystery that drew me in more a la “heat credits”. That line took me away for a moment because almost everything up to that point felt like it could be present day. It is very effective! I love how this is a very familiar feeling story with a slight twist of the unreal.

      1. Tale Foundry Avatar
        Tale Foundry

        The MC is such a sweet guy, Grego. I’m honestly curious about the Aleph Null universe, it seems so complex, but well-fit. In some stories, you’ve got Red vs. Blue Airsoft battles, in others, like this one, the character goes to what I believe to be a festival. So amazing, curious at what’s next.

        I love how the generous MC gives the kids such a wonderful gift, one that costs so much. And they’re amazed, because it’s such an interesting device. Very well done!

    2. Lunabear Avatar
      Lunabear

      This is a sweet one, Greg. I love how they’re excited to see a dragon, even if it’s simply an image. Nicely done.

    3. I really liked how you incorporated the dragon into your sci-fi setting. It very much reminded me of vendors at Ren-fairs selling prop dragons and kids reacting to them. The opening paragraph of the spaceport did make me think of it being some great unwieldy beast as well, much like a dragon of its own. Very well done!

    4. Calliope Rannis Avatar
      Calliope Rannis

      A neat little scene! I don’t know the context for why the main character is looking after these three kids, but they seem pretty generous and nice! The sense of place is very strong too, including how it seems to almost overwhelm the main character.
      I especially like that despite how grounded and down to earth this place seems to be (including the technical issues with the dragon projector itself), the dragon allows the kids to still have some sense of wonder and magic in the world they live in. Good work!

  16. Connor/Dragoneye Avatar
    Connor/Dragoneye

    The Dragon and the Goat
    By Connor/Dragoneye

    “Get out of here!”

    Akashor tumbled out of the tavern door, face-planting into the street. The shattering twang of strings drew his sight to his lute, snapped in half and covered in mud. As he reached for it, a boot drove itself into his hand.

    “You freak! What even are you? Did your mom make love with a man and a dragon at the same time?”

    Akashor’s long hair parted to reveal the left half of his face, coated in patches of scales and a single horn winding up his skull. A yellow slit eye contrasted the crystalline blue sheen in his “human” eye. A swift jab across his cheek sent Akashor’s face back down into the stone.

    Under his heavy breaths, he heard a clopping of hooves from the tavern door. “Hey, piss off, why don’t you?” a voice called out. Akashor’s aggressor tumbled beside him, with the shape of a Faun standing over them.

    “Now how does that feel? Don’t make me kick in your teeth!”

    The bully shuddered in fear, only to scramble and flee. Akashor sidled up to the tavern’s stoop, only for the Faun to sit herself down beside him.

    “Are you okay?”

    “Yeah, just a little-,” Akashor answered as he reached towards his forehead and inhaled from sharp pain.

    “Hey hey hey, hold still.” The Faun waved her hand, and a set of floating lights hovered in her palm. The insectoid motes then whizzed over to his wounds, lapping up the running blood and slowly stitching his gashes shut.

    “Thank you for that. What’s your name?”

    “Imifey, but you can call me Imi. You?”

    “I’m Akashor.”

    “Akashor, huh? I’ll say, your voice is pretty.”

    “Thank you.” The silence allowed the night’s ambiance to surround the duo.

    Imi then broke the silence, “So, do you have a song to sing for me? After all, I did save you.”

    1. Alright, this piece has me hooked. I want to more more about Akashor and his heritage. I want to know if he and Imi become friends and go on adventures together. I just want more altogether.
      On a technical note, this piece seems like it’s supposed to take place in a more medieval setting. If that is truly the case, I would suggest changing some of the language in your characters’ dialogue just a tad. Words like “okay” and “mom” are just a little bit too modern. This could also be me just being picky about word choice. Go with your gut first.
      Overall, I loved this story! Wonderful job, Connor!

    2. WolfsbaneX Avatar
      WolfsbaneX

      Poor Akashor. Being bullied for your heritage is an unfortunate reality, and you’ve definitely captured that experience here vividly. I’m sure we’ve all wanted to be Imi in this situation. The glimpse of Imi’s healing magic is also well done. If I had a complaint, it’d be about the ending. Imi asking Akashor for a song because she fixed him up seems a bit opportunistic. We know she’s probably not malicious, so it’s not as bad as it could be. Overall, it’s a nice piece about standing up for others.

    3. Lunabear Avatar
      Lunabear

      I love the human spirit you always seem to capture in your stories, Connor. So much sympathy for Akashor being an outcast. So glad that Faun is there to help him. Somber, yet hopeful tale.

    4. Tale Foundry Avatar
      Tale Foundry

      Awww this is such a sweet story!! I love the idea of the human and dragon traits marbling together the way you’ve described them. He sounds wonderful! And the faun is just a badass, let’s be honest. The kindness she shows him, right after kicking some ass, honestly is just a wonderful show of character traits.
      A marvelous story, indeed!

      Now, excuse me. Dukki gotta go choke a bitch. No one picks on half dragon people and gets away with it.

  17. Amy Trow Avatar
    Amy Trow

    An Adventurer’s Rebuttal (Froggyquest)
    By minergirl778 (aka frogfireFantasy)

    Okay, Let’s get the record straight.

    I. Am NOT. A dragon.

    I know, I know, my reputation precedes me. The Wandering Dragon, Mage of Blaze, Crisper of Criminals. I’ve become somewhat infamous for my adventures, but I’ve come to tell you the truth of the matter. And that truth is… I’m not a dragon.

    I’m a frog.

    A Frog girl, to be precise.

    Now, some might think this detail is irrelevant. Isn’t the whole point of the nickname to invoke the image of fire breathing beasts? What better tag for someone with a rare form of fire magic? Especially when they aren’t human!

    Well, yes. That’s not the problem

    The problem comes when some folks think that nickname is literal.

    I don’t know how many times I’ve been just going along my journey, when I find myself stopped by a knight or alchemist intent on either ridding me from the world or harvesting my organs! Seriously, how hard is it to differentiate!? I don’t have wings or a tail, I don’t have scales or sharp teeth, and I don’t lay waste to the countryside!

    Well… I have scorched a couple fields…But those had bandits in them! And they were an accident!

    …What?

    Oh, don’t give me that look! I tried my best! Sometimes my magic just gets out of hand. Don’t tell me you’ve never done something you regretted. It’s the same for me! Only my mistakes end up charring the landscape. And… hurting people.

    Th-that’s not the point, though! My point is, as much as I appreciate the cool ways folks have been spinning my tales, I’m not all that special. I’m not a winged beast, I’m not an ancient evil, I’m just a normal girl.

    A normal humanoid frog girl.

    With an ultra rare, dangerous form of magic.

    Which is tied to her emotional state.

    Which she’s horrible at regulating.

    And ends up… Scorching the countryside as a result.

    Y’know what? Maybe just… keep the nickname.

    1. Lunabear Avatar
      Lunabear

      I love this introspective perspective, Froggy. It’s fun, funny, and a bit sad. I also love that you used your name to spin a story. That’s very creative. I hope the little frog humanoid girl finds who she is. Great story.

    2. Lari B.Haven Avatar
      Lari B.Haven

      I loved this one Froggie! I really loved that you used this to explain the name of the Froggie Fire character. It’s hilarious and a bit sad at the same time, but you extracted so much personality out of it. The perils of controlling fire… Keep Going Froggie!

    3. Tale Foundry Avatar
      Tale Foundry

      I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT

      Froggie this is so good!! It’s such a cute and unique story!! And this take on the prompt is wonderful!! I want more!! I NEED MORE!!!

    4. MasaCur Avatar
      MasaCur

      This was funny and cute, Froggy. It kind of reminds me of Lina Inverse, from Slayers, if Lina was a frog instead of a strangely OP human sorceress. Still, I love the explanation of what the frog girl is, and how she’s not a dragon, only for her to realize it sounds like semantics, and then just realize, maybe she’s better off letting everyone think she’s a dragon anyway. This was a lot of fun.

    5. MysteryElement Avatar
      MysteryElement

      XD Crisper of Criminals! I am dying! This is so wonderful, I enjoyed every second. You bring across your characters voice well and how she perceives herself. I am so glad you had the time to write and submit this! I am very pleased to finally meet the frog of fire. Well done.

    6. GJFuller Avatar
      GJFuller

      This reminds me of Full Metal Alchemist. This was funny 🙂
      I liked this rant style, like you’re correcting this common misconception. I think the best part about this piece is that I can hear you narrating it. Your “voice” is very clear in this and it gives the piece a unique feel.
      Good work!

    7. Calliope Rannis Avatar
      Calliope Rannis

      Awwww, so this is the Frog that is At Least Sometimes On Fire! And as is often the case with those superpowered people who choose to fight crime with them, the responsibities of such a task are ones the user of those powers often cannot live up to. Hence why a otherwise normal frog girl ends up being framed as a dangerous monster, and even she can’t adequately defend herself against the accusation.

      Seeing that decay of confidence and integrity in her actions was actually rather sad to watch. Especially the final line with her giving up on the idea entirely. It also reminds me a fair bit of my Nyssa too – both girls with unstable magic and a whole lotta guilt about the people they hurt with it. Well done with the story! 😀

  18. WolfsbaneX Avatar
    WolfsbaneX

    Among Dragons
    By Hemming Sebastian Bane

    Shanmori no Hanako burst through the door, staff in hand and a fire in her eyes. Two of the guards drew their shortswords, but the man on the throne held up a hand, stopping them.

    “Hanako, so nice of you to join me in my estate.”

    A chill went down the kitsune’s spine and her stomach churned. “You know I wouldn’t be here if you hadn’t abducted my little brother.”

    “Now, now. ‘Abduct’ is too harsh. I arrested Sannao on theft charges because that is what he is.”

    Hanako struck the ground with the butt of her staff, filling the room with a loud boom and making a small crater in the ground. “Lies!”

    The man on the throne chuckled as he picked up an orb beside his throne. “Oh it’s true. Because what I decree is law.”

    Hanako charged the throne, lashing out with her staff. The man caught the blow with his hand and extended the orb towards her. Lightning danced around the orb, his eyes becoming serpentine as black scales formed around them. A bolt of lightning slammed into Hanako, pushing her back and leaving her convulsing on the floor. The smell of ozone filled the chamber.

    “A pity, Hanako. I thought kitsune were more resilient than this. How pathetic. And now you shall be tried for treason.”

    He motioned for the two guards. “Pick her up and bring her before me.”

    Hanako watched as one of the guards from the door picked her up and dragged her towards the golden throne.

    “Zhuyama, you’re…you’re him,” Hanako managed. “The Black Dragon of the South.”

    Zhuyama smiled evilly. “There’s the kitsune intellect I have heard of. Too bad I will not be able to enjoy your company much longer.”

    Suddenly, a bolt of lightning streaked over Hanako’s head and slammed into Zhuyama. The dragon in disguise spilled out of his throne with a slump. Hanako broke away from the guards. An older gentleman strided in, holding a similar orb to Zhuyama’s.

    “My, my,” the stranger said with a smile. “It seems my former student lacks any discipline.”

    1. WolfsbaneX Avatar
      WolfsbaneX

      Pronunciation Guide:
      Shanmori no Hanako: “shahn-mo-ri no hah-nah-koe”
      Sannao: “Sahn-now”
      kitsune: “key-tsu-nay”
      Zhuyama: “shoo-yah-mah”

    2. Twangyflame0 Avatar
      Twangyflame0

      Oh my god, I can picture all of this world. All the characters in over the top clothing and poses. Crazy powers. Honestly, this feels like the introduction to Dynasty Warriors or Mortal Kombat game. I just want to see all of this animated, honestly. Very well done, Wolf.

    3. Lunabear Avatar
      Lunabear

      Wolfsbane, this is excellent. I can picture everything in my head so vividly. This feels like an animated Mortal Kombat battle, and I love it. I really would love to see more from this. So many different avenues to take. Astounding.

    4. Aaron Fleming Avatar
      Aaron Fleming

      This story started off very well, dropping the reader directly into the action with Shanmori no Hanako bursting into the throne room of the tyrant. It kept solid pacing, combining action (the physical conflict between Shanmori no Hanako and the Black Dragon tyrant) and dialogue in equal measure to maintain interest and energy. One could argue the ending is a very slight Deus ex Machina (as the outside figure saves the day and resolves the conflict), but given you are working with a limited space of words it is certainly very understandable you had to draw it to its dramatic close. All and all a very good bit of drama and action.

    5. Tale Foundry Avatar
      Tale Foundry

      OOOOOOOOOH. Is this the world of Oniyama? Needless to say, I LOVE the East Asian influence. Kitsune! Dragons! Strangers! Oh my!

      This is honestly something I could sink my teeth into further Wolf, the aesthetic is beautiful, the wording is impeccable, and the descriptions are extremely vivid.

      Absolutely love this!

  19. Glaceon373 Avatar
    Glaceon373

    “The Pile of Bones”
    by Carrie (Glaceon373)

    She cut her way through the undergrowth with a silver machete, sweat sliding down her forehead and past the bags under her eyes. Soon, her blade clanged against something stiff and solid. Brushing the plants away with a gloved hand, she smiled.

    And they tried to tell her this place couldn’t exist.

    It didn’t take her long to find what looked like a sealed up entrance, or the nearby panel with a handprint carved into it. She removed her glove and placed her hand on it.

    She tried applying force, turning her hand; nothing. She sighed, then pushed a small amount of magic through her fingers.

    The door opened immediately.

    She smiled.

    Those Witherleaf idiots tried to tell her magic was a recent anomaly. That she was a moron to search for its history.

    Now who were the morons?

    No modern architecture could rival the intricate stonework or elegant carvings. There were handprint panels next to every door, and when she channeled magic through them, they also illuminated blue lights in the walls and ceilings, which gradually dimmed as the magic she charged them with ran out.

    She had nearly completed a map of the main floor when she found the massive staircase. At the bottom was one very large door. She opened it and gasped.

    The room was larger and taller than a medieval audience chamber. Her magic wasn’t strong enough to fully brighten the room, but it was enough to guide her towards the elevated platform in the center.

    On the platform were bones. A skeleton of a creature larger than any other. With teeth the size of her forearm and wings larger than those of a passenger jet.

    And four massive shackles chaining it to the edges of the platform.

    She stepped around the bones and was almost on the other side when something moved in the corner of her eye. The smallest bones of the tail twitched, then twitched again. From the skull of the bones came a low, menacing growl.

    She grinned. The head magi-scientists were going to flip when she got back.

    1. I love this marriage of science and magic you’ve put into this piece. I also really love the feeling of vindication that translates from your main character to the reader. She’s put all this hard work into finding this place that everyone told her wasn’t real. Yet here is is! I wonder if this bastion is sealed for a reason. The living dragon skeleton seems like a pretty dangerous thing.
      As far as technical stuff that I can nit-pick about, I’m hard pressed to find much. Great job with this story! I truly enjoyed it.

    2. Lunabear Avatar
      Lunabear

      Carrie, this is one cool entry. The use of atmosphere and strong imagery definitely kept me invested. I also really love the protagonist’s adventurous, mischievous spirit. I would absolutely love to see where this goes. Great story.

    3. Connor/Dragoneye Avatar
      Connor/Dragoneye

      This piece oozes atmosphere! It has a very noticeable vibe and feel, and I like every ounce of it. This unnamed protagonist clearly has some kind of ax to grind with these Witherleaf people, who talked down to her quite a bit, so I want to follow along with this journey of hers. One thing I noticed was a lack of sense with magic. You describe as her “pushing a small amount of magic”. Depending on how particular you are with the word choice and the actual mechanics of the magic, I’d use a different word to describe the act of magic moving in a caster’s body, something more descriptive.

      Otherwise, I love this piece a ton, and I want to see more!

  20. Lari B. Haven Avatar
    Lari B. Haven

    Dragons, here be not.
    By Larissa (Lari B. Haven)

    Both were sitting in silence in his living room. But she was the one making her disdain for his slack clear. After all, he was making her write the fifth apology letter with another half-baked schematic to boot.

    The professor knew that she worried about his well being, more than she would like to admit. He was drowning himself in that endeavor, and Alexandria couldn’t understand his current interest in dragons.

    The men from the factory were growing tired of his endless delays. But he paid them no mind. Even if he was short on money and with past due bills; he could not bring himself to finish it anymore. He needed something that didn’t make him think about the clogged water turbines problem.

    He kept on reading about the myths of giant scaly creatures from distant lands. Ignoring the obvious threat.

    “I really don’t see any rhyme or reason for you to keep bankrupting yourself in favor of silly stories, Professor…“ She declared, tired of his dismissive attitude.

    “I like my ‘silly stories’, they make me as happy as a child.” He answered. “There are so many types of dragons in different countries… I’d love to travel and meet them!”

    “Meet them?” Alexandria dropped the pen and crossed her arms. “Why though?”

    “Who doesn’t want to shout ‘Here be dragons!’ and find them in a dark cave, full of dangers, and hopefully don’t get scorched by their breath of fire.”

    She rolled her eyes and got back to writing.

    “How about a forest? Venture in this jungle, and you might even see it…” She raised a grin that sparked his interest. “It’s a gigantic snake-like thing, taller than a hill, glistening like pure fire. Everyone knows the story!”

    “It’s a local myth?” He beamed with excitement, closing the book.

    She chuckled and shrugged: “But I can only tell you, if you send them a complete piece, Professor!”

    He recognized the defeat. His young friend was as cunning and ruthless as any dragon. He grabbed his material from under the counter. Sometimes he was too curious for his own good.

    1. Glaceon373 Avatar
      Glaceon373

      This is great, Lari. Starting with the title “Dragons, here be not” immediately tells the reader that you’re turning this prompt on its head, but that doesn’t stop this story from following the prompt at all. The way you wrote the dynamic between Alexandria and the Professor is also very well handled. Overall, this is an amazing story, Lari. Great job!

    2. Lunabear Avatar
      Lunabear

      Ever expanding this world, Lari. I love how Professor Anderson is like a father to Alexandria. Your writing and this story have definitely come a long way. They’re both phenomenal. Using the mood of a dragon is also great. Can’t wait to see what the next installment brings.

    3. I love the concept, of not focusing on the presence of dragons, but more with the possibility of their presence. Your writing sparks interest in exploration, curiosity, and wonder, evoking a sense of adventure for readers. There are just a few grammatical errors, which should be quick fixes anyway. Besides, the story’s flow is still very clear, with descriptions of vivid detail. Great job!

    4. Connor/Dragoneye Avatar
      Connor/Dragoneye

      Such a refreshing take on the prompt, Lari! As much as I love dragons, sometimes using the question of their existence as a plot point is as interesting as them really existing. The professor clearly has a deep interest in the topic, like me, but to the point that it seems to be the only thing he thinks about. Alexandria’s dismissal of his dream is a little saddening, since the question remains, but she seems to be okay with it. Overall, it’s a nice little piece of characterization, with the prompt as the catalyst for such acts. Nicely done, Lari!

  21. The Dragon’s Elegy
    By Alkarius

    “Hey, Iliya, over here, check this out!”
    Kirill beckoned at the girl who was following him, as he entered and old crumbled building, the facade looked similar to a normal storefront like you could find anywhere in the Ark-City, But here, on the surface, things haven’t been maintained by anyone in centuries.
    The interior of the building was quite dark, with only the light from the sun outside highlighting the shelves and hundreds of tattered and ruined books and surprisingly a small number of rubbles inside. Some books were still on their ran down shelves.
    “Are you sure we should be here?” she responded in a patronizing tone. “We’re quite far
    from the rest of the group and we have no idea when that thing will show itself again.”

    Kirill crouched and picked something from the floor, then looked back at Iliya and excitedly said.
    “Look! This one is mostly intact!” he then whispered the title to himself. “The Dragon’s Elegy…” He held a small book, the cover was hard to decipher but you could still see a red beast drawn on it.
    Uncertain, Illiya approached him and asked.
    “Are you sure we’re allowed to do that? What if it’s unregistered material? What if we get caught?” and after a short pose followed with “anyway, what’s it about?”

    “Don’t worry… our helmets are turned off, there’s no way they can monitor what we see here.” He said, still focused on the pages.

    “it’s about some knight sent to kill a dragon. But as he goes on his quest, and kills the dragon, he learns that the beast’s true nature isn’t really what he was told it was… After that, it’s kinda hard to read.”

    Iliya looked down, pensive,
    “It kind of reminds you of what we’re doing, huh.”

    A few more minutes passed by before both of them heard a faint “Fwishhhh” coming from outside.
    “Someone shot a flare, something’s up.”
    Said Kirill as he put the book back on a shelf. Instinctively, they both put their helmet back on.

    “Yeah, we best hurry up.”

    1. Glaceon373 Avatar
      Glaceon373

      I really like the concept behind this, Alkarius. Instead of making the story about a literal dragon, you went with the two characters finding a story about a dragon that they can relate to. Sure, there’s a few grammatical and formatting mistakes, but that doesn’t weaken the essence of the story. Overall, Alkarius, very well done. Nice job!

    2. Lunabear Avatar
      Lunabear

      This has an interesting blend of past and futuristic, Alk. I love how they find the book that tells the legends of dragons. Would definitely enjoy seeing more from this world and the characters.

    3. Tale Foundry Avatar
      Tale Foundry

      I LOVE this. I feel like this story could be applied to anything should you strip the dystopian backdrop away, it’s got a super timeless feel. Like in a different setting, it could be a Brother sharing his favourite childhood story with his little sister, relishing in the nostalgia. But back to the story on hand.

      I like the chemistry between Iliya and Kirill, the cliffhanger at the end which leaves the reader clueless about what happened with the flare, and the allusion between the children’s book and the real world issue that is plaguing the main characters.

      My only critique might be to have someone proofread for you, there’s a few grammatical issues, but it doesn’t hold the setting back. Just some advice. 🙂

      Other than that, fantastic story, Alk! Can’t wait to read more Apostasy;Zero!

  22. revisis Avatar
    revisis

    A Martial Affair
    by Exce

    The hangar was bustling with even more activity than usual, and if the chief engineer had a say, he’d have shooed all of them out.

    But he had been assured this was an important state-function and that his workers could keep working, even with all the silks around.

    A vain hope.

    “Ahh, Johanson, right?” an exceptionally loud voice shouted, causing him to wince. Why were they all so keen to shout? He turned, facing the plump man that approached.
    He wore the colours of the martial branch but had no medals pinned to his chest. And given that Johanson hadn’t seen him before, he most likely was a bureaucrat. The worst of them all.

    They treated the machines like toys to marvel at. Not like the weapons of war and defence they were.

    Now the man was pointing past Johanson to the heart piece of today’s ruckus.
    “Is that the beauty I have read so much about? The Zenithblazer? Is it gonna be done soon?”

    It was an enormous automaton, like the steel horses ridden by the lawmen or the iron watchmen guarding the heart of the Chandry. But this one would not walk. This one would fly.

    Most of its front was finished, enough to give a good presentation to the silks at least, even as the workers crawled through its insides.

    It had a vaguely reptilian head, crowned with an impressive set of horns. It was armoured, but this would not impede the flexibility of its long neck.

    “Well, we need to finish the internal mechanisms, and the installment of the core and base functions.” Johanson pulled one end of his thick mustache.”With flight and weapon tests I’d Say…half a year.”

    With a chuckle, he shook his head. “But it’s not like we are on a deadline here. We are not at war.”

    Disturbingly, now the other man chuckled.

    “Indeed! Indeed, it’s a time of peace! Keep up the good work!”
    With that, he turned to leave, and Johanson remained with the feeling that there had been a ‘for now’ hiding in those sentences…

    1. Glaceon373 Avatar
      Glaceon373

      Oooooooh, this is very interesting, Exce. I like how your “dragon” in this story is actually a mechanical weapon of war, which Johanson and the “silk” (awesome name, by the way) think about differently. Is this “silk” planning a war? Will he care if the Zenithblazer isn’t done in time? All of these questions make your story even better, Exce. Overall, fantastic job!

    2. Lunabear Avatar
      Lunabear

      A wonderful departure from your Angel series, Exce. I really love the factory setting and how slick Johansson is. He so obviously doesn’t care about the workers or peace; he just wants to make money. The silk is also cool. Would love to see another installment.

    3. MysteryElement Avatar
      MysteryElement

      Ooooh… This begs the question; who is the dragon here? The mech with reptilian features, or the man with a dangerous edge to his voice? Very interesting indeed. I remember you talking about using ‘silks’ instead of ‘suits’ in this, and I think it works. That may be since I knew you were thinking of using it already, but in a longer piece you would have the freedom to elaborate if you thought it sounded vague, and I think it adds an interesting point of context to the world they are in.

    4. Tale Foundry Avatar
      Tale Foundry

      Did… Did you just give Johanson a character in your universe, Exce? XD
      If you did, then this is absolutely fitting. Johanson being a ‘Gin and all. :p

      Now, onto the story. I love how Johanson is slick, like his moustache. You’re definitely improving your dialogue skills, Exce. Amazing job! Amazing Story! Always happy to taste the lore you universe emits, it’s always so… Juicy!

    5. Calliope Rannis Avatar
      Calliope Rannis

      What an intriguing and ominious piece! True true, it is a time of piece…so why exactly *are* they building a weapon of war? One significant enough to have a state function dedicated to seeing it and all, and with an inherently offensive context. After all, a ‘blazer’ isn’t the kinda thing you want to defend your own stuff with.
      It seems that for the Silks, this ‘peace’ is just a conveniance buying time for them to set up for the next war, rather than an ideal they plan on maintaining. With a weapon like the Zenithblazer, they may even be planning on striking first.
      Very good job, description and dialogue was both great! 😀

  23. Here Be Mathesons
    By PitL

    In retrospect, Mr. Duncan would later say, the house should have tipped them off.

    “… who did you say this school friend of yours was, Jimmy?” Mrs. Duncan glanced around the ornate ballroom. Tall ivory pillars flanked each side of the hall, stretching upward into the distance, farther than the eye could see.

    Jimmy looked up. “Carter! He’s so cool, mom! He sits with me at lunch, breathes fi – ”

    A voice creaked out from directly behind the family. “Mr. Matheson will see you now.”

    Mr. Duncan turned and gave a start. The man – butler? – was hunched over, with skin tinged with a slight green. “Oh! Uh – lead the way, Mr. Igor – oh! Er, sorry!”  He chuckled in embarrassment.

    Mrs. Duncan peered at her husband over the rims of her glasses. “Honey…”

    The man sighed. “Please follow me.” He loped across the room, quickly arriving at a massive archway. “This way,” he said.

    “Let’s go, mom!” Jimmy dashed towards the arch, unsuccessfully trying to pull Mrs. Duncan along with him.

    After many complaints, the family passed through the doorway – walking, not running – and were guided to the parlor. It was a massive room, only slightly smaller than the ballroom they had just left. Piles of antique furniture, coins, and an occasional painting were scattered across the room.

    Mr. Duncan blinked. “Er, sir… ” he paused. “Weren’t we supposed to be meeting this Matheson fellow?”

    BANG

    The door closed behind them with a thud, locking shut.

    Jimmy grinned. “Don’t worry! I think we’re right where we’re supposed to be!”

    “Er… hello? Mr. Matheson? Mrs. Matheson?” Mrs. Duncan called out. “Are… are you in here?”

    Mrs. Duncan stumbled back as a plume of steam erupted from behind a cabinet. Items fell and shattered as the pile shifted, displaying a figure within.

    A massive, scaly dragon pulled itself from the pile, awakening from a nap.

    Jimmy lunged towards it. “Carter!”

    Mr. Duncan flinched, and quickly steeled himself. “Aaaah! Er, Mr. Matheson, I take it – ” he paused. “Wait, that’s the kid?”

    Steam erupted from another, significantly larger pile in the distance.

    Mr. Duncan blinked. “Oh.”

    1. Lunabear Avatar
      Lunabear

      This is such an engaging romp, Pit. I love how much detail you pack into the story. The characters are so great. I absolutely laughed out loud a few times. I’m intrigued in seeing where this leads. Amazing job.

    2. MysteryElement Avatar
      MysteryElement

      A very fun take on the prompt Pit. I have to admit the final line had me grinning at Mr. Duncan’s realization of the larger dragon about to appear. It is also really fun to imagine dragons living in massive, overly luxurious houses. My only question is, if they were taken into the room they were napping in, were the family taken into the bedroom? Or perhaps they have different piles of treasure all around the house for different times of day? I have to admit I am very enamored with the questions this world poses to me.

    3. Tale Foundry Avatar
      Tale Foundry

      What if the dragon from Guards! Guards! was kind, had a dragon wife and dragon kid, and invites his son’s suburban friend’s family over? Atleast, that’s the sort of vibes I got whilst reading this.
      I like the opening like and the closing lines. The opener because it sets the tone that something weird is happening, while the closing lines really hit how the realization hit the Duncan’s like a sack of bricks. XD

      Excellent piece and take on the prompt!

  24. Burn the Holdings
    By Astrid Jones

    “Why have you called me, youngling?” the great Night Dragon, Gloama, asked as she materialized from the shadows of the trees. “Are the human kingdoms warring again? Have they finally killed each other off?”

    Tessa, sitting beside the fire, raised her head from her knees. What Gloama saw on the woman’s face halted her approach.

    “Who hurt you?” Gloama growled. “I will see them buried.”

    “Tears are not always from a wound, Gloama,” Tessa said, wiping her cheeks with her sleeves.

    Gloama encircled her friend and the little fire with her fur and feather bulk. She sniffed Tessa to be certain there were no wounds the woman was hiding from her. There was no tell-tale scent of blood or medicine, but she still smelled pain.

    “You are hurt, though,” she said.

    “It is nothing, dear friend. Just a broken heart.”

    Gloama snorted angrily, sparks fluttering from her nostrils. “That is one of the worst wounds! Who has broken your heart? I will break their bones.”

    “No, Gloama.” Tess patted the Night Dragon’s foreleg as it curled around her possessively. “I do not wish anyone hurt because of my silly heart. I called you for comfort. You always knew how to ease my pain when I was little.”

    “You are still little,” Gloama said, pressing her snout to Tessa’s damp cheek.

    They sat, watching the flames dwindle for a time before Tessa spoke again.

    “You were right. The human kingdoms are full of misery, sorrow, and pain.”

    “You are looking at them through the lens of heartbreak, youngling,” Gloama said. “Though it hurts me to admit it, there is some good to them. You just need time to heal before you can see it again.”

    The great Night Dragon stood, stretching.

    “Come home with me,” Gloama said. “You need time to mend your heart. That cannot be done here.”

    “I do miss your cave,” said Tessa, finally smiling. With Gloama’s help, she clambered onto her friend’s back.

    “But first, we shall burn the holdings of the one who wronged you to the ground.”

    “Gloama, no!”

    “Please? It will be fun.”

    1. Twangyflame0 Avatar
      Twangyflame0

      Ahhhhh, dragon friend is so nice and destructive, I love Gloama! She kind of touts the line of being an animalistic dragon and showing human emotions, which is a nice contrast against Tessa who is going through an emotion that all humans undoubtedly feel. This story was a treat to read. Very well done, Astrid.

    2. Lunabear Avatar
      Lunabear

      Astrid, this is adorable and sweet and oh so mischievous. I always love a good revenge story. More than that, however, I love a good tale of friendship and protectiveness. I’m sure with a friend like Gloama, Tessa will find her strength again. Lovely story.

    3. Lari B.Haven Avatar
      Lari B.Haven

      This one is great. I love how both characters bounce each other off. With the dragon being at the same time playing off as being detached from humanity, but very motherlike. The end is also quite funny, showing that they have a wonderful friendship. I’d love to see more of this. Keep going Astrid!

    4. DesOttsel Avatar
      DesOttsel

      This is a lot of fun. The dragon has a good split of animalistic and human traits which is nice. It’s essentially a mother and child. Personally, I would have liked to see more contrast between their viewpoints and temperaments, but that’s just my opinion. It’s still a really nice read. Good job.

    5. MysteryElement Avatar
      MysteryElement

      Oh, my heart! So precious and endearing. I appreciate the nature of their relationship, and the thought as to the type to comfort a dragon would offer. I had a friend who offered a similar retributive offer during my heartache(less bloody though). And even though I did not wish for it, the offer made me smile. I knew I had a friend, like Tessa did, and that knowledge mends the heart in surprising ways. Well Done Astrid.

  25. MysteryElement Avatar
    MysteryElement

    Do Not Disturb!
    By MysteryElement

    Marilynne shook me awake with the fervor and relentless strength only a seven-year-old can muster. Reluctantly prying my eyes open, I look out the window behind my niece. The sky was a hazy grey, cloudless and cold.

    “Linny? What time is it?” I croak as I fumble for my phone.

    “It’s time to see dragons! I promised I would show you!” She was trying to whisper, but her voice was still too loud. “Come on, get up. Get up! GET UP!”

    I am half aware of her pulling me from my warm bed, and I distinctly remember something about shoe laces, but by the time my mind catches up with my body we are hiking out behind the house, the morning mist lazily trailing through the surrounding pines.

    “Where are we going, Linny?” Do her parents even know she is out here? What am I even doing?

    “Shhhh!” she hisses dramatically at me. “We don’t want to scare them.”

    I finally recognize our surroundings. We were almost at The Lookout, a spot on my sister’s property overlooking the valley below. As we approach the clearing, Linny crouches low, motioning me to do the same.

    “We have to be very quiet,” she whispers “they’re easy to scare.”

    I follow her to the clearing where she points down. I am prepared to ‘oooh’ and ‘aaaah’ at whatever she is showing me, giving the typical enthusiasm for a game of make-believe, but my breath sticks in my throat like peanut butter. The morning mist had pooled into the valley below, lazily wrapping around the foothills. From this far up, it looks like wispy white dragons writhing in the valley. The breaking dawn gently lights up the mist with an ethereal light, the misty dragons glowing and iridescent gold.

    “See them?” Her voice, full of wonder and awe, reflects my own as I answer.

    “Yeah, Linny. I see them.”

    When we got back, I helped Linny make a wooden sign. As far as I know it’s still there, painted white with big red letters;

    Do Not Disturb The Dragons!

    1. This is so sweet. I love the relationship between the narrator and their niece. I am curious about how she got into the narrator’s house? Unless the narrator is visiting and staying in Linny’s house. It’s not super clear, but it doesn’t matter much at all to the story. It flows just fine without it (this is just me being something close to picky).
      The descriptions you used of the valley below the Lookout made the mist dragons very real for my imagination. You made me as a reader feel some of the awe that the narrator feels upon viewing their niece’s dragons. Wonderful story!

    2. Lunabear Avatar
      Lunabear

      This is an incredibly beautiful, sweet entry, Mystery. You capture so much childlike wonder and innocence from Marilynne and Linny. I love how they choose to protect the dragon’s instead of hunting them or assuming they’re dangerous. Leaves a warm feeling inside. Brilliantly written.

    3. Lari B.Haven Avatar
      Lari B.Haven

      Such a heartwarming piece. I really liked the mood of the prompt. I like how whimsical and innocent the premise is. Being there grew up one being, usually the logical and skeptical, being completely surprised by the discovery of them. Also, the end it’s just so cute! This looks like a plot of a children’s book that I would love to read.

    4. Gregory Hess Avatar
      Gregory Hess

      Oh man, those are some really cool clouds! The way the child sees them as actual dragons is really fun! Unless they are actual dragons. It also sounds like it is a phenomenon that occurs regularly, which makes it all the more cool! The descriptions are really on point too! Good job!

  26. DesOttsel Avatar
    DesOttsel

    Buried long ago
    by Gage Jarman

    The stone corridors were musky, masked slightly by the smoke of a solitary torch. Ancient murals were cracked and flaking away. The knight traced his finger along one and continued onward. The labyrinthine ruins opened up to a large chamber. Large bones filled the arena, falling over themselves and up the walls; battles left deep scars on the walls. The knight trepidatiously stepped into the arena.

    “What happenstance is this?”

    The knight looked up at a sorceress looming over the rim of the dilapidated stadium seating.

    “Why do you pursue me?” The knight stood firmly in the pit of bones.

    “Pursue?” the sorceress scoffed. “You act as if I care what happens to your paramour.”
    “Do not sully the purity of The Twilight Maiden.”

    “Pure… So, she left you pining in your fallow bed. I’m here, if you desire companionship.” she chuckled.

    “Wretch!”

    The sorceress shot two bolts of magic, shutting the arena gates.

    “You will not impede my charge again!” the knight shouted.

    “Heroes must struggle. Otherwise, it wouldn’t make a very grand tale. I wonder how your ballad will sound?”

    Dark energy pulsed in her hands. The bones cracked and shattered like thunder. Essence seeped from their hollows, gathering into a black mass. Spiraling, shifting, the darkness grew teeth and scales and claws, and it roared emitting a deafening wave of malice and pain. The knight braced himself, raising his shield. The chamber shook. A section of wall collapsed. The sorceress fell, striking her head. Her vision was going dark. The knight moved, shielding her from the ethereal drake. “Why?” she thought.

    *****

    The Sorceress awoke next to fire. She was hyper aware of her body. Nothing was different besides her throbbing head. She looked at the knight, sitting several feet away, with fear.

    “Did you…” she wrapped her arms around herself.

    “Yes, I tended to your wounds.”

    The sorceress stared with confusion.

    “I don’t intend to kill someone so pitiful.”

    “Pitiful! I’m a master of the soul arts.”

    He looked down at the woman wrapped in a heavy blanket. “Not your abilities, just your heart. It’s weeping…”

    1. Ohp, you gotta be careful where you cast some heavy magic like that. I think all too often people forget their surroundings in movies/stories, so having it become the main play in this was refreshing! And the witch can be as powerful as she wants… if she cant control what she summons then whats the point?

      I do enjoy the back and forward between the two. She taunts him but it isn’t without reason, I think. She seems more like she’s seen this story far too often. I also like how you kept their dialect consistent; whether it be from research or reading you did it well! 🙂

      My only critique is that in the first paragraph nearly every sentence but one started with the word “The”, it made it drag just a little bit in my opinion but after that, everything was nicely put together!

      1. DesOttsel Avatar
        DesOttsel

        Oh, I didn’t even notice that. Part of it is because I name him the knight though.

        As far as the dialogue is concerned. I was heavily influenced by Spice and Wolf for the witch and the knight was just a generic knight haha. I was trying really hard to not make him too over the top chivalrous.

    2. Lunabear Avatar
      Lunabear

      Oh, Gage! There’s so much action and heart in your piece! I love how two enemies become allies in a fun, unconventional manner. Also love that the knight is quite chivalrous and the witch is sassy. The ending had me tearing up. Great story!

    3. Tale Foundry Avatar
      Tale Foundry

      Great story, Ottsel! I especially love the line: “Heroes must struggle. Otherwise, it wouldn’t make a very grand tale. I wonder how your ballad will sound?” Such a hilarious line, at least for me. :>

      Would definitely love to see more from this world, the characters are charming, and I’d love to see more of them.

    4. Calliope Rannis Avatar
      Calliope Rannis

      Oh I really liked this one! It reminds me of some videogame bosses in particular, where the villain summons a big old monster to fight the hero and then skeddadles off to the next dungeon – except in this case, the act of summoning the dark dragon causes the villain to be bopped on the head instead, and the hero is too much of a hero to *not* protect her from the consequences of her own actions.

      I also super enjoyed the actual description of the summon sequence itself – it had a super cool visual progression to it, from shattered bones to swirling black mass to it’s final twisted draconic form. I’d love to see that sort of visual before my eyes and makes for a great intro to a dangerous enemy like that.

      But what I liked most of all was the Sorceress’s vulnerability behind her bluster. Even before injuring herself, there’s a lot of indication in her dialogue – feeling the need to deny her pursuit of him at all for example, as well as the probable projection in her taunt to the Knight about being rejected by the women that he loves. And of course, her body language and behaviour without the bluster brought all that vulnerability into the open very well.

      Great job, one of my faves this week! :3 <3

  27. GJFuller Avatar
    GJFuller

    Hic Sunt Dragones
    By Giovanna J. Fuller

    “The Map of a Thousand Planets…” He whispered in awe. “Do you know what you have, madam?”

    “Yes.” Mistress Ylon took a drag of her cigarette. “And you are The Cartographer…?”
    Dr. Peters stroked his beard. “I am, but I fail-.”

    “You want the map.”

    “Anyone would want this-.”

    “I know.” She took another puff. Her voice crackled like the static of a tv set. “But I’m offering it to you. You’re the only one who can read it, doctor.”

    The young man eyed the aged woman warily. He was wise enough to know that nothing came for free. Everything in the world came with a price tag or some sort of nasty little catch. The doctor laid the map back on the table and put on an air of indifference. “And so what if I am? I am The Cartographer.”

    Mistress Ylon sat back in her seat and gave a low whistle. “I’m willing to give you the map.”

    “For what price?”

    “You’re smart, for a rich kid.” She smirked. “You and I will be great pals.”

    “The price, madam. Or I walk.”

    “Alright, alright. Don’t get your knickers in a bunch.” She leaned over the table, as though the small, secluded alcove needed more privacy. “You’re taking me to The Pit.”

    Dr. Peters froze. The Pit. ‘No…she can’t be…’ He thought as he stared at the woman’s face. She was serious.. He gulped.

    “Aw…don’t be that way, doc. Think about it.” She slid over in the crescent shaped booth. Their hands touched and her breath tickled his neck as she spoke directly into his ear. “You get The Map of a Thousand Planets…and all you have to do is take me to The Pit. Think of all you could do with this map.” She ran a finger over the item Dr. Peters had coveted for so long. It was so close. “What’s a measly bit of danger when something like this is up for grabs…?”

    1. Twangyflame0 Avatar
      Twangyflame0

      Ooooo, this sounds like the start of some wacky adventure. I have to admit, I am very curious about who Ylon is and what her plans are. She kind of feels a little bit like a fem-fètale. I’m curious about the other terminology and what weight they carry. “The Pit” sounds like an awesome name. Very well done.

    2. Alkarius Avatar
      Alkarius

      I really love the descriptors you use here, I also really enjoyed the conversation depicted, it grabs your attention very well and makes you want to know what is up with this map, I’m also curious of what “the pit” is You could also very quickly understand what kind of character they are. Love it!

    3. I really loved this piece! The characters feel solid right off the bat. Mistress Ylon feels like a very no nonsense person, but also very cunning and slightly jaded. I really hope Dr. Peters’ curiosity gets the better of him, if only for the sake of promised danger and adventure. I feel like there’s much he can learn from Mistress Ylon on such an adventure.
      Once again, absolutely loved this story.

    4. Lunabear Avatar
      Lunabear

      This one is sly, fun, and flirty, GJ. Ylon makes her fair points in a sensual way. The hint of sexual tension is a nice touch. I especially love that it’s very subtle. An interesting turn from your fairytale like tales, and I thoroughly enjoyed it.

    5. Lari B.Haven Avatar
      Lari B.Haven

      A very well-constructed story like always GJ! I love the mood of danger and temptation of this piece. I love how, with very few hints, we can know so much about the world just by the subtle clues. I also how easy is to read the character’s personalities. Very good GJ, love your stories.

    6. MasaCur Avatar
      MasaCur

      Ooh, offer them the temptation of an object of a most covetous nature, and let them weigh it against the danger it costs. I found this such a fun story. The Pit sounds like a scary and foreboding place, and I worry for Dr. Peters when he has to take Mistress Ylon there. The small descriptions here and there within your story really helped sell the atmosphere of this story. Really enjoyed it, GJ.

  28. The Chains that Bind
    By L. L. Marco

    Daniel was jerked awake by the sound of chains in his empty bedroom. A strange sensation built up inside him, guiding him to the open window to gaze out at the forest. He didn’t want to go. Daniel knew better; his mother had spent all seven years of his life warning him the woods were dangerous. Older kids had told stories about a ghoulish cult. He had a healthy dose of fear that should have protected him. But the chains of fate had entangled him the moment he’d bumped into that strange witch; his life had changed forever. He just didn’t know yet. And so, alone and frightened, the boy found himself wandering into the forbidden woods without knowing why.

    The bramble cut into his feet as he stumbled through it. The forest grew darker with each step. Soon, the moon was blacked out by a thick canopy of mostly dead, barren trees. Daniel thought the branches looked like crooked hands clawing up at the sky to steal away the light. He shivered and looked away, taking a moment to rub the sleep from his eyes. But when he opened them…

    Fog. There hadn’t been any before, but now it coiled around him like a massive serpent, thick and unyielding in all directions. A yelp escaped him as he fell back into the dirt. The spell binding him had dissipated. It had served its purpose.

    Voices swirled around in the fog. Whispers, cries, and even screams all rang out in a symphony of chaos that overwhelmed his senses. Daniel cried. It was all too frightening for a seven year old to handle. Clamping his hands over his ears, Daniel cried out for his mother. It was only then that the maddening whispers ceased and the forest fell still.

    The sound of chains caught his attention. Bleary eyed, Daniel gazed up at the woman who had emerged from the fog. He thought he recognized her but the memory was a distant dream he couldn’t quite reach.

    “M-Mommy?”

    The witch smiled. “Forget her. That life is over now.”

    1. MysteryElement Avatar
      MysteryElement

      Oh my, I have a bad feeling about this… This was a lovely eerie display. The tension was palpable, and when he reaches the witch at the end my heart dropped in despair. I like how you took the prompt to interpret ‘Here be Danger’ with the serpentine fog giving a nod to the prompt. Overall, lovely execution

    2. Lunabear Avatar
      Lunabear

      Marco, this one is deep. Such dark, overwhelming atmosphere. I feel so bad for Daniel in this, especially because he’s so young and when the witch of legend appears. Who knows why she wants him? Would definitely love more to this story. Brilliant.

    3. Lari B.Haven Avatar
      Lari B.Haven

      I really liked the atmosphere! It’s very creepy and well rounded. Kids in dangerous situations are always something that builds tension nicely. I love that you took this approach of the unknown quite literally, but not putting any dragons in it. This whole setup makes it fell like the beginning of a fairytale (and probably a quite grim one). Keep going L. I really liked it!

    4. DesOttsel Avatar
      DesOttsel

      Oh, this is great. I love how he just got pulled to the dark by some unconscious curiosity, some supernatural pull going against all his instincts and fears. The description and atmosphere are really well done and really set the tone for this eerie night in the woods where the witch is waiting.

  29. Matthew Avatar
    Matthew

    Corn Flakes
    by Matthew (Handsome Johanson)

    “Hey Ollie?” Rebecca calls out.

    His voice rings out from the other room. “Yeah?”

    Ollie sets down the box of Rebecca’s stuff that he was unpacking and walks towards Rebecca’s voice in the hallway.

    “Need some help?” he asks, flashing her a smile.

    “Oh, I was just wondering what was in this closet?” Rebecca gestures to the white door with the phrase “KEEP OUT. MONSTERS/DEMONS INSIDE.” written on it.

    Ollie’s eyes suddenly grow wider. “Oh! I forgot about this room!” He quickly stands between her and the door.

    “Uhhh. It’s just dangerous cult stuff.” He says, a bit embarrassed. “You wouldn’t want to get entangled with that.”

    “Aw Come on!” Rebecca frowns. “It can’t be THAT dangerous can it?”

    Ollie sighs. “Ok. Are you absolutely sure you want to see what’s inside?”

    Rebecca nods quickly, then remembers her manners and puts on a serious face. “Only if you are OK with it, dear.”

    “Haha I can see that look in your eye.” He says. “I’ll show you what’s inside, but remember, you asked for this!” Ollie turns around and slowly opens the door.

    Rebecca watches until Ollie opens the door and reveals…

    A fairly large closet with some shelving units for storage and a freezer in the back.

    Ollie gestures with his hand for her to come inside, and Rebecca heads in to inspect the storage shelves.

    “What’s so demonic about…” she rummages through a box. “Cypress mulch?”

    “Well…. The demon bit was kinda an exaggeration.” Ollie removes the cover on the tank behind him. “Now, don’t get scared. I would like you to meet: Corn Flakes, my albino Burmese python.”

    Rebecca’s eyes widen as she gazes at the fifteen foot long, yellow and white beast.

    “BABY!” She rushes to the window and starts making kissing noises at the curious gentle giant.

    “Why were you afraid of showing me this cutie?” Rebecca asked.

    Ollie rubs his neck a little. “I really didn’t want to accidentally scare you off.”

    “Honey, you could never scare me off.” she says. “I guess you are stuck with me forever!”

    1. MysteryElement Avatar
      MysteryElement

      So cute! Here be the most adorable dragon you will ever see. I have to admit I thought Ollie was a little brother at first, but once it clicked they were together the interaction made a more sense. I was not expecting the dragon to be a python, but it made this story so precious and really highlighted how well these two characters are in sync(since she did not run away). Very fun, I loved it.

    2. Twangyflame0 Avatar
      Twangyflame0

      BABY! I wish to also run over to the snake and give boops, pets, and nose rubs as well. Also, I love seeing the return of these two in this weird cult world! They just kind of work well as a couple and I can see how they get along. It’s actually nice reading about on-going romance than a budding one. I really enjoyed the cuteness of this story. Very well done.

    3. I wonder how many people have stumbled into Ollie’s closet and been frightened of Corn Flakes that he found it necessary to put up a keep out sign. I’m also a little concerned that he forgot about a whole room of his house where he keeps a live creature. But moving a significant other in is extremely exciting, so I can see how a tiny room might slip his mind for a moment. And I totally agree with Rebecca. If she’s not put off by his cult activities, she’s not going to be scared off by a mundane pet snake.
      I really like seeing these shorts of Rebecca and Ollie and their developing relationship. Great job!

    4. Lunabear Avatar
      Lunabear

      I love the misleading title of this, Matty. It’s so sweet that Rebecca accepts Ollie with all of his facets and faces. I also adore his snake and how Rebecca immediately loves Corn Flakes. Wholesome and precious.

    5. Tale Foundry Avatar
      Tale Foundry

      I love the dynamic between Ollie and Rebecca, and I love the slice of life vibes emitting from this piece. Ollie and Rebecca a precious, and I hope when real conflict surfaces, like it does, their bond is stronger the whatever they face. AH, I love them.

      Also neat twist on it being a pet snake, and I mean, he’s not wrong. With it being one of the world’s largest snakes (In the top 5), it could definitely be viewed as a monster. :>

      Love the story Matty, look forward to more from this.

    6. GJFuller Avatar
      GJFuller

      Awwwww! Adorable little baby!
      I love how Rebecca and Ollie’s relationship is evolving through your submissions. They’re so cute together. Aside from the snake, my favorite part about this piece is the subversion of expectations. Since a large part of Ollie’s life revolves around a cult, one would think he is keeping unspeakable horrors in that room. However, when all Rebecca finds is cypress mulch, it threw me off. The reveal of Corn Flakes made me smile. (then again, the thought of cute little noodles always makes me smile)
      Good work 🙂

  30. Twangyflame0 Avatar
    Twangyflame0

    Draconic Love
    By Twangyflame0

    Olga was worried, as was Mikael. Ever since Baldr had snuck away during the spring solstice, he hadn’t been the same. The bard she had known and grown up with was so different. He was no longer staying to crack jokes and have their small adventures in the nearby woods. He was no longer playing at the tavern and making young maidens swoon. He was now always traveling up to that treacherous, and oppressive mountain.

    He had always been fascinated with that mountain, ever since he heard stories of the supposed dragon that rested up there. Olga and Mikael thought he would eventually grow up and move on to make his own legend. Mikael told Olga he had encouraged Baldr to travel up there in an attempt to expedite the process. But now they barely saw their closest friend and when they did, he seemed so different.

    Baldr always had a bright personality that demanded to be looked upon. Everyone noticed him when he walked into a room. He was fit enough to serve the entourage of a Jarl from any of the clans. His skill with the hurdy-gurdy was unparalleled by anyone in the nearby towns.

    But now, his smile was different. It didn’t look like the party animal she knew, but more like her father’s. His voice and songs seemed to carry a weight of melancholy that seemingly came from nowhere, except for that contemptible mountain. It felt like he had aged ten years ahead of them. Like he had seen the world, without his childhood friends ever knowing.

    For a day, Olga wondered if it was her fault…

    But she knew better…

    It was that mountain that took her friend. She needed to save him.

    She confronted him in his home one day.

    “You need to stop going up that mountain!”

    Baldr looked confused. “What? Why?”

    “I don’t know what you found up there, but it’s changed you. And not for the better.”

    Baldr simply shook his head and pulled out a white, reptilian scale. “What I found was the love of my life, Olga. That’s all.”

    1. I really like this piece, Twangy. Olga seems very possessive of her friend Baldr and it makes me wonder if she’s that way with Mikael as well. If she’s not, is there perhaps a hidden love she’s been harboring for Baldr. It would certainly explain all the jealousy she holds for the mountain and the dragon within that has taken her friend’s attention away from her. Or perhaps she is incredibly vain, a somewhat draconic trait, and must have everyone’s attention.
      Altogether, wonderful piece, Twangy. I hope to see more of Baldr and his friends (and his dragon).

    2. What a wholesome retelling of the elusively filthy bard class. Instead of seducing the dragon, he fell in love with her! And how love changes a person for sure; you captured it well. The cooled personality, the wandering mind and pleasant smiles… This is a super cute love story! Although Baldr should have told his friends before they went mad with curiosity. I hope they all get along and they can have a housewarming party!

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      Amy Trow

      And that’s how dragonborns are made!
      What a guy. Taking the jokey idea of “Bard seduces the dragon’ and flipped it all on its head! I like it! You gotta wonder why his dragon waifu can’t come to him though. Maybe it doesn’t want to hurt any people? Or scare them or whatever. You gotta wonder if he’s gonna introduce Olga to dragon wife. Maybe if he introduces her, she’ll like the dragon lady too! Anyway, enough of my late-night musings. This is a great story, with an awesome twist at the end! Great job!

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      Lunabear

      A melancholy follow up to the cave scene. I love how bittersweet this is, Twangy. The added layer of his friends being concerned is well executed and makes these characters memorable and nuanced. Simply beautiful. I hope Baldr has his love returned.

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      Tale Foundry

      Damn, this story is so powerful. It’s such a nice coming-of-age fantasy romance, which is never a genre type I thought I’d ever get the chance to experience. While I do feel sorry for his friends, the fact that Baldr is growing up, finding his joy in life, leaving the nest. It’s quite admirable, and a powerful message for a story so small. Very powerful story, Twangers.

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      Calliope Rannis

      This is a somber piece, but not a sad one in my opinion. It’s a very interesting feeling, watching the progression of someone you used to know well mature and change into someone quite different – but not for the worse like Olga mistakenly thinks. Just for a different kind of ‘better’ than she expected.
      Indeed, it must be quite the reconstructive experience, to love and be loved by a creature so old and different from the world he knew before. What lessons did he learn about the world, and himself, up there? And considering dragons can often fly, the world may have very literally been shown to him during one of their dates.
      Overall, a very interesting and thought-provoking work. And sweet too, when you read back and know the context for Baldr’s changed behaviour. Good work! :3

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