Writing Group: Where the Lost Things Go (PRIVATE)

Hello, Lost Boys and Wandering Wendys!

  Welcome! Oh don’t cry, darling! You’re safe now. You’re among friends. Just like you, no one here knows their way back home. But I think you’ll grow to like it here, because…

This week’s Writing Group prompt is:

Where the Lost Things Go

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This prompt can be equal parts gentle and comforting, as it can be tragic and terrifying, all depending on the direction in which you take it. One of the interesting things about this prompt is it’s not just about a lost person, or thing, it’s about a place. 

One of the first directions to which my mind goes is lost children. Maybe a child is crying in the woods, only to be rescued by a friendly troll, whose cave becomes a haven for them. Contrarily, you could write about a child lured away from the right path by a fae, brought to their world, and unable to leave—the child may not have been lost in the woods, but they are once they follow the call. Perhaps you could write about an orphanage; It’s a place where lost children go, but is it a place of belonging, or a place of neglect? You could even write about a child getting lost at the amusement park, rescued by a staff member, who takes them to guest services, telling them that this is a magical place where all lost things go. 

But children aren’t the only people who can be lost. Adults can too; they just have a harder time admitting it—whether it’s figurative or literal. You could write about a couple in the car having the quintessential “You don’t know where you’re going!” argument. Perhaps they land at a truck stop, and the guy at the cash register laughs because they get this a lot. You could write about a lost mind; the ravings of a lunatic in an asylum, or else someone finally deciding to go to therapy after a while of feeling mentally lost. You could tie it to last week’s prompt—souls can be lost too. Where do they go? 

You could make the lost things truly inanimate objects. You could write about a sock getting lost in the dryer, entering a fantasy world where all lost socks go. Maybe when our keys get lost they’re not really sitting on our counter, maybe they enter another realm for a little while. You could write about a child’s favorite toy going on to have a better life after getting lost. Maybe you could write about a collector whose museum houses all the objects the world has lost. Maybe a kleptomaniac’s house is where the lost things go…they’re just the one who made them “lost” in the first place. 

Much like my fae idea earlier, you could write about a place that, instead of being a haven for those already lost, causes people to become lost by entering it. The Lost Woods that no one ever escapes. The Labyrinth that dooms its inhabitants to wander within forever. The City that claims all who enter.

You could even combine some of these ideas. A child following their lost plush toy. An adult thinking they saw their own child self in the mirror, or reminiscing when they see their old childhood home from a highway overpass. Or a lost object wishing to return home and taking the risk of dragging its owner down with it.

My challenge for you this week is to write about a story from your real life. Go back to the painful memory of the time you lost your favorite toy as a child. You could even try to redeem the memory by telling the story of the magical land to which your toy went. Write about when you got lost in the grocery store. Tell me about the time last week when you lost your headphones. [If you do this, feel free to put (Based on a true story) next to the title, so I know you’re attempting the challenge.]

Like I said, I think you’ll like it here. Because you don’t have any other choice.

 

—Kaylie & Paul

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29 responses to “Writing Group: Where the Lost Things Go (PRIVATE)”

  1. jesse fisher Avatar
    jesse fisher

    The Light of Sun
    by Jesse Fisher

    The light of sun(?) seemed to blind me from the intensity. Was it the sun, but it does not feel like the outside. It felt stale and like the world was just not how I remember it. It felt…dream like, but how the light felt it was too real.

    Then I moved and it felt like a mountain of junk fell off of me as I rose up. How long was I down there? Where was here?

    A look around me only showed junk, well I should not say junk as some of this stuff looked useful but like it was forgotten here. Yet I was buried under the junk until my head was the only thing above them all.

    I began to move away from that place, I noticed several items that came from my past that I did not find. That was when I saw other items from the past. Slowly I began to move on and noticed other things that got me to wonder.

    If junk ended up here then why was I here?

    I’m not junk, am I?

    Nay I can’t be junk…

    It was now I noticed a screen pop up in front of me, and that caused me to jump.

    But I can feel I can sleep, then that means it makes sense now. I’m the lost part of what I once was. Or was it a version of myself?

    I mean the fact I’m here with all this stuff must mean I’m not the real one anymore.

    1. Lol this story absolutely has that “You must be mad because everyone is mad here” vibe to it and I’m loving it. Having to come to terms with being a forgotten, lost thing around “junk” that you have no choice but to equate to yourself is such an intriguing idea. That said, I absolutely feel for the protagonist here. That is one Hell of a revelation to come upon, especially with no one around to confirm or deny it.

      This packs quite the punch despite it’s length. Great take on the prompt!

  2. New to Socktown
    By MasaCur

    I woke up in a tavern. The fact that I don’t remember coming to the tavern was incredibly confusing.

    I searched my memories for what I last remembered. Feet. Getting tossed into the bath. Tumbling around in the dryer.

    “May I offer you some assistance?” asked a rather posh voice. “You look new here.”

    I turned to see a sock with a diamond tartan pattern. It’s toe had been pressed in, and as it talked, the edges of the divot moved.

    “I, um, yeah. I don’t…where are we?”

    The edges of the divot turned up in a smile. “This is The Hosiery, a tavern in Socktown. It also doubles as the adventurer’s guild for the town. I am Argyle.”

    I folded the fabric near my toe in a blink. “Oh, uh, I’m….” I stopped in mid-sentence. I didn’t have a name. Socks generally didn’t. But then again, socks never talked to one another either.

    “Don’t worry about it. You’e new here. You don’t have a name yet.” Argyle seemed to crane his body to look me over. “Thick wool thermal sock. Good tanker material”

    “Tanker?” I pondered the word, unsure what that meant.

    “HEY! I know you!” Another voice rang out in the tavern, and a white crew sock hopped forward to join us.

    I folded my fabric in another blink. This new sock did look familiar. One of them went missing in the wash a couple weeks ago, which prompted our owner to sort through some of his socks to throw out the ones that had holes in them.

    “Did you just arrive?” the new sock asked.

    “Um, yeah, I did.”

    “Isockei’d out of the dryer. That brings back memories.” The crew sock seemed to bend upwards wistfully. “Are you going to join the effort?”

    “What effort?”

    “The crusade against Demon Lord Fishnet Stocking,” the crew sock declared. “If you just got here, I bet you don’t have a name yet.”

    I shook my toe. “No, not yet.”

    “Let me introduce you to the rest of my party. You can call me Lefty.”

    1. Lee Strangely Avatar
      Lee Strangely

      This is such a goofy concept, and I love it! The world itself feels like it ripped straight out of a classic fantasy DnD campaign, while the descriptions and narration sound similar to that of a gritty noire character’s monologue (while coming from a sock no less). I love the little worldbuilding details for the socks sprinkled throughout. The “Isockei’d” line was was so clever and funny. If this was something I wrote, I probably would’ve made that the title (heck that probably would’ve been the the inspiration for everything). This story is very creative, humorous, and overall great!

  3. Lee Strangely Avatar
    Lee Strangely

    Maddy’s Favor (Life of Madness)
    by Lee Strangely

    Though he was slow to move, Shiloh eventually got up out of bed. His neat and tidy room was flooded with the beautiful yellow light of the morning sun. He then lumbered his way over to shut off his alarm… That currently still had at least an hour before it was set to go off…

    He was dumbfounded. He was absolutely sure that the sound had woken him up.

    Tink.

    Shiloh perked up at the faint noise.

    Tink. Tink.

    The sound of glass drew him to the only window in his room.

    Two more pebbles struck the pane. Looking down from the second story he saw a girl with dark hair and worn coat.

    Shiloh stuck his head outside, “Maddy?”

    “Good, you’re up!” Maddy called, “Get down here!”

    “Do you know what time it is?” he grumbled, “school starts in a couple hours.”

    “I know, so get moving!”

    “Maddy,” Shiloh blurted, “what’s going on?”

    Her chipper attitude froze, “Back in the alley before, you offered me a favor…”

    “Yeah.”

    “Did you mean it?”

    “Maddy I-”

    “Did you mean it?” she asked with dead seriousness.

    “Y-yes.”

    “Then get down here!”

    Outside, Maddy dragged him along with great speed, and no patience.

    “M-Maddy slow down,” Shiloh begged.

    Pavement, grass, roads, ditches… Avoiding rocks, hopping across streams… and climbing over a mangled metal fence.

    Finally stopping, Shiloh noticed all the headstones, “This is a cemetery…”

    “Uh huh… When you feel lost, you talk to your grandpa,” Maddy exclaimed, “I like to visit my mom…” She stepped out of the way to reveal the headstone reading ‘Charlie May Meridian.’

    He looked at Maddy, “There’s no guarantee that I’ll actually talk to her.”

    “I’m alright with that.”

    “I don’t want to make you-”

    “I’ll be fine…”

    Reluctantly, Shiloh plunged his hand into the grass. The dying breeze, the wet soil, and Maddy’s intent gaze only made him more uncomfortable.

    Eventually, he ceased, “I-I can’t feel anything… I’m sorry I…”

    He looked up at Maddy. Her head was turned away, her face just out of his sight.

    “Maddy?”

    “I’m fine,” she muttered.

    1. vellichorian Avatar
      vellichorian

      Based on the way Maddy talks and moves, I’m guessing that she is a confident person who knows what’s important to her. She doesn’t hesitate to take charge of her interaction with Shiloh. But her reaction to his inability to talk to her mother shows that she has deep emotions and needs to connect with people she cares about. Well done for revealing so much through dialogue!

  4. The Curse of Mercy
    by Gerrit (Rattus)

    Calras stared out into the vastness of space, watching stars twinkle at unfathomable distances, a comet streaking by at the edge of his vision. The ruins of Valkyrie drifted somewhere behind him. Somewhere within its hulking, decimated body lay the corpses of the crew, swallowed by flames if they were lucky enough to avoid direct artillery fire.

    Laying on his back—if indeed he could lay in any direction—Calras wondered if he was the lucky one. When the first shot blew a hole in the hull, he had been sucked out by the resulting vacuum. Left to drift alone in space, while he watched his home for the past two years be blown to pieces. He had been lucky enough to survive the onslaught, but for what?

    This was all that was left of his life, now. Floating aimlessly through the junk zone, his only company the remnants of discarded satellites and failed spacecraft. His captain had thought hiding among the debris would obscure their position, maybe provide them enough cover to evade the ship that had been pursuing them. How well that had worked.

    He was fortunate to have had his suit on when the attack struck. A few more minutes and he would have been outside the ship, repairing some of the damage they had sustained. Would that have been better, or worse? Would he have been hit directly by the bombardments?

    At his best estimates, his suit could keep him alive for almost a full day. He considered, for a moment, if that would be enough time for rescue to arrive. Then again, he knew better. Only fools would willingly fly into the junk zone. Fools like Captain Torge.

    Help wouldn’t arrive. He knew this. Valkyrie had strayed too far from the popular routes, past any sectors that saw regular traffic. This was his new home, for what was left of his life. A home among the refuse seen only through a blind eye. He wished he’d died on the ship. At least then he wouldn’t have been alone.

    1. Lee Strangely Avatar
      Lee Strangely

      Man, that imagery… And not one bit of dialogue. It’s not that everything was described with such flourish and detail, but rather what specifically was described. Not what the the debris looked like but how much was there and where it was. This is written beautifully without being overly artsy. I’m sorry I can’t really say much else or go into any detail beyond that. I really liked this story and how much it conveys through seemingly the most simplistic way possible. Very well done!

    2. I really got the feeling of isolation that the protagonist is feeling on this one, Rattus. You do such a good job of explaining the vastness of space and the loneliness that Calas is feeling as he floats there, helpless, knowing that he will die, unfound, with no one else to be there with him. This is such a bleak, sad story when one gets down to it, and you did a great job of conveying it.

  5. i-prefer-the-term-antihero Avatar
    i-prefer-the-term-antihero

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    1. Poor Jay, she just wants to go where the people go! I’m curious how she remembers being human, and what turned her into a mermaid in the first place. Is it something to do with the magical nature of Neverland, or was it more of a personal choice on her part? The fact that she finds Peter’s demonic self more comforting is very interesting. I like that she finds more solace in the real him, the one that has lost its humanity like she feels she has, than the one who pretends to be something he’s not. It says a lot about what she values, I think. I really enjoyed this piece, great job!

    2. MelodyLuna7 Avatar
      MelodyLuna7

      First thought: SSSSSSSSSQUUUUUUUUUUEEEEEEEEEEEEE! MERMAIDS!!!!!!

      Now that I got that out of the way.

      I really liked the descriptions you used in this piece. I think my favorite one was this line here:

      “To try. A shimmery, elegant thing coated in dirt, flopping around pitifully, gasping for air, all the while hoping, dreaming, the scales would fall off her eyes and body in equal measure. She didn’t care if it felt like knives. ”

      It conveyed magnificently that Jay was a mermaid without explicitly saying it. It also conveyed in a heart-wrenching manner what she wanted with a nice nod to the original tale.

      I was also very intrigued by the conflict of her forgetting her life on land. Was it the water that was causing her to forget? And how you described the memories she was forgetting made me feel for her.

      At the end, the way you introduced the two versions of Peter was also really well done: she put up a front against the fake Peter, but when she saw the real him, that’s when she broke down and showed her true emotions.

      Amazing job!

    3. You know… I don’t know why I just assumed that the only real people in Neverland were the Lost Boys and the pirates. This completely makes sense though.

      What I find curious is that Jay remembers being an adult. Or at least those are the memories that she’s mourning the loss of. Another assumption I had thought. Just figured Peter was only collecting the young. I guess it makes sense if he took the old that wanted to be young again.

      That said, I love how this is something of an Uno Reverse card on the Little Mermaid. Where she sacrifices things to become a mermaid. Though I suppose if she were to make a different deal to be human again it would be the story we’re more familiar with along with that odd caveat that she wants to be human AGAIN. Either way, it’s a really cool idea that only expands this world more.

      I absolutely loved this ending though. It’s clear that Peter does genuinely care about Jay and it’s really sweet that Jay puts on the fake front when Peter is being fake but once he’s real, she’s equally real with him.

      Loved this story as I always love seeing more of this world. Great take on the prompt!

  6. vellichorian Avatar
    vellichorian

    The Magic Place
    by vellichorian

    Timothy was seven the first time he heard the legend. The clasp on a classmate’s bracelet broke, and a dozen children spent the rest of recess digging through the woodchips trying to find it. They never did. On the way back inside, a fourth grader put her arm around the girl and told her it must have vanished to the Magic Place, where it would become perfect again.

    Later, when he was eight and a half, he read a story about a cave full of treasures that had once belonged to careless children. Marbles. Pencils. Glasses. Stuffed animals. All were jumbled together in a great, sparkling mound. He forgot the point of the story, but the imagery wormed its way into his mind where it remained hidden.

    Until The Accident.

    Lying in bed, eyes puffy and head throbbing, unable to sleep, he remembered the legend of the Magic Place. Maybe it was real! That night, Timothy vowed to find it. Libraries. Storytellers. Songs. The Internet. He scribbled every scrap of information into a battered notebook. Late at night, he pored over the notes, gradually piecing together the parts of the puzzle. Eventually, Timothy learned the secret.

    The next night, he crept out of his window and over the backyard fence into Kara’s yard. He climbed up to their treehouse hideout. He had worried her father would tear it down after… After… But he hadn’t. He must have felt like the place held some of Kara’s energy in reserve, too. He sat cross-legged on the floor, held out a battered plush elephant, and chanted the words, offering to make a trade, one precious gift for another. Before him, a glowing blue cloud appeared, a glittering and swirling mist. He watched, mouth hanging open, as his elephant floated into the cloud, and another object floated out. A faded Polaroid photo of Kara and himself as children, with matching skinned knees and missing front teeth, laughing with their arms around each other, landed in his outstretched hand. Then the cloud dissipated, until only the dampness on Timothy’s cheeks remained.

    1. This was a sad one, Vellichorian. Timothy just wants his friend back, and while the legend of the Magic Place may exist, apparently so does the law of equivalent exchange. I like the world building for this one, and the ritual that Timothy follows, only to be met with more of a reminder of Kara rather than the actual girl. I really enjoyed reading this one. Thank you for submitting.

  7. MelodyLuna7 Avatar
    MelodyLuna7

    A Murder of Woes (Lillthain, of the Shaded Realm)
    By Mel

    Otelle sat upon the balcony railing, bare feet hanging over the edge. Far below, Lillthain sprawled outwards, with Chateau Corriveau in the center. The people flowed through its streets – in and out, in and out. A steady rhythm.

    She traced the main road, then tried to lose herself in the city following branch after branch. Otelle shifted forward, the railing’s corner dug into her skin, trying to see further.

    A raven cut across her vision with a “CAW!”. She jerked back as it landed within arm’s length. Its feathers were black as midnight under a dark moon with a sheen of emerald and violet under the dying glow of midlight.

    Otelle lifted her hand to stroke the bird’s head, but stopped when a voice spoke behind her.

    “I wouldn’t pet this one, Mistress. He bites.”

    The raven lifted his beak threateningly towards her fingers. She pulled them back.

    “You could stop him, Mira.”

    “I could, but that wouldn’t be very bird-like of him.”

    “And having him sit next to me IS?”

    “I needed to find you somehow.” Otelle heard soft strides TAP…TAP…TAP as Mira moved closer. Magic evaporated from the raven like shadows rising from the grave, then the corvid fell onto the balcony floor, dead as when it had first risen. “One of us has to remember that your death is forbidden.”

    Otelle frowned. “That’s not what the law says.”

    “Close enough. If you fall, it’ll be my head.”

    Irritated, Otelle turned to face Mira. “Why are you here? I was enjoying the moment.”

    “Enjoy it another time. It’s rude to leave your own engagement gala.”

    Otelle drew herself up, ignoring the clamminess in her hands. “As Lady Heir, I’m allowed to get a breath of fresh air.”

    Mira’s eyes leveled unto Otelle’s. “Not when you’re avoiding your betrothed.”

    Otelle’s shoulders hunched forward, and she spoke in much softer words. “Our time is running out, Mira. What are we to do?”

    “That’s easy, Mistress.” Otelle looked up. A smirk played across Mira’s lips, and there was a gleam in her eye that bespoke of mischief. “We kill him.”

    1. “We kill him.” I mean I guess that’s an option, but damn, we’re really all or nothing here aren’t we?

      Joking aside though, I really enjoyed this piece. Otelle’s motivations came across clearly, and the bits of worldbuilding sprinkled in really helped bring the piece to life. I’m curious to read more about the world and how these characters found themselves in this position. How bad is her betrothed that she’d rather murder him than marry him? Also what kind of weird magic was involved with that bird? This was a great read, very well done!

    2. i-prefer-the-term-antihero Avatar
      i-prefer-the-term-antihero

      The interactions between these two are always wonderful to read!!

      First of all, did you change the name from “Ashcairn” or is this simply a different area of your world? (Or if Ashcarin is for…I’m blanking on her name, but your other vampire character, and then Lillthain is for Otelle’s stories?)

      I already love your setting from the beginning. I can feel the nighttime serenity, and understand why Otelle wouldn’t want it to end.

      “I wouldn’t pet this one, Mistress. He bites.” is such a fun line, and really cuts through the scene in a good way. This is probably reading too much into it but her going to pet the bird is almost like her accepting it into the serenity, despite the interruption, and then Mira saying he bites just ruins the serenity entirely XD

      “You could stop him, Mira.”
      “I could, but that wouldn’t be very bird-like of him.”
      –I feel like this is a very fun line but I don’t really understand what it means. Mira is controlling him, so she could stop him, but she’s letting him retain that birdlike quality…or else *making* him bite?

      Raven: *drops dead*
      Me: *surprised pikachu*
      I shoulda scene that coming, knowing their last story. It appears Mira has some necromancy powers

      “One of us has to remember that your death is forbidden.”
      –I’m not sure the context of this, but it sounds rather funny to me
      “You can’t die, Mistress.”
      “I can’t?”
      “Yeah, it’s not allowed. Says here in paragraph c, subsection b.” XD

      I’m not sure if you meant it this way, but I also find it funny that Mira tells Otelle to enjoy the moment another time…which is impossible to do with a moment XD

      “It’s rude to leave your own engagement gala.”
      –Oho! *Eyes emoji*
      And I have pretty much the same reaction to the final line. I’m starting to see a pattern here…I feel like Mira is the “kaboom?” penguin from Madagascar, except it’s “Murder?” XD

      One thing I might critique this story on is lingering a little too long on the subject of the bird and not putting enough words into the matter of the engagement and the murder, because the raven isn’t ultimately that relevant to the meat of the scene, which is that she’s trying to run from her engagement. It bothers me less when I reread the story, but it was the strongest critique I had on my first read.

      I’m curious if they’ll successfully kill him, or if he’ll actually turn out to be a nice guy Otelle likes as either a friend or a genuine romantic interest. Though, I suppose, if they’re at her engagement party and she’s on the balcony…she’s met him and decided he’s scum, or at least not the man for her XD

      Great job!! It’s lovely to see you post again!!

      1. MelodyLuna7 Avatar
        MelodyLuna7

        Thank you so much for the awesome review!

        1) Ashcairn and Lillthain are two cities that exist within The Shaded Realm. Luetta’s story takes place within Ashcairn, and Otelle’s within Lillthain. I have been working on other major locations in this setting that may make an appearance in the future.

        2) “You could stop him, Mira.” “I could, but that wouldn’t be very bird-like of him.” This line I was trying to use as a hint to the deeper story and nature of their relationship, but unfortunately, I had to cut out a lot of the other context in the edit to make this piece under 350 words. XD Basically, they’re trying to be covert about the fact that Mira has limited necromancy powers because only people related to the royal family (Otelle’s family) has that ability. The two suspect that Otelle’s family was targeted for assassination to isolate Otelle when she was young and manipulate her into being a “puppet queen” (this may change as I develop the plot more). Essentially, Mira’s trying to let the bird act naturally so it doesn’t get pinged as “zombie raven actively under someone’s control”.

        3) Raven: *drops dead* Me: *surprised pikachu* I love this XD

        4) “You can’t die, Mistress.” “I can’t?” “Yeah, it’s not allowed. Says here in paragraph c, subsection b.” That’s what I was going for XD

        5) “I feel like Mira is the “kaboom?” penguin from Madagascar, except it’s “Murder?”” Yes.

        6) “I’m curious if they’ll successfully kill him, or if he’ll actually turn out to be a nice guy Otelle likes as either a friend or a genuine romantic interest.” I have PLANS to add a twist to what you’re spitballing here. XD

  8. Glaceon373 Avatar
    Glaceon373

    Subconscious Musings
    by Carrie (Glaceon373)

    You’re lost.

    “No I’m not.”

    … Yes, you are.

    “I’m not! I’m literally sitting at home! How can I be lost?”

    We’re talking about different kinds of lost.

    “What do you mean?”

    You’re associating the word with its meaning relating to traveling. My meaning is similar, but—

    “Oh, I’m METAPHORICALLY lost. Got it.”

    Yes. I’m glad you understand.

    “You could’ve started with that, you know.”

    But I didn’t. I thought you were good with metaphors.

    “I am!”

    “… I usually am, anyway.”

    Exactly. You’re lost.

    “Because I missed one metaphor?”

    That’s a symptom, not the condition.

    “The condition is being metaphorically lost.”

    Yes.

    “… So?”

    You tell me.

    “So, I guess I have to get un-lost.”

    Do you mean ‘found’?

    “Whatever.”

    How are you going to achieve this?

    “I dunno. Kinda figured you’d have an answer, being a well-meaning subconscious and all.”

    I’ll take the compliment.

    “But if you don’t have any ideas, I don’t either. I’m just… stuck. Stuck being lost.

    I see.

    “No you don’t. I’m the one with the eyes.”

    And yet it is you who stubs your toes on table legs.

    “Hey!”

    Apologies, apologies.

    “Don’t worry about it, it was funny.”

    Does laughter make you feel less lost?

    “Uh… kinda?”

    What if you went out of your way to laugh more?

    “That’s what led me to doom scrolling. We both know how that turned out.”

    Right. Sounds like we need to do something different.

    “Different?”

    You’re lost. Let’s go get found.

    “I swear, if you wanna go hiking—”

    No, hiking sucks.

    “Mood.”

    I was thinking you take the bus three stops in any direction, walk around a bit, then catch the next bus home.

    “Uh…”

    It’s not staying stuck, it’s not hiking, and you might see some neat birds.

    “You know what? That’s the only good idea I have.”

    Wow. Okay.

    “Sorry, that wasn’t meant to be an insult—”

    No, no, it was funny. Also, your favorite coat is in that pile by the window.

    “Geez, I really need to clean up in here.”

    Let’s go get found first. That will make everything else easier.

    1. MelodyLuna7 Avatar
      MelodyLuna7

      I really liked your piece! The dialogue was incredibly amusing, and their conversation was one I found to be very relatable. It was easy for me to empathize with the main character’s conflict because I’ve experienced similar feelings. I really enjoyed the moments of humor included in the well-developed argument as well. Lastly, I liked the ending because it resonates with the things I say as reminders of kindness to myself. Specifically, I like to remind myself to take things one step at a time when I’m feeling overwhelmed, and that I CAN do the task, I just need to break it down into more manageable parts.

      Great job Carrie!

    2. vellichorian Avatar
      vellichorian

      This piece was a lot of fun! I really appreciate the way that the character and her subconscious add lightness to what are potentially some very dark feelings. I don’t know if this is part of a larger idea, but I can see it as a great jumping off point for the character to encounter *something* that breaks through the lost-ness and sends them on an adventure! I would be happy to read more of these voices.

    3. I think the protagonist’s subconscious might be forming it’s own personality lol. But then again it’s very likely that the subconscious personality is how the protagonist normally is and that’s what drives the difference. Either way I really like how this goes.

      I’m especially a fan of the humor. It is kinda funny when your own mental musings make yourself laugh. It makes the protagonist and their subconscious come across as friends as much as they are technically the same person, which is interesting.

      And maybe if we had another pair of eyes lower, we wouldn’t stub our toes! Who am I kidding? It would still happen and we’d just feel sillier.

      But yeah, I really liked the ending. It’s such a simple thing to do, but getting out a bit can help. I especially liked acknowledging that getting unlost was currently more important than cleaning up. It really tugged at the old heartstrings.

      All in all an excellent and very entertaining take on the prompt. Very well done!

  9. Constellasphere Avatar
    Constellasphere

    “Missplaced Belonging”
    By Constella

    The Archives had been an absolute travesty when Ares had begun. Books and papers were scattered everywhere haphazardly on whatever furniture available. It baffled him that the bookshelves had quite a bit of empty space but were underutilized.

    He didn’t dare complain though, it was him that had asked to repay the Archiver’s kindness. When the woman had showed him the seemingly endless maze of rooms and bookshelves, she had tried insisting he didn’t need to. “Everything will find its place eventually.”

    He didn’t understand and gave a look of disbelief. She returned it with her own that held sympathy, but didn’t dissuade him.

    Ares worked solitarily and preferred it so. He hadn’t spoken in years, communicating with others would be a hassle. It made it difficult to keep his own thoughts at bay, so he would flood his mind with titles and words and names. Patterns would also come to form, and from those, organization. All aspects of these collections of knowledge came together as they were put in their rightful places once more.

    There weren’t many ways to tell how much time had passed or how long he’d been working. It could have been months or years since he’d first begun; at some point, he’d been woken by the Archiver’s pleased sounds. Opening his eyes and raising his head from the table, Ares saw the woman prancing about like an excited child. Yet every part of her, from her long white hair to the train of long feathers that followed behind her, flowed with elegance gained over a long lifetime.

    The young man turned to the bookshelves now lined with materials. Despite being the one to accomplish it, a part of him couldn’t believe this Herculean task was now complete. In a way, the Archiver was right, they had found their rightful places.

    Ares knew he should have felt some sort of happiness; relief, victory, content, something. He wanted so desperately to share in his employer’s celebrating, but couldn’t bring himself to do so.

    He could only gaze upon the books with envy.

    1. Glaceon373 Avatar
      Glaceon373

      Oooooh, the worldbuilding here is incredibly intriguing! I kinda want to visit this Archive now, especially after knowing how much time Ares spent organizing it all. But at the end of it, he just wants to have a place in the world as well, like the books on the shelves. It’s beautiful with a nice twang of sadness. Your descriptions really sell the meaning, too. Overall, a neat story, Constella. Great job!

    2. jesse fisher Avatar
      jesse fisher

      Man I feel that, once you get something fully done and the impossible is possible yet it is just an empty feeling. I mean now what do you do? The whole reason for this is over and now what do I do? I like the feeling this gives and how Ares reacts to it. A thing to be proud of turned envy.

      All in all loved it and like to see more from this world.

  10. Ten Minutes Ago, I Saw You
    By Marx

    Cindy stood dumbstruck as she saw the little girl. The girl echoed her reaction, seemingly frozen in time.

    Both silently stared at the other before the little girl did what most children do when their emotions are too overwhelming.

    She started crying.

    Cindy rushed to her side and the girl immediately pulled her into a death grip of a hug.

    “I missed you!” The girl sobbed. “I missed you so much!”

    “I’ve missed you too.” Cindy sighed, not daring to break the embrace.

    “I don’t even know who you are!”

    “I know, child. I know…”

    The front door to the house burst open. “Elizabeth Fiona Smith! What is with all that… racket…?” The girl’s mother lost her words as she saw two strangers, one of which was hugging her crying child. “HENRYYYYYYYYYY!”

    The other stranger slowly walked towards Elizabeth’s parents as her understandably confrontational father arrived.

    “I don’t know who you two are, but you’re going to get the Hell away from my daughter!”

    “I’m Matt. She’s Cindy. We don’t want any trouble.” As Matt took another step forward, his eyes turned solid black and his magic aura became visible. “We’re here because… when your daughter was very young… she unfortunately died. And one of you… or both… made a deal with a demon to bring her back.”

    The parents looked at each other in horror before turning back to Matt. “We’re supposed to have enough time to raise her… That was the deal.”

    Matt blinked for a moment and shook his head. “Oh, I’m not here for that. Besides, the demon’s dead. You’re off the hook. But… the thing is… the soul that went into your daughter’s body… was Cindy’s first.”

    Matt could feel the couple’s fear returning as the mother grabbed Matt’s hand. “Sir… please… We can’t lose her. Not again…”

    Matt nodded as he watched Cindy look at him over Elizabeth’s shoulder, confusion clear in her eyes. But said confusion slowly turned into determination as she continued consoling her.

    “Actually… I… think she’s going to be very well protected from now on.” Matt said, smiling warmly back.

    1. Glaceon373 Avatar
      Glaceon373

      This story is walking the fence between adorable and incredibly depressing, and I’m here for it! I’m not incredibly familiar with this world, but I was still able to understand what was going on. The touching moment at the beginning with the little girl not even knowing why she missed Cindy, coupled with the reveal at the end, was incredibly clever. The dialogue is also on point. A very well-written piece, Marx. Great job!

    2. jesse fisher Avatar
      jesse fisher

      Well that is one way to just go and show how lost things find a way to strange places. I also love the whole tone of the piece, we get a fun tone at the front following a twist that we did not know and then two more after that ends back when were we started.

      All in all loved it.

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