Writing Group: The End of the Cycle (PRIVATE)

Hello, Souls of All Generations!

Have you ever been stuck in any kind of cycle? Whether it’s a job, or traditions, or even just your personal routine? Maybe it’s time to change things up a bit, because…

This week’s Writing Group prompt is:

The End of the Cycle

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Life is full of cycles. The four seasons, the months in a year, the days in a week, the common 9 to 5… cycles are everywhere we look. In some ways, they’re great. They bring a sense of normalcy and order to one’s life.

But cycles aren’t always viewed so favorably. For example, perhaps a small village has always been terrorized by some menacing outside force. Every month on a specified date, they are to sacrifice someone to this terror to keep the rest of the village safe. But finally one person says enough is enough and decides to do something else about this beast. Or maybe a family has followed the same tradition for several generations, but the newest child wants to choose their own path. Do they follow the family’s footsteps, or find their own way? Maybe the heir to the throne of a vast kingdom decides it’s time to change things for the good of his own subjects, as well as those in neighboring lands. Stop wars and disputes, and instead try to find some way to finally achieve peace for all involved.

Perhaps the cycle in question is the day to day grind of an office worker. Get up, come in, sit down, work, lunch, work, go home, sleep, and do it all again the next day. Vacation isn’t enough, because they just fall back into it when they get back. So perhaps they finally decide to quit and start that online soap shop they always wanted? Or maybe they look for a new job in something that’s more outgoing and not so repetitive? Maybe the cycle that needs to be broken is simply your own. Maybe you write about finally telling that writer’s block to hit the road.

Whatever the case may be, we’re excited to see what you have in store for us, just like every week. Or, well, mostly every week.

After all, even we need to break the cycle sometimes.

—Shawna

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32 responses to “Writing Group: The End of the Cycle (PRIVATE)”

  1. Gregovin Avatar
    Gregovin

    “Last sunset”
    By Gregovin [Aleph Null Sci Fi universe]

    The Earth had made just over twelve billion cycles around Sol. I have been alive for about 7,468,543,200 of them. The sun started to expand about two billion cycles ago. Today, the earth will be engulfed by the sun.

    Lilly and I set out the blanket over the cold floor as we slow down to our final destination. We managed to find an old earth meal reproduction code that just barely allowed us to produce some proper ham sandwiches. Luckily the chips were trivial.

    I programmed the viewport to track the Earth as we came to a stop. The deep red flames burned bright, giving the earth’s land an eerie red tinge. The automated geoengineering systems were still impressively managing to keep the planet cool enough to maintain its atmosphere and water, but it looked nothing like I remembered it. I knew nothing of importance would be lost, it had all been wound down long ago, but it still was quite melancholy to look on at what I knew would be the Earth’s final moments.

    A jet of red flame burst past from the sun, missing the earth and us. Suddenly I was quite glad we had decided not to arrive a full standard day early. This place was not exactly safe.

    The food was ready. Lilly took out a glass. “To a new beginning?”
    “Yeah”

    We sat down and looked on as the red flames slowly rose.

    The red approached the edge of the solarshield, then breached it. The atmosphere ignited, flashing blinding orange for a split second. Small fireballs of even greater brightness were just barely visible on the far side of the Earth. The solar shields must have finally failed with that.

    The oceans boiled, and clouds formed and dissipated. A large trail of condensation formed going out from the Earth as the atmosphere suddenly decided to depart. The planet was soaked in red flame as we watched on, eating the food of old earth.

  2. WolfsbaneX Avatar
    WolfsbaneX

    “Change of Heart” (Worldswap with pitl: Abhisos)
    By Hemming Sebastian Bane

    Laurence groaned as he blinked the blurriness out of his vision. His head throbbed. White. Wait. His living room wasn’t white. Laurence forced his vision to focus and sat up. A nurse at the nearby station ran up to him.

    “Sir, are you okay?”

    “Okay?! I’m in a damn hospital! Why the hell am I here?!”

    The nurse gently forced him down onto his cot with her hand.

    “Easy, sir. The doctor will explain everything once you’re settled into your room.”

    “Room?” Laurence sat back up. “Oh, hell no! I’m going home! You are NOT adding extra money to my bill in addition to whatever you did.”

    “But sir, you need to rest, and we need to monitor you.”

    “The hell you need to do that for?!”

    Laurence continued to insist on his departure for a full hour before the nurse called orderlies in to take him to his room. He grumbled all the way. Even when they allowed his wife in, Laurence was still upset. After locking the cot’s wheels and plugging the bed in, the orderlies left before Laurence could lash out at them again, verbally or otherwise.

    “I’m not staying in no hospital! I can heal as well at home as I can in a hospital.”

    “Larry,” his wife cooed. “Relax”

    “How can I relax in this damn place, Rose? How?!”

    “Larry…”

    A knock came to the door. Rose invited the knocker in before Laurence could protest. She couldn’t have been older than his middle girl – late twenties at the oldest. The clipboard in her hands seemed just a bit too big.

    She cleared her throat. “Hello, Mr. MacDonald, I’m Dr. Stacey Dresden. How are you feeling?”

    Laurence scoffed. “Like shit.”

    “Larry!”

    “It’s okay, Mrs. MacDonald. Getting a brand new heart’s stressful.”

    “Wait… what?” Larry almost leapt from his bed.

    “We had to replace your heart. There were no donors, but the mechanical one we implanted is state of the art.”

    Laurence felt the rage melt into fear. “W-what the hell have you done to me?!”

    1. Gregovin Avatar
      Gregovin

      I love the characterization here. I like how Larry never actually asks what happened or why they want to supervise him, instead just wanting out. I also think its telling that none of the nurses just tell him what is going on. As for the mechanical heart, I hope that works out for him long enough so that he can find a more proper replacement, thought it does make me wonder exactly what happened to his heart in the first place.

  3. Vengeance Best Unclaimed
    by Gerrit(Rattus)

    The blade pressed into flesh, drawing out a thin stream of blood that traced a path down the glimmering edge. How strange it was, for history to repeat itself in a complete mirror. Crennel looked up at her with pleading eyes, his face awash with fear.

    “Please, Serennia, you don’t want to do this.” His voice was quivering. Good. It was about time he felt a measure of the fear he had inflicted on her.

    Serennia’s eyes bore into his, her free hand tight around his throat. She drank in his pain, his terror, his anguish. She remembered the nights spent crying in her room, hiding from the monster that now trembled before her.

    “Believe me. There are very few things I want more.” Her hand tightened its grip around the hilt of her sword, the muscles in her arm flexing as they prepared to stab forward. To run him through and leave him as nothing more than a bloody heap on the floor.

    It was what he deserved.

    Wasn’t it?

    Her fingers pressed deeper into the sides of his neck, his breath straining to fill his lungs. As Crennel’s eyes searched hers for any sign of mercy, Serennia found her grip on the sword loosening.

    If she killed him, then what? Would she feel better? Would the world be a better place?

    Perhaps, but that wasn’t her call to make. Emrys had drilled that into her mind well enough.

    She loved that man, but Gods could he make things difficult.

    “But it isn’t about what I want.” She released her iron grip on his throat and sheathed her sword, leaving him to crumple down against the wall. The wiry man fell onto his knees, shaking and muttering near-unintelligible ‘thank you’s under his breath.

    His sins would come back for him one day, but it would not be today. And it would not be by her hand.

    1. jesse fisher Avatar
      jesse fisher

      I see the cycle clearly with this, a circle of violence that could have kept going. The rage from Serennia was almost as visible as the sword cutting Crennel’s fear. Good setup and payoff on the whole of the story, also the ending leaves hope for good to be done for this situation.

    2. WolfsbaneX Avatar
      WolfsbaneX

      You know, this reminds me of a scene from Schindler’s List where Oskar Schindler is talking to Amon. Oskar asserts that there is power in forgiveness. I think that you exemplify this idea here. The want to kill is palpable. But that wouldn’t end the cycle. Also, the idea that she doesn’t come to this by herself is just as beautiful. Nicely done.

    3. Gregovin Avatar
      Gregovin

      It would be really fun and interesting if you decide to go with the route of her never forgiving him for whatever he did but still deciding that revenge is not a good option. Or you could go that more standard route, that would be fine. Either way, I appreciate the character exploration and the way you used common themes to tell an interesting story!

    4. i-prefer-the-term-antihero Avatar
      i-prefer-the-term-antihero

      “The blade pressed into flesh, drawing out a thin stream of blood that traced a path down the glimmering edge. How strange it was, for history to repeat itself in a complete mirror. Crennel looked up at her with pleading eyes, his face awash with fear.”
      –I just…gahh this is such a powerful opener. I love the image so much and it’s so full of emotion and intrigue. And then when I hit “Crennel” I was extra intrigued. I remembered the name from last week. Which is cool because it felt like I had a hint of what the cycle was before arriving here

      “His voice was quivering. Good. It was about time he felt a measure of the fear he had inflicted on her.”
      –Love this. The action is awesome on its own but the addition of Serrenia’s thoughts (and thereby how we should feel about the situation) is even cooler and full of power

      “Serennia’s eyes bore into his, her free hand tight around his throat. She drank in his pain, his terror, his anguish. She remembered the nights spent crying in her room, hiding from the monster that now trembled before her.
      “Believe me. There are very few things I want more.”
      –Also very much love this: great action, great emotion, great and powerful context…yes. I love the active verb of “drank” as well.
      The dialogue is awesome too. I feel the badassery dripping out of my computer

      “Perhaps, but that wasn’t her call to make. Emrys had drilled that into her mind well enough.
      She loved that man, but Gods could he make things difficult.”
      –Now this is interesting. I wonder how and why Emrys drilled that into her mind. If it’s an ideal of his or if there’s a political reason.
      And it’s cool to know she for sure loves him back.

      “The wiry man fell onto his knees, shaking and muttering near-unintelligible ‘thank you’s under his breath.”
      –Love this.

      It’s very interesting that she chooses not to kill him. I’m torn on whether I like it.
      On the one hand it shows a lot of maturity and that she’s a good person, which is nice.
      On the other hand…bitch needs to die XD
      It’s funny, this piece is very similar to last week’s, and on last week’s at first I was kinda thinking she’d spare him, and on this one I was thinking she’d kill him.
      Though, I will say, one thing is that it makes it feel much less like a definitive end to the cycle when she leaves him alive. Like he could very easily hurt her again.
      Then again…I guess maybe that was the point? That it was a cycle of violence and she could only end it by choosing peace?

      Great work, as always!!

    5. RVMPLSTLTSKN Avatar
      RVMPLSTLTSKN

      Tagback!

      You did an excellent job with this piece. We don’t need to know who Emrys is to appreciate his influence on Serennia and you structured his callback flawlessly.

      Great job!

  4. i-prefer-the-term-antihero Avatar
    i-prefer-the-term-antihero

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    1. This is such a beautiful piece. Peter’s feelings come across in such a real, honest way. When I saw that the piece was mostly dialogue I wasn’t sure how I would feel about it, but there’s so much power and emotion in the dialogue that other descriptors aren’t really needed.

      ||“The people actually worth your friendship wouldn’t care.”||

      This is such a wonderful line. It’s one of those lessons that is so hard to learn and realize in the moment, but such an important thing to accept.

      ||“Honestly? That kid was getting to be too much for me.” ||

      I loved this. I don’t know what it is about it, but this line made me smile so much when I read it. Something about the honesty and the mild playfulness in it just really got me.

      This was a really good piece, and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. I look forward to learning more about your interpretation of Peter and Neverland more in the future!

    2. WolfsbaneX Avatar
      WolfsbaneX

      Wait. Wait wait wait wait. Peter is the monster?! Things just got so much more interesting. I don’t think the characters of Peter Pan and Frankenstein’s monster have ever been syncretized, but the way you write things, it’s bound to be interesting. I also like how the cycle is him pushing others away. Good job!

    3. jesse fisher Avatar
      jesse fisher

      You know I never thought of peter pan in that way. He would hide his true self so others will like him. I like the whole message here as while peter is an immature being it take someone pointing out that he is fine as he is. Hiding away from the world won’t change anything and your own cycle will repeat.

    4. RVMPLSTLTSKN Avatar
      RVMPLSTLTSKN

      I feel like I’m missing context with this piece. This revelation Wendy gives Peter is well executed, but we get no exposition on his appearance, not even when he looks at his hands and speaks his thoughts aloud.

      I do like the callback to Wendy’s “motherhood” and Peter’s “fatherhood” in the original novel. It’s especially poignant here and a lovely scene between the pair.

      Good work!

    5. Calliope Rannis Avatar
      Calliope Rannis

      Awwwww. <3 We've seen a lot of Peter, and the dark mental place he is in behind his veil of youth and playfulness. But aside from Hook, we've never really seen anyone capable of piercing that veil, of seeing the true Peter underneath all his illusions – and, more importantly, to like and accept what they see.
      I do adore that being the reason for why Wendy is the character we focus on for Peter's part of the tale – for in her seeing through it, it is the beginning of the end of the child-taking and killing cycle. Not to mention, the end of Peter's cycles of self-hatred too.

      I did find it interesting that Wendy never quite answered the 'looking in a mirror and hating what you see' question. Is that hesitation simply a difficulty in agreeing with Peter at that moment, or has Wendy had her own issues with self-image too? (Considering the gender roles of her time period, this is far from unlikely to be honest)

      "I spun around, eyes wide. “What?! How?! Why?!” – for some reason, I thought this line had a lot of Victor in it. Maybe it's just the dramatic exclaimations, but it did feel like a shared trait of speech at least, and I found it rather sweet. :3

      And I *adored* the reveal that actually, the performance of Peter Pan had already been beginning to grate on Wendy anyway. In many a sense, this was the best possible person and time for someone other than Hook to have seen his true form. I do wonder though – how *long* did it take for that version of Pan to grate on Wendy, because I don't know how long she's stayed at Neverland at this point. ;P

      In any case, a wonderful story Kaylie! Very well done indeed. <3

  5. jesse fisher Avatar
    jesse fisher

    Remains of the Past Cycle
    By Jesse Fisher

    The mechanical sound of a ventilator, a dialysis machine, and a heart monitor played on in the background noise of a sorry state of a human lying on an operation table. This poor soul should have been dead by all rights, tetraplegia amputee with third-degree burns on what remained on their broken body. If not for dental records identifying them would have been impossible, but they did and the family was willing to do anything to heal their loved one.

    Even this frankenstein operation, a cybernetic human to the point they could not be ‘human’ anymore.

    Most of the higher ups were going for this, mostly because they doubted the patient would survive anything but the money they would make was too much to not milk.

    Thus the process of turning a ruined human into something more began.

    —-

    The dust cloud over the long deserted land began to clear as a figure in tattered cloth moved with the winds hitting a lull for the day. The ruined buildings that once stood there were almost completely gone. What metal that did not rust away must be buried by the storming in the area. This looked to be an artificial city built in a desert as a show of how powerful the people were. All it was now was the scrap metal that the cloth figure needed for life.

    It had noticed the left hip was going out and it must make a new one.

    Time was not something It cared about as it only needed to look at the sun for energy. Noise did come to it’s auditory receptors but it was not any machine like it. It seemed to be more language of whatever was saying it.

    With a grunt it just moved on leaving what it could not carry.

    1. Gregovin Avatar
      Gregovin

      I like how it is somewhat ambiguous weather the transformation was a good or bad thing, and I like the implied immortality and the ambiguous treatment thereof. I find transhumanism a much more interesting topic when it isn’t outright judged. I also appreciate the very real yet also dystopian way the doctors are acting. Very Good!

  6. Glaceon373 Avatar
    Glaceon373

    Ending the Call
    by Carrie (Glaceon373) (Students of the DiamondBridge Academy universe)
    (Please do not read on stream)

    Roselyn sat at her desk, arms wrapped around her legs, squishing her forehead into her knees.

    Crumpled papers scattered the room, the notepad she’d torn them from on its last few pages. So many beginnings of plans and scripts and idea lists, all of them rejected and tossed aside.

    “Nothing’s good enough…” she whispered, grabbing a random page and smoothing it out, just to crumple it again.

    Roselyn took a deep breath. She got herself into this mess, so she had to dig herself out of it.

    It wasn’t like he’d do it himself…

    She remembered something he’d said once. Not the specific words, but it was something about honesty, and how it could hurt at first to tell the truth, but in the end it was the best thing to do.

    “… Screw it.”

    She dialed his number. Immediately, a knot formed in her throat.

    It rang. One ring, two rings, three, four, then—

    “You’ve reached the voicemail box of Feleron Xinquien! Lemme just repeat that in Elvish real quick and then you can leave your message!”

    His repetition quivered as her hand holding the phone shook.

    “I can do this, I can do this…”

    When Feleron’s message ended, Roselyn took a deep breath.

    “Hi! It’s Roselyn, and…”

    Another breath as she shoved the memories of all the words on those crumpled-up pages.

    “I need to tell you something. When you first came to our school, I…”

    Her thumb hovered over the hang up button, but she moved it off.

    “I’m… gonna introduce you to some friends. That aren’t me. And then we’re going to hang out a lot less one-on-one, and you’re gonna do stuff that isn’t just what I tell you to do, okay?”

    One last deep breath.

    “Because it’s wrong. For me to do this. I shouldn’t be controlling your life. I’ve forced you to hang out with only me over and over again, and it’s wrong. I, uh, understand if you don’t want to be friends anymore, either.”

    She paused.

    “Bye?”

    She clicked off the call.

    Then threw her phone across the room.

    1. Alexander Lewis Avatar
      Alexander Lewis

      I don’t see worry described so well very often. I can practically feel the anxiety, and so of course I’m incredibly invested. I’d probably need a degree to give this enough praise, it hits all the right beats for me without feeling forced in the slightest. 10/10 would story again

  7. Calliope Rannis Avatar
    Calliope Rannis

    End Of Year Debrief (A nexial tower, within the Astral Deep)
    Hostess: Calliope Rannis

    “Another year completed!” spoke the cheery voice of a gnome girl with thick, wavy hair. Tapping the table excitedly, she continued. “How is everyone? Feeling good? Ready for another year?”

    Nyssa lay back in her chair and sighed. “I really don’t want to be doing anything for a year, to be honest.”

    “Aww, oh don’t worry Nyssa!” The first gnome said, patting Nyssa’s fluffy hair. “I’m totally fine with just giving you light cosy prompt stories for the year, you probably won’t be needed for any actual adventuring.”

    “…probably?”

    “Well I mean if Ember gets ganked in the Starfinder game then you would be the backup for that!”

    “Ah. Yes. You mean the game with the backstory where I stab a needle into my-”

    “Yes yes that one. It’s fine, you actually want to do that in the backstory anyway. You don’t even regret it afterwards or anything!”

    “Sure, but did you really have to doaaaaaaaah!” Nyssa’s reply was cut off as the other gnome picked her up and carried her back to the centre chair, cradling her like a baby.

    Utterly mortified by the scenario, she glanced over to the other characters sitting round the table. Willowvine was looking at her with an adoring expression, Mary looked somehow more embarrassed than Nyssa herself was, Nyx was trying not to explode with laughter at the entire scene, and Alice wasn’t even looking, focused entirely on the meeting notes before her. But she did speak.

    “So, that’s over two hundred words spent on Nyssa already. Should we all just say our bits now or will you be editing this later Calliope?”

    Willowvine raised her hand. “I’m perfectly fine.” She said with a sweet smile.

    “Oh, gosh I really don’t think I need to say much,” Mary flustered, “my campaign probably won’t be happening this year anyway…”

    “Hey, at least you HAVE a campaign booked.” Nyx interrupted, before turning towards Calliope. “I’m bored. I want to actually do things beyond my backstory beats, you know?”

    “Look Nyx, I certainly understand. I’d love to play with you as well, I just need a perfect moment for it! I don’t want you to be without that backstory in whatever game I play you in after all, that’s basically half the fun.”

    “But why can’t I just-”

    “EVERYBODY STOP!” Alice’s voice rang out as she waved her hand frantically. “We are already way over the word count for god’s sake!”

    Calliope tilted her head in thought for a moment. “Eh. It’s fine. This story is probably too meta to submit to the stream anyway.”

    “Oh so you AREN’T going to be editing this later? We are just ignoring the word count now?”

    “Sure, why not? It can be an amusing one-time gimmick, and I’m feeling lazy today.”

    “She just doesn’t want to edit down her precious Nyssa section.” Nyx said with a smirk, glancing over to Nyssa and whispering “Author’s pettttt…” without even bothering to hide it.

    Alice stood up. “Well you all can continue this nonsense if you like, but I’m not writing down another word!”

    1. Glaceon373 Avatar
      Glaceon373

      Calliope, I wasn’t expecting this in the slightest, but I love it! It’s a very cute take on the prompt, and a very interesting thing to do. It’s not very often that you get to read a fourth-wall break, and you executed it perfectly. This piece is very honest while also maintaining a silly atmosphere, and I have to admit that it’s a shame it can’t get read on stream despite how cute it is. What a lovely subversion, Calliope! Great job!

    2. Oh my lord. I don’t know what I expected from your piece for this week when I saw that you had tried something different, but it definitely wasn’t this!

      This was so fun and charming to read! I love the idea of your various characters sitting around in a circle and picking on each other about who gets more ‘screen time’, so to speak. It’s such a creative idea.

      I like how even in a silly, comedic piece like this, your character’s personalities still manage to shine through. I think that speaks volumes to how well you’ve fleshed out these characters.

      I really liked this piece, it was such a delightful break from the norm. Great job!

    3. i-prefer-the-term-antihero Avatar
      i-prefer-the-term-antihero

      A cloaked figure appears, watching the scene unfold and ruminating on some of the events.

      “The first gnome said, patting Nyssa’s fluffy hair. “I’m totally fine with just giving you light cosy prompt stories for the year, you probably won’t be needed for any actual adventuring.”
      “…probably?”
      –The cloaked figure, holding back a snicker: Sure. Probably.

      “You mean the game with the backstory where I stab a needle into my-”
      –The cloaked figure stares, wide eyed.

      Where did she–?

      You know what, I’m sure I don’t want to know.

      It’s probably horrifying

      She probably cut her off for a reason


      *starts vibrating*

      WHERE DID SHE STAB IT

      “Nyssa’s reply was cut off as the other gnome picked her up and carried her back to the centre chair, cradling her like a baby.
      Utterly mortified by the scenario, she glanced over to the other characters sitting round the table. Willowvine was looking at her with an adoring expression, Mary looked somehow more embarrassed than Nyssa herself was, Nyx was trying not to explode with laughter at the entire scene, and Alice wasn’t even looking, focused entirely on the meeting notes before her.”
      –The cloaked figure grins from the sidelines, once again trying hard to hold back a laugh.
      Willowvine is precious.
      Mary even more so.

      “So, that’s over two hundred words spent on Nyssa already. Should we all just say our bits now or will you be editing this later Calliope?”
      –Oh yes. Alice, you’re good.

      “Oh, gosh I really don’t think I need to say much,” Mary flustered, “my campaign probably won’t be happening this year anyway…”
      –Must…resist…urge…to…hug…

      “Hey, at least you HAVE a campaign booked.”
      –The figure looks up in surprise. Wait, Mary has a campaign booked?!?!?
      Pauses.
      Wait, wait, wait, when did everybody find out that they are parts of campaigns?!

      “Nyx interrupted, before turning towards Calliope. “I’m bored. I want to actually do things beyond my backstory beats, you know?””
      –I mean, fair, but…beats? Your backstory is full of vampires and angst, *leans in close* isn’t that all any of us really need in life?

      “I’d love to play with you as well”
      –The cloaked figure snickers.

      “We are already way over the word count for god’s sake!”
      –Ahh Alice, always the practical one. I love you for pointing this out. And I love that you were the one to point this out.

      “She just doesn’t want to edit down her precious Nyssa section.” Nyx said with a smirk, glancing over to Nyssa and whispering “Author’s pettttt…” without even bothering to hide it.”
      –The cloaked figure keels over laughing.

      “This story is probably too meta to submit to the stream anyway.”
      –The cloaked figure steps out of the shadows.”I am the streammaster! And I declare–!”
      Calmly walks over to Calliope.
      “*It’s freaking goshdarn perfect for the stream.*”
      A voice from the shadows: “Hey, I’m the Foundrymaster and, yeah, no, regardless of its metaness it’s way over the world limit. You can’t…you can’t do that. It’s not perfect. It’s…not even eligible.”
      Cloaked figure, dropping to a whisper. “*Freaking. Goshdarn. Perfect.*”
      “Also,” leans in and whispers, “when did you become a gnome?
      “Where are we anyways? What’s a nexial tower? Where’s the astral deep?” Freezes. “Wait, if you’re a gnome…*what am I?*”

      “Well you all can continue this nonsense if you like, but I’m not writing”
      –Alice, you’re aware that you’re *writing*–?
      “down another word!”

      –With Alice’s declaration, so the truth comes to pass: the scene abruptly cuts out, like someone took a tv remote and unceremoniously–

    4. RVMPLSTLTSKN Avatar
      RVMPLSTLTSKN

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      This is a fun, rompy piece, Calliope. Very meta, very interesting. It strikes me as the kind of piece that Will Wight might create (he’s infamous for putting blooper reels at the end of his novels).

      I particularly enjoyed the tease of a new character (unless I’m misreading the gnome?).

      Great character work!

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    RVMPLSTLTSKN

    The Oracle
    By RVMPLSTLTSKN (The Saga of The Deep One’s Wake)

    If it is not good for Man to be alone, then it is worse for gods. Gods are wont to wander, in time and space, having lost that mortal clock which tells you to make the most of your time. Not all gods wander, not all men do either. But most do.

    The Mother’s Oracle could not know this; not as intimately as Jabil-Tai, who had newly exchanged xir mortal clock for the need to expand borders and reach more souls. The Oracle’s rheumatic fingers clattered wooden plates together. Tai selected one, then—hesitantly—another.

    “Maiden of Scissors; something in your past, recently cut away.”

    Tai touched the gem at xir throat. Not a necklace, but a clasp to secure the furs around xir.

    “And The Mother’s Lover. You’ve lost someone, but the dead are good hands these days.”

    Tai chuckled, despite xirself.

    “That is your past. Again.”

    Tai selected just one plate this time.

    “Your present, The Skywound. What’s done is done. Again.”

    Two more, then a third like an afterthought.

    “Carnivale, the Deep, and between them,” the crone laid a gnarled finger on the third plate, “the Stranger.” Tai examined the red figure. It was vague and only somewhat human, painted sloppily. “You seem to be at a crossroads. You can celebrate what you’ve done or seek more from the unknown. The Stranger is rarely a good sign.”

    “Your mother isn’t much help,” Tai said.

    “So says the god consulting another’s oracle.”

    Tai examined her again. “What makes you say that?”

    “I’m an old woman. I know what a stranger looks like.”

    “That looks nothing like me.”

    “You’re a stranger.”

    “What are you saying?”

    “Do you think I can’t see past your guise?”

    Tai fingered the gem again. “Where can I find your mother?”

    “The Deep then.”

    “Why did she leave?”

    “She felt the need to. I am near to her, nearer everyday. Soon my daughter will shuffle my deck and my granddaughter will teach her daughter this craft. And I will aid them from the Beyond. This is life’s cycle.”

    Tai looked again at xir present’s depiction and smiled.

    1. Calliope Rannis Avatar
      Calliope Rannis

      Ooh, this was an intriguing one. I do like me some tarot reading scenes, and you did a good job of indicating what these alien cards would mean for Tai too.
      Well, I say cards – they are actually wooden plates apparently, which does create this specific earthen image in my mind of what the cards, and the scene itself, look like. And the names of the plates are evocative enough that I can almost imagine what their imagery look like too. This story was good food for my imagination, in general. ^w^

      It’s also interesting how the term ‘Stranger’ is used in this piece – it’s something that Tai is, and that the Oracle can see, but the reader never gets to see what looking like a Stranger actually means. The most we get is the plate of the same name – somewhat human, but obfuscated from further detail by the sloppiness of the painting. Once again, it leaves a lot of room for wondering!

      Finally, I did very much like the description of the Oracle’s cycle at the end. Unlike many cycles of fate, this was a comforting one – of family bonds and support and sustanence, even for those that have already died. And the Mother, presumably, being the goddess at the very start of that chain.

      Great work Rvmple! 😀

    2. Alexander Lewis Avatar
      Alexander Lewis

      I like the way this piece settles into the fortune telling, properly mysterious and vague. I also like how this sets up for the next part, whatever that may be, and hints at a broader world than we see.

    3. This piece was so interesting, I don’t think I’ve seen either of these characters before?(Forgive me if I have). I’m definitely intrigued though, I’m curious to learn more about them.

      ||Soon my daughter will shuffle my deck and my granddaughter will teach her daughter this craft.||

      This is a very nice line, and it creates such a beautiful image. I don’t know why, but it really stood out to me as I read through.

      Great job as usual, I always love learning more about your pantheon and the world you’ve created for them.

    4. Gregovin Avatar
      Gregovin

      This God trying to get passed an oracle is quite interesting. What the Oracle says is quite interesting and weird attached to a God, and there is some implication that it may not exactly be confined to the past or present. I also noticed the neopronouns for this deity, that’s pretty cool.

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    Alexander Lewis

    As The Chamber Spins
    By Alexander (BrokenEarth)

    “You don’t have to do this.” Sasha pleaded.

    He raised his revolver, ignoring her, or perhaps he couldn’t even hear.

    “You ready?” He asked, with manic giddiness on his face. “Remember the rules, one bullet’s in here! I’ll give it a spin, and we’ll take turns pulling the trigger. It’ll be so much fun!”

    Sasha closed her eyes as he pulled the trigger. The gun clicked; the chamber was empty.

    The man burst out laughing, falling to his knees in the snow. Sasha fought back tears, the cold stinging her wet eyes.

    When he finally recovered, he thrust the revolver into Sasha’s hands and gestured frantically at himself.

    “My turn, my turn!”

    He hadn’t even hesitated when he gave the gun to her, she thought. It really was just a game to him. Sasha hated him more than she’d ever hated anything before.

    Why not cheat the game, and pull the trigger until he was dead?

    But she looked at him, still grinning from ear to ear. Despite the cold her hatred melted into pity, and she knew she couldn’t kill him. She couldn’t kill her own brother.

    But he could see her resolve wane, and for once his smile vanished.

    “If you quit, then you lose the game.” He said seriously.

    So that was it then? Become a killer or be murdered? Sasha felt herself crying, the cold biting her cheeks, but she seemed apart from it.

    “Fine.” She said, raising the gun. She knew there was no hope of rescue, and if she stalled too long he might kill her. The best chance at survival was to play the game.

    Click. Empty.

    His grin returning, and with it a merry laughter, he took the gun back.

    Click.

    Sasha wished this would be over.

    Click.

    “This one’s gotta be it! I win!” He jumped up and down, his laughter echoing, piercing Sasha’s heart. She closed her eyes again.

    Click.

    He laughed even louder, and handed the gun to Sasha.

    “David… I can’t. I-”

    David interrupted, his laughter finally dying down. Calmly, slowly, he spoke.

    “Sasha. I won the game.”

    1. RVMPLSTLTSKN Avatar
      RVMPLSTLTSKN

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      This is a heart wrenching piece. If I am interpreting the end correctly, David is less interested in the game than in abusing his sister. We don’t get to see why, despite cutting to his viewpoint in the ending paragraph, but her quandary is a pitiable one.

      For critique, I think there’s merit in staying with a limited perspective. Sasha is the interesting character in the scene and cutting to David raises more questions than it answers.

      Good work!

    2. Glaceon373 Avatar
      Glaceon373

      Alexander, this is horrifying in an incredible way. You’ve created a lot of space for empathy here for Sasha and David. The pacing and the rhythm of each line makes the suspense spiral as the plot moves forward, all ending with your last line that ties it all together. Overall, this piece feels like a lump in your throat growing heavier and heavier, but in a good way. Great job!

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